RSTL CHAMPIONSHIP!!! Champ: Sacrifice 9-1 vs. 2. Street Poet 4-0

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  1. Insanevillian

    Insanevillian STILL in CHARGE

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    RSTL CHAMPIONSHIP!!!

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    RSTL RULES AND REGULATIONS

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    The Standard League Rules will still be Enforced

    Due Dates

    VERSES DUE: Saturday, 11:59PM PST/2:59AM EST
    Verses posted after the deadline will not count!

    VOTES DUE Monday, 11:59PM PST/2:59 EST
    Votes posted after the deadline will not count!

    • Check-in (Posting in your match to show that you are aware the match exists) is encouraged but not required.
    • Verses must incorporate at least one of the provided topics and must be at least 16 lines and must not exceed 64 lines.
    • Anyone who does not post at least 4 rap lines, incorporating at least one of the provided topics, is considered a no-show.
    • RECYCLING IS NOT STRICTLY PROHIBITED. You may not use any verse that you have previously used within the league at any time. Whether it was a no show, tournament verse recycled for the league or visa versa or any verse that have ever been used within the league perimeters.
    • During check-in, you can ask your opponent to agree to a line limit (Minimum 16) and if your opponent agrees, Moderators will hold both participants to that limit.
    • Posting between 4-15 lines is considered a “show” but will not result in a match. If you post 4-15 lines, and your opponent posts between 16-64, you will lose the match but you will remain in the league. If you post 4-15 lines, and your opponent does not show, you will “Win by no-show”.

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    Topics: http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?p=14176391#post14176391
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  2. SacriFICE

    SacriFICE TRUspeak

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  3. SacriFICE

    SacriFICE TRUspeak

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    A True Story

    "We all make choices in life, but in the end it is our choices that make us."

    I can't believe I thought it, of so many words spoken,
    My heart beating, screaming, while leaving hers broken
    .​

    War of Words
    The silent echo, vibrant in all it's kindness.
    Violent in all its mindless and selfish reliance
    Melted inside this body of mine, the death toll
    Despite the perfect words of peace the pen wrote
    -increased. Instead foes were left known as beasts.
    My sword rose to meet many, I drove the piece forth
    Exposed a weak source and those fiends were forced
    to meet death, deceased yet, only the sword
    knew the character of man enough to stand up
    and reprimand the trust, with a bland lust
    To hand cuts to any unwilling recipient
    Fulfilling the mission with a chilling precision.
    I was only a youth, far from knowing the truth,
    -hard was showing the troop a heart growing improved.
    Now I'm striving for survival in denial of my actions.
    Alive to see my rivals die for a fallacy.
    Piles of bodies surrounding me, allowing me to ask if
    Life could be different would I take a separate passage?

    I can't believe I wished it, of so many words spoken,
    My heart beating, screaming, while leaving hers broken
    .​

    Sweet Tears
    I break my bones while she waits at home,
    praying so the ancient crows don't take my soul
    The faintest glow from the lake is shown
    Like God saw the atrocities and escaped the globe.
    Something must give, the struggle is fierce
    I fumble and fear the falling in this puddle of tears
    Appalling is the numbing, my ears wondering here
    If what they hear is really as utterly disgusting and clear
    I was only a man, close to knowing the truth
    though it's only a bruise, slow, exposing its roots...
    Now my dignity filters an emotional conclave
    Mind caged because of many reasons she's not safe.
    So I pray to God for the light to witness the road's finish
    If not I'll continue to show indifference to no limit.
    I traveled through the cold mist so indignant
    A sus.p.i.cious show of wishing a broken rapport.
    Going forward, asking my soul where to focus the sword.

    I can't believe I've done it, of so many words spoken,
    My heart beating, screaming, while leaving hers broken
    .​

    I Lied
    Approaching that old decision of a cold tradition
    A blizzard snow condition quickly froze my image
    No witness told depictions of a close description
    In fact, no witness had made it alive
    I was patient and tried taking my time
    But, as sacred as God I went crazy and died.
    Waking to find my body trapped in catharsis
    A light in my peripheral flashed into darkness
    Des.p.i.cable acts are the hardest to craft into shards
    of truth, I scarred the mutually exclusiveness, roots
    of beauty in us, usually plush now crucially ruptured.
    Maneuvering structure to evil, vague and deranged
    I changed... heart beating, speaking and placing the blame
    MYSELF... the admittance, I made it with haste
    As she cried, nails like rain, painting my face
    As she tried, understanding why, I struggled answering
    Dusk in the sky, clouds demanding sun to arise
    Nebulous clusters of regret taking shapes of lament
    Creations of depth... like my body placed in cement

    Shadows Of Your Thoughts
    Tasting the death of that once traditional love
    Tears screaming for release, pores trickling blood
    The source pounding, as she proudly performs her horse mounting
    Still trying to get why I chose the sword of immorality.​
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  4. ConstantFlows

    ConstantFlows New Member

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    A debtly rabbit hole

    Plastered to heights he started to rattle his vice
    A tacky ass guy who dressed in khacki's with ties
    racking snake eyes until his drink practically dried
    Grabbing the dice as to dampen his sighs

    Two fingers crossed...and the other three?
    Sundering around the glass that he's guzzeling
    struggeling to find his cup among the drinks
    thoughts being focused on just winning

    shootin all craps
    dwindelling the loot in his stash
    Betting wrong till his debt is long, proving the stats
    People boo him to pass until he gets a seven
    the one time everyone bets against him

    Luck doubles the sum of his dough, stunning the folks
    Knowing no end and going all in like moneys a joke
    hitting a hot sweep with eleven's sittin the hot seat
    Flipping his loss streak and insisting he's godly

    with a gorge as his pot he starts ordering shots
    ones short of the top, and I'd Normally watch
    But I couldn't afford him to stop
    So I offered for me to "Pour you one boss"
    The horror consumed and he poured himself two
    the gore and the doom he looked forward to soon
    exhorted and bloomed as his face morbidly viewed
    a force that he knew for performin a few
    cou de grâs,
    he took the dice and threw'em hard
    His ruined heart hoping that luck knew its part

    The reason for this was that Ethan owed chips
    to grown ups called loan sharks and people of cliques
    and this week on the tenth he'd cease to exist
    if his feeble attempts didnt reach their limits
    Taking loans so he can get wet and then bet
    then barrowing elsewhere to settle his debt
    the streets became tired of lending him checks
    and getting upset when he'd tell'em 'don't fret'

    So they desired to get rid of a problem
    Givin' him options but all he did was just taunt'em
    With the desire to live unforgotten
    So they pissed in his coffin and ordered at midnight to off him

    And when we locked eyes he sped off like flies
    Sensing my ties to his ending life lines
    Paranoid of this scary void, he travels the street
    Spending the remains of his money to cash out his dreams
    Just an unlucky rabbit it seems looking for carrots to eat
    Or Karats of peace, but in this language he's absent of speech
    His eyes graphically leak, his vision is blackened with streams
    Of light wrapping this scene of a lost cause unmasked to nothing
    Wandering into bars looking as dragged as can be
    For the first time other people seemed saddened and weak
    Everyone in gravity's reach was trapped so they'd see
    A warm, compassionate theif, persuaded by savage money
    The root of his evil, and roothlessly people persue this with lethal
    Choices,
    and just like his, they may choose to be feeble
    A Vegas hooker gave him pussy for free and pushed it with glee
    Some other guys that stumbled by hooked up some drinks
    Ths luckiest day of his life wasn't displayed on the dice
    That's what was missing - love that made him feel nice
    He found serenity in his enemies as they chopped off his limbs
    The pain tortured his brain, but not feeling as lost as he did
    His killers were steered differently with him pillaged and weird
    Even they vowed to be good people as they slit off his ear
    He didn't have any friends in life, but his death was the cause
    Of getting applause for the very the last breaths from his jaws
    It was because in his very last seconds, he saw
    That if he would talk about more than losing, he'd win after all

    All human actions have on or more of these 7 causes(in order of appearance by stanzas): passion, nature, chance, compulsion, habit, reason, & desire
    Aristotle
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  5. SD-11

    SD-11 The Iron Curtain

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    [hide]DAMMNNN!!!! sickkkkkk battle, from both sides...

    aight ima break it down like this...

    Flow: Tie, yall both had some really nice and smooth flows..i think the fact tht they were both crazy lyrical made the flow much better..

    Multies: Ummmmm....Streetpoet...yall both had crazy multies but in poets it juss showed a bit more...i love lyrical peices and these were both veryyyyy lyrical..i loved it...

    Imagery: SAC....u had those crazy images tht juss put a nice mental picture in my head when i was reading it....Street, urs had a nice story type layout, but i felt the images SAC was spittin...

    Vocab: SAC...you took it here...nice vocab, street didnt have anything too special in this category...

    Overall: ima go wit SAC here...yall both came REALLLLY strong in this battle, and it was almsot a tie, but ima choose SAC cause i loved the images his verse displayed and with the nice vocab and some sick flow, all put togethere made this verse VERY nice...

    Good job from both ends, enjoyed reading this battle very much, but im goin wit SAC...

    vote = SAC

    ez...

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  6. HellRzah

    HellRzah PurE EviL

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    [hide]Very close battle y'all, breakin it down:

    sac: very nice flow...content was fire..I like the 3rd part the best...story was true and heartfelt..definately championship match ish right here...nice and original approuch to the topic...good ish

    points: 90/100

    Poet: Flow as good as sac's..no flaws there...I loved the way you used your topic..good content..I thought the best part was the beginning (it kinda fell off at the ending)..overal nice piece..stay up

    points: 81/100

    vote= Sacrifice[/hide]
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  7. Got Life?

    Got Life? Resident Megalomaniac

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    I have strong biases against both Pent and Sac so I shall refrain from voting.
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  8. Dreamcaster

    Dreamcaster Welcome to My Mind

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    Sacrifice
    The flow of this was just dynamic in the way it developed the relationship. I loved the way you used each topic to let the natural scheme unfold in sections of their emotional connection and then disconnection. By the time I hit the end, I wanted to applause it a little bit. lol, but I really did.

    Pent Up
    To be honest, when I first read Sacrifice's poetical scheme, I thought it was over and was just going to read yours to decide why you loss. Then I read yours and I'm even more lifted than I was after reading his. The flow was so descriptive and carried everything from one point to the next. The vocabulary was nice, maybe not as nice as his, but I still liked it. Your view of the topic when I saw what you were writing about was over the top for the score. Creative and the ending was awesome. Loved how he became happier in death than in life to die a happy man.

    I'm gonna have to re-read this and get back to an answer later. Right now I see it as a tie. Can I do that?

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  9. iLLweezy

    iLLweezy ILLWeeMaN

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    [hide]Let me start off by saying great battle, and now I know how to HIDE my vote.. Lol

    Sacrifice - I've never heard of you man, but I can see why you are the champ right now no doubt. Your flow is nearly flawless, and with your heavy use of multies, it made for an extremely smooth read. I did however find myself losing track of your story in your rhymescheme, so I would go back and re-read that section. I like what you did this week though. You combined an abundance of topics and made them work well together. I guess the whole Bridge thing is getting common. Very nice the way you did it, though. Changing the one word that made that whole bridge change meaning. Overall, excellent verse. I don't know what else to say man..

    Street Poet - I must say, I didn't really expect you to have that 2nd topic at the end, and I had to look back in my head and see if you used all 7. *looks back* yep - good job with it, though. I really enjoyed your verse, but your flow was very choppy throughout. Sometimes on point though. Told a decent story as well. Overall a pretty solid verse I must say.

    This battle came down to who was more appealing to the reader.

    Vote - Sacrifice

    Good battle guys.
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  10. MrMister

    MrMister Urizen

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    [HIDE]vote - Sac

    Sac - this was a nice piece man the vocab really stood out had me
    scratching me had a few times I liked the flow and how you told the story
    but to me the story seemed kinda vague at points and just seemed to be strung
    together but you brought it nicely tho and I liked those I though I did lines inbetween that gave it a extra vibe all in all nice piece

    Street - nice piece the beginning was kinda choppy and I couldnt
    quite get the flow you tried which made it hard to read
    but I did like how you told it and that the dude was literally betting with his life
    that was a nice scheme but for a story telling it seemed like you used
    the leave you think approach which is what you do
    but it kinda didnt fully work out on this piece so

    nice battle both came with good pieces but I feel Sac took this one
    because I his piece impressed me just a bit more[/HIDE]
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  11. Mr. Mynd

    Mr. Mynd The British Guy

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    Just wanted to see how this one was playing out, sick verses from you both though man. Truly dope.
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  12. TheReturn

    TheReturn Life of the Party

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    Well, I've pretty much broken down each of your verses to y'all on AIM so I'm gonna pull a Baron and just peep in. I definitely agree on the dopeness of both verses too.
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  13. archive.

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    Street Poet

    story was very well written.....but a lil cliche for me....i sorta knew where the story was going i got thru almost half of it....scheme was ridiculous and the flow was on point...also ur imagery was very much on point

    with a gorge as his pot he starts ordering shots
    ones short of the top, and I'd Normally watch
    But I couldn't afford him to stop
    So I offered for me to "Pour you one boss"
    The horror consumed and he poured himself two
    the gore and the doom he looked forward to soon
    exhorted and bloomed as his face morbidly viewed
    a force that he knew for performin a few
    cou de grâs,
    he took the dice and threw'em hard
    His ruined heart hoping that luck knew its part​


    this was my favorite part...as it showed the turning point in the story...good read nonetheless...but what just bugged me was that i could drive thru ur story with my eyes closed....knew he was gonna be dead by the end....


    SacriFICE

    real nice story....flow was a lil weird in places, to me at least...but ur scheme was nice.....story was nice....i had to read the whole thing to get the whole picture as i was confused as hell at first....

    my favorite parts of ur story my the italicized couplets...which were navigational tools in my eyes for ur story....and also the incorporation of the different concept leads to make it all one cohesive story....my fav written part was


    I Lied
    Approaching that old decision of a cold tradition
    A blizzard snow condition quickly froze my image
    No witness told depictions of a close description
    In fact, no witness had made it alive
    I was patient and tried taking my time
    But, as sacred as God I went crazy and died.
    Waking to find my body trapped in catharsis
    A light in my peripheral flashed into darkness
    Des.p.i.cable acts are the hardest to craft into shards
    of truth, I scarred the mutually exclusiveness, roots
    of beauty in us, usually plush now crucially ruptured.
    Maneuvering structure to evil, vague and deranged
    I changed... heart beating, speaking and placing the blame
    MYSELF... the admittance, I made it with haste
    As she cried, nails like rain, painting my face
    As she tried, understanding why, I struggled answering
    Dusk in the sky, clouds demanding sun to arise
    Nebulous clusters of regret taking shapes of lament
    Creations of depth... like my body placed in cement​

    ur imagery is amazing..nice shit

    all in all it comes down to whos story i liked more since both opponent are almost evenly matched...ima have to go with SacriFICE.......nice battle fellas [/hide]
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  14. Ref #1

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    Mr. Sacrifice

    This was very creative sir, I liked very much how you put together all the different topics into one single bit, the writing read like butter all the way through and I wish there was more simply because I liked reading it so much.

    Mr. Street Poet

    This was also a very very elaborate take on the topic at hand, piecing together each part of Aristotle's statement as a differenet segment of your writing. The only thing is I think this made the piece a little bit choppy in having to understand that at the end.

    I will vote for Sacrifice because his writing was slightly smoother.

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