Round 1 : 2triple0 Vs. General Concrete (2triple Wins)

Discussion in 'RSTL Grudge Matches and Tournaments' started by Lucifa, Nov 2, 2008.

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  1. Lucifa

    Lucifa Viva La Eva

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  2. 2triple0

    2triple0 New Member

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  3. General Concrete

    General Concrete the infamous

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    Disappointing topics, good luck.
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  4. 2triple0

    2triple0 New Member

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    Moment of Silence

    i wish you were here, can't believe it felt so real
    i can tell it feels right when you were next to me
    didn't get to see you though, but news travels quick
    and my lips burning like the wick on candle sticks
    you had me hooked didn't have to take a second look
    i'm infatuated and intimidated, but my efforts good
    never took my eyes off you when we first aquianted
    i'm only remaining in the background that i painted
    people tried to taint my life, they wanted my queen
    i turned back and learned that i'm lost in a dream
    it looked bad, but that was something i was good at
    and your priceless, my advice is that you come back
    and you loved that cuz i told you this had meaning
    your tired of seeing these guys coming and leaving
    you weren't being treated the way i know u deserve
    you didnt believe me so i had to show you it first
    now i succeed by being the one who loves u the most
    and its all a dream. i still havent seen you again
    and for me to retrieve you i've been to the end..
    lend me your hand and take me back to reality fast
    but my insanity's crashed and now i'm finally back
    i figured out where i had seen this picture before
    its my bottom and my problem was bigger than yours
    show you that if i remained back in that place...
    i could explain to myself when i had seen this face
    i broke out in sweats and i'm holding my breathe
    i know i'm a mess cuz i arrived and no one was left
    the earth stops turning and my head starts burning
    returning to that place where it had been occuring
    brought me farther down the path of demonic martyrs
    the doctor examined the detachment with my partner
    and found my condition was beyond his comprehension
    i had no clue where she was, i'm left in suspension
    she was my entire life and now all my desires died
    the flames out, hard to make out but the fires fight
    but that night i came home and saw where shes hiding
    dying to speak to her..but she can't tell i'm trying
    cuz i'm talking to the mirror where she's presiding​
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  5. General Concrete

    General Concrete the infamous

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    topic: Moment of Silence


    bathed in the hatred of men, his method is pain
    avenging seraph numb to cries of “never again”
    he walks knowing he’s better than them
    sheep with no shepherd makin’ amends with ‘Excedrin’
    humans with hymns of morals and sins
    like toys in the lap of God’s comical whim
    his soul is worn thin, by countless tests
    of higher powers’ and their farcical jests
    his cadaverous chest beating the best
    when surrounded by victims strung up in nets
    he’s dressed in bits ‘n pieces of the herded misfits
    making it his business to feed the growing illness
    he feels less, skin peels to reveal disease
    memory remains of the rusted steel in his knees
    trust kills but botched up betrayals call for violence
    I’m back bitches for a rerun of that moment of silence
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  6. Lucifa

    Lucifa Viva La Eva

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    pretty one sided tbh ..

    2triple0 - length doesn't win a topical match as a rule .. but this gave more to the reader than your opponent and takes the win for my money .. I would say that you should take more time in your presentation .. mixing "you" and "u" seems a little strange .. and the use of "your" instead of "you're" is a particularly annoying trait in text .. and I know these things bug some other people .. the other 2 mods being those most critical of grammar .. the content was fine and the read was pleasent enough ..

    General - like I said above .. the length issue is what cost you this .. your verse just didn't offer enough in the short state to really compete here .. there's a limit of 72 lines and seeing your opponent had gone with a bulkier piece I think you threw this one away with what little you wrote ..

    Vote = 2triple0 ..
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  7. PERTAiN2LiFE

    PERTAiN2LiFE sheesh the rapper

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    2triple0 had a decent drop. i liked the "lend me your hand and take me back to reality fast
    but my insanity's crashed and now i'm finally back" kinda got me.

    GC - nothing really grabbed me

    Vote - 2triple0
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