RSTL #1 Contendership: 3. Atheist Vs 4. Richard Corey

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  1. Nebz

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  2. Atheist

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    Check, check, check.


    Richard, would it be possible if I had an extension until Thursday afternoon (UK time which means it would be Thursday morning in the USA) to post my verse, because a decorator is coming in five minutes, and my computer must be disconnected, so I have no internet access until Thursday.

    Please, would that be possible? I promise to make this match fire.
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  3. Richard Corey

    Richard Corey battle like a savage

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  4. Richard Corey

    Richard Corey battle like a savage

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    OH NO PROBLEM!!!

    I didn't even know I was in this thing! I thought the season didn't begin again until after the tourney... Whoa, this is going to be hectic.

    but yeah, Post Thursday, by all means. I'll need the extra time, myself.




    okay, we have a problem...

    Isabel. Y'know...that whole hurricane thing. What I'm going to do is post my verse I wrote for the tourney...it's using an approved topic, I just may not have power later on to write a totally new verse. I hope this is okay to do...
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  5. Richard Corey

    Richard Corey battle like a savage

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    Okay, this is the third installment to a series I had been writing. It's a metaphor for a lot of things, mostly the current rush to nuclear war. Please, just keep an open mind...

    Alive III — Valley of Shadows

    We last left our hero, he was walking through the wasteland, carrying his brother, the only other survivor in a nuclear attack. Among the dead and dying, he falls deeper into the battle-field, the war of false gods…



    What man renames himself God and claims the axe of Thor,
    and buries it in his thorax and poverty-scorched hapless shores?
    Crimson lightning flashed, as acid splashed in smolderin’ rains
    I carried my dying brother on my back, to ‘shoulder the pain’
    The air was suffocated with snow, as white sheets split the sky.
    Warm flakes of ash, without a storm break, whizzed on by.
    "… Hell always looks prettier in Christmas time,"
    my brother’s distant sigh, as radiation death kissed his mind.
    The shakiest steps, I moved through War’s irradiated breath
    of air, from Aries’ scary death-emaciated chest…
    pass the fried bastardized children of a whore atom bomb
    laid torn, scattered on the White House war-ravished lawn.
    To the Capital where kids evaporated on the National Mall,
    the intense heat printing their shadows on the back of the walls!
    The shadows … they seemed to almost breathe, cackle and call
    Shadows of past acts of evilness, the evilest happiness-sabotage
    The deceitfully discreet blissfully ignorant works of camouflage
    of the phases of hatred’s pubescent faces, Satan's analog!
    THE SHADOWS!! Pain and slavery’s venom, slathered in them.
    Shadows of victims eyes, victimized by holo-costly chattel systems…
    Embattered, they coughed; shadows on Lincoln’s blackened bust
    I watched them gather and crawl across the walls… after us!

    I fled through the red rain, the shadows screaming in dead pain
    Until my head ached, straining from my brother’s undead weight!
    They angrily danced to African rhythms and Mayan sing-a-longs
    I ran amidst the throngs, through shadows of burning synagogues!
    The Negatives of deception and false god ‘erections,’
    raping and desecrating the purity of moral insurrection…

    I collapsed and the shadows attacked, happily snacked and slashed
    Feasting on me, jaws actively and rapidly rabidly snapped!!
    I screamed, seeing my arm severed at the elbow joint, and my
    legs shredded in ruby fountains, by eyes, hellish points of light!
    I covered my brother, unconscious through the horrible haunting
    But when I turned …we were alone under a loose sauntering awning…

    We were covered in white ash. Aries’ painfully beautiful snow fall
    carpeted the dead and the illusion shadows, gnawing my clothes off.
    I leaned against the wall, in my own vomit, my brother in his,
    dreaming about a White Christmas

    before all this…
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  6. HighPawTheCyst

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    brilliant...i just want to say you are one of the most talented heads in the rstl right now, props man
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