Round 1 : Eternalpath Vs. Jai-Z (Jai Wins)

Discussion in 'RSTL Grudge Matches and Tournaments' started by Lucifa, Nov 2, 2008.

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  1. Lucifa

    Lucifa Viva La Eva

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  2. Jai-Z

    Jai-Z Bangem, Jai

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    Im here. Goodluck, EP.
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  3. Jai-Z

    Jai-Z Bangem, Jai

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  4. Eternalpath

    Eternalpath I am FEMALE!!!!

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    thank you u2
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  5. Jai-Z

    Jai-Z Bangem, Jai

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    Demonic illusions.
    Thats what psychiatrist diagnosed me with.
    Hallucinations. Seeing things that don't really exist.

    "What an imagination.."

    They'd say, while disreguarding the truth.
    When evil lurks, I'm as restless as a souless tomb.
    A sinister youth. I deserve these encounters.
    For mutilating this woman with child in the tower.
    I was under his power and control, scowling in the cold for hours.
    Possessed by the molding force, that left them devoured.
    Enslaved in my own skin, shackled and barred from release.
    Hidden beyond the rattled extent, of this demon that scarred me.
    It's haunting my every thought, stirring up plots of insanity.
    "Kill herrr, kill himmm", screaming through my mind like a banshee.
    To some understanding, my evauation was thorough.
    After 7 yrs of shock treatment, I pretty much became mellow.
    Then relapsed to my addiction, my prior convictions remerged.
    Bcuz the pipe dreams I did have, had nothing to do with how dick worked.
    1st it was crack and coc, the high life made things worse.
    Then it was sex and assualt I abused, when raping girls in the church.
    As I think back to the tower incodent, it was dark and foggy.
    She was 5 months pregnant and standing out in the lobby.
    I advized her to come with me, she didn't have a ride for the night.
    It was too cold to walk, and my car was parked outside.
    Green eyes and red hair, her supple breast could make Stevie stare.
    Part of her pants kinda sagged, so I spotted polka dot underwear.
    Her panting made my heart pound, as I proceeded to touch.
    Groping and stroking her pussy violently, way before she could nut.
    Inserting my fingers, her sugar walls were so soft.
    Assuming she liked it rough, I ripped her panties right off.
    She told me to stop, and just take her home immediately.
    So I drove to the tower pissed, and speeded expeditiously.
    My heart was still racing, but I apologized for mistakingly..
    ..reading her wrong, like all the women I'm raping.
    She fell for it, so I manipulated the situation with ease.
    I took her forgiveness for weakness, and asked for a cup of tea.
    She let me in, with a grin, not knowing what's next.
    When the door shut, I locked it.Then dragged her up the steps.
    I hada hand full of hair, while mumbling under her breath.
    She was begging me to stop, putting the knife in her chest.
    As she was gasping for air in pain, my eyes zoned into hers.
    Watching her pupils dialate, while the blood continued to squirt.
    Splashing in my face, as she was caughing it up.
    Telling me she forgives me, and that there's still love.
    I stopped as her breath left.... and sat still as a painting.
    Closed her eyes with my finger tips, and started thinking.

    "What have I done?? How could I do sucha thing??"

    As I broke out in a loud cry, those demons were taunting.
    And its the truth, Your Honor. I didn't mean to do it.
    I blacked out with hallucinations, that I thought caused this delusion.
    I didn't know what I was doing, I swear to god on my life.
    I'll prove it. If I'm lying, I'll stab myself with that knife.
    What I did was unthinkable, I know that now.
    And yes I do feel remorse, for cutting her baby right out.
    I'm sick and I know it, but it's not my fault.
    I told you, when evil lurks? Satan waits in the dark.
    I don't know what else to say, nor what else to do.
    But if you decide, "death is what's right!", than I'll do it for you.
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  6. Eternalpath

    Eternalpath I am FEMALE!!!!

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    Moment of Silence


    After a disastrous violence we have a moment of silence..
    Different bodies dropping left and right..then came the sirens..
    Blood puddles deeper then small ponds..
    Life after death..then that means were all gone..
    Right or wrong..some eyes closed..others left open..
    Tears pouring over cheeks leaving us heart broken..
    While the next killer is scoping out their next prey..
    These predators taking out their victims everyday..
    Babies die before there first breath..
    Killing humanity off until nothings left..
    Ropes wrapped around necks..
    Suicidal thoughts collect..
    Correct?
    How can you respect? A killer of many dreams..
    A nightmare on your street..hearing the many screams..
    Sweating the many things..impossible to sleep at night..
    Even Sept 11th got us scared to hop a flight..
    Black and white..racial slurs end lives..
    Domestic abuse with husbands killing wives..
    Black on Black crime..beef in our rhymes..
    Death of a gang member..oh the city times..
    Young and old mothers..grieving..
    From there young boys leaving..
    This world early..wish they had girls..
    Until she gets raped..killed..over some damn pearls..
    Sad stories..death surrounds us with violence..
    Every second..someone dies..
    In this world..never a time with out a
    Moment..
    Of
    Silence..
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  7. 2triple0

    2triple0 New Member

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    Eternalpath-
    I thought your verse was alright, it kinda sounded like something thats been done before though. i liked the line in the beginning about "blood puddles deeper than small ponds" - that was great imagery. i also thought you used the topic well and finished very strong by tying it all together very precisely.

    Jai-Z
    This was really well written. You did a great job with wording and I thought some of those images really stood out to me. I also liked the way the plot developed, and I thought you expressed the mind of a rapist very well.

    It's haunting my every thought, stirring up plots of insanity.
    "Kill herrr, kill himmm", screaming through my mind like a banshee.
    To some understanding, my evauation was thorough.
    After 7 yrs of shock treatment, I pretty much became mellow.
    Then relapsed to my addiction, my prior convictions remerged.
    Bcuz the pipe dreams I did have, had nothing to do with how dick worked.

    This was great imagery here when the girl was being raped:

    Part of her pants kinda sagged, so I spotted polka dot underwear.
    Her panting made my heart pound, as I proceeded to touch.
    Groping and stroking her pussy violently, way before she could nut.
    Inserting my fingers, her sugar walls were so soft.
    Assuming she liked it rough, I ripped her panties right off.

    I thought EternalPath had a good verse but there were two reasons that J took this, one was that EPs verse seemed like something i read normally and also because J had amazing imagery and understanding of his characters..

    Vote: Jai-Z
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  8. Lucifa

    Lucifa Viva La Eva

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    hmmm ..

    Jai - pretty good verse .. straight storytelling and I was never disconnected from the verse .. however .. with that said .. I wasn't overly interested in the content either .. you told a decent story and told it with a good enough level of writing to take this .. I just didn't really get in to it and the enjoyment wasn't too high .. not bad but not great ..

    Eternal - interesting style of writing .. the set-up was something different .. the problem was that this was a topical that was based on content that many people will have read before .. more than a few times tbh .. some of your lines were pretty cool and you have shown you're a capable writer .. you just need to bring content that sparks more interest ..

    Vote = Jai .. just takes this .. the content wasn't the most inspiring but pitted against Eternal's rather played concept made it the more appealing ..
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  9. PERTAiN2LiFE

    PERTAiN2LiFE sheesh the rapper

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    I haven't agree with the comments said before me. Kinda took the words from me.

    Vote - Jai-z

    Both had their own unique sound but I got into Jai's a bit more.
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