[Round 1] 1. T.a.C vs 21. Blackanese

Discussion in 'The Rapmusic Storytelling/Topical League' started by Tacky Jones, Aug 29, 2011.

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  1. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008


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    T.a.C- thedude8125
    ShadowWarriorfs- ShadowWarriorfs
  2. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008
    My dad died when I was eight
    A carjacking one night, late
    The thief pulled his gage
    And the bullet grazed
    His face, the thief triumphed
    And I was the only one home,
    So I had to identify him

    By the time I was ten we were poor
    In a low income apartment, 1st floor
    Couldn’t lock the broken door
    Leaving us constantly open for
    People to break in and snatch something
    The main reason we had nothing
    My mom was fed up, said she needs help
    Raised a snob so she’d always bleed wealth
    She made me get a job, a paper route
    Thinking I could end this major drought
    Like the cash would flood in, it didn’t
    Pay was minimum wage, she made me quit it
    Started babysittin’, I still needed a sitter
    Watching my aunt’s stepson and his sister
    My aunt paid my mom so I didn’t see a cent
    She said it was her’s, it was needed for rent
    By 12 I had a real job, had to fake my age
    And she took all of the minimal wage I made
    Everything my money bought was for her surely
    I was being forced to mature early
    And my maturation sped up at illogical speeds
    As she explained to me her biological needs
    Her hand starting to massage my inner thigh
    Trying to change the subject, “Is it dinner time?”
    She said I’m the man of the house with responsibilities
    I thought I was only responsible for rent and utilities
    But she didn’t stop, I was the target she had aimed
    And after it was all over I felt retarded and ashamed
    Afraid, but she didn’t care, the same event sequence
    Began to play out with more and more frequents
    Pleading frequently that she would leave me be
    She told me to let her do it or that she would flee
    Find a new man, a new house, a new family
    And leave me in this hell hole while she lived happily

    One day she came to my room on some other shit
    My jaw dropped as she told me she wants another kid
    I barely finished sex ed, now I need to knock a chick up
    And not jus any chick, my mom, who’s a sick fuck
    But I listened against my better judgment
    And after we finished she even called me her husband

    I watched her stomach grow, while growing sick to mine
    I have to end this shit to have any peace of mind
    This child cant be born, even if my crimes traceable
    I can no longer go on replacing the irreplaceable
    I go to my mom’s safe, where she locks her crystals
    Also the same place where she hides her pistol
    My shaking hand reaches for it, inside I hurt
    Leaving the room with it hiding under my shirt
    I call my mom into the room, everything in slow motion
    As I pull the pistol out, my face shows no emotion
    Hearing the commotion, shocked at the courage I summoned
    Watching the bullet fly and penetrate her stomach
    Blood instantly gushing as she screams in pain
    “You made me do this” as I aim for her brain
    What happened next is beyond me
    I blanked out, but woke with her brains on me

    Replacing the irreplaceable
  3. fairydance2000

    fairydance2000 don't wait, Procrastinate

    Mar 10, 2004
    I really enjoyed your verse, it flowed nicely and was smooth from start to finish
    The story was well told and complete, the rhymes nice, and the verse itself was emotion felt
    It got me in from the start and held my interest, I like that you didn’t overflow the verse with rhymes for rhymes sake. A very nice drop, a shame you had a no show but I felt you deserved a comment.
    Great job
  4. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008
  5. billy nomates.

    billy nomates. rain cancels play.

    Dec 12, 2009
    My dad died when I was eight
    A carjacking one night, late

    would've actually flowed nicer as

    my dad died when i was eight
    a carjacking late one night

    although it's not the perfect rhyme, and to be honest it's still not perfect, but just the natural rhythm of late one night fits in better than the awkward wording of one night, late. which is obviously just to get the rhyme. maybe even late at night. i'll try and remember to read the rest and give a bit more feedback. i'm a stickler for openers. sorry.

    edit: reading a bit more you fuck me off so much with the forced rhymes because you consistently show that you can do it much better. like the broken door / open for couplet. if this is a throwaway verse that you don't really care about critique for then tell me to shut my mouth and i'll fuck off.
  6. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

    Feb 25, 2008
    thanks nomsy

    T.a.C wins
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