Round 1 : Mic-Illah Vs. OohGots (Mic Wins)

Discussion in 'RSTL Grudge Matches and Tournaments' started by Lucifa, Nov 2, 2008.

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  1. Lucifa

    Lucifa Viva La Eva

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  2. Mic-illaH

    Mic-illaH aka paisano

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  3. Atreyu

    Atreyu New Member

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    forgot about this but im here.dropping by tonight.
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  4. Mic-illaH

    Mic-illaH aka paisano

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    "Moment of Silence"


    So innocent, so much life to live
    Ironic isn't it? The absence to the wife and kids
    Friends and family, that were connected emotionally
    Now ashes scattered at sea, collected with the ocean breeze
    Those potent seas now have inherited another
    Human being but that fleeing soul was my serogate brother
    But I cherish the clutter of memories, trapped in my brain
    But the fact is the same, He died when that accident came
    Enduring maximum pain, not blood brothers but siblings at heart
    Why?!? ........How could God break us Christains apart?!?!
    This distance has sparked emotions that have grounded my sight
    He's not here but its clear, he still seems to be surrounding my life
    And I take this time, this moment, that is dedicated to you
    Elevated by truth, air escapes my lungs and i'm faded to blue
    And this moment of silence.... in your name, its soliciting my fear
    As I try to give honor, but all I hear is you whispering in my ear.....
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  5. OohGots

    OohGots fuhgittabouttit

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    Is this worth it? bubble bursted and feelin worthless
    Far from perfect, collectin a check signed in cursive
    Was so assertive, chose a career I thought I would love
    With business attire consistin of shorts and some gloves
    Hugs from my fans but do they understand....outrageous
    Face it, I'm makin other people rich on bets in Vegas
    Famous, but it comes with a price and the token shows
    Every couple of months, lumps..concussions...and a broken nose
    Memory loss, blurry vision, flashbacks...job doesn't say
    That I'll be forced to retire at 28 with no professional resume
    No job skills, No future, no nothin....this is lookin past grim
    It's like, become famous overnight and tomorrow your a has been
    Lookin into this mirror, just got done takin all these hits
    Contemplatin my future, wondering if I should call it quits


    quick key, its late...does this count? And Lucy - can you put that picture in here of the guy with the tape of above his eye - i dont know how to do it.
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  6. 2triple0

    2triple0 New Member

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    vote: Oohgots

    Oohgots- This was kind of a disapointing battle for me. But these verses looked like they were just keyed up. You had some hot lines like the Vegas one. And you had good ideas for a boxer and what he might be going through. I thought there was some good stuff coming from you.

    Mic-Illah-This was a deep emotional piece about someone who had lost their brother to the sea and is learning how to live with the emotions. I thought you did a nice job of portraying that, and its nice that you could have such great feeling come out of your piece. but i thought you did start to get off topic a bit towards the end of this and thats why i had to give this to oohgots.
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  7. Lucifa

    Lucifa Viva La Eva

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    for such short verses this wasn't as bad as I thought it would be ..

    Mic - I quite liked this piece .. the emotional value drew me in and you conveyed that pretty well with your wording .. with it being a short verse it quite obviously lacked on some information that would have helped to engage the reader in the overall plot .. but what you did give was a good little read that had a heart warming tone to it ..

    Gots - not a bad little verse IMO .. I liked your take on the image and how you kept everything on topic with the piece .. again .. this suffered the same problem as Mic's because of the length of the verse but overall I felt it was a decent read ..

    Overall - this is pretty close tbh .. either of you could win this depending on what the reader takes from each piece .. as I think the more interesting piece is with Gots whilst the more intriguing verse is with Mic for me .. I do like emotion in pieces and whilst Gots' wasn't emotionless I do feel Mic tips the scale in his favour for what I like personally .. so ..

    Vote = Mic-Illah
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  8. PERTAiN2LiFE

    PERTAiN2LiFE sheesh the rapper

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    I read this the other day and thought I voted.

    Vote - Oohgots

    Mic-illah had a decent verse. But for some reason I couldn't attach myself to it.
    Ooh had a tight drop imo. Thought it was a good twist to the picture.
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  9. Lucifa

    Lucifa Viva La Eva

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    Votes tied due to technicality.
    Next Vote Wins It.
    Round 2 doesn't go up until this gets a winner.
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  10. Pent uP

    Pent uP I'd Like to Fight Ten Men

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    well this is a pretty nice battle

    ooh - i've seen this done a handful of times - alot more original than what illah did. your flow was smooth but the read itself on certain parts was forced - as in to say u cut in and out of thoughts to keep a scheme going. there were certain instances of where I felt the ideas were fresh and others that werent. basically a verse teetering on opposite ends of the spectrum at different times for me.

    Illah -- I like your flow alot - it was equal to Ooh's but it kept a linear thought process which made it all the better to me. the topic you chose was something thats been done alot before. because of the short length of your verse I dont feel like you opened yourself and your true emotions up enough - however you did construe what you had to say well. pretty consistent verse.

    based on the short length of both of theses verses, and what both brought to the table i'm going to vote

    illah

    because his verse shows that he would do more harm in the longer line limits to an opponent. overall better showing imo
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