Rocket Fuel

Discussion in 'Open Mic' started by bagglad, Jul 7, 2011.

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  1. bagglad

    bagglad Member

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    Rocket Fuel

    In the club stretch my words and sketch my verbs so
    They read better and proceed clever to microphones with flow
    Have a wish and desire to kiss and admire able to twist fire like
    the wind, as a fisherman chase trout to a place in doubt strike
    with hook and bait shook but not fake wanna a little mermaid
    blaze with stats and be amazed at a girl’s butt must get her laid
    one time dealing with a girl at the house when my feelings seemed
    aroused by strange emotions which changed my oceans and streams
    potion became extreme with kisses, felt wimpy and lame started to
    empty my brain a gradual depletion of energy, Gramma chartered a few
    I’m at two with nature trying to find the true nomenclature of earth
    Took a speed reading course now proceeding with the force and thirst
    For war and peace, have a plan to build but why do man kill is it for food?
    Bizaare and rude to take a life then can’t escape the strife of sin with attitude
    Face lonely odds only if god would give me a clear sign and steer my mind
    In the right direaction I’ll be able to find tight affection in a life’s designed
    For a wife and some wine try not to be a brisk blank because I’ll have money
    In the Swiss Bank, then I’m rapping to become rich when it happen crummy
    Bills will be paid, like angels my wings made to fly not afraid to die but
    Got A grenade and try to battle from a foxhole and watch Cox Cable bold up
    On top and never at the bottom, all our days numbered and in ways I’ve slumbered
    From the success point of view, rap a lot and annoint crews and slays hundreds
    Concerned about my route it may turn out I’m on the wrong path it’ll take lots
    Of long math to correct my foot steps because I’ll be shook need help with plots
    test
  2. Maduras

    Maduras New Member

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    I'm not really an fan of extended lines like this, but your multi's were pretty decent for the most part.

    The concept was a bit hard to follow and the rhymes were slightly forced, but still a solid drop.

    Good job mate.
    test
  3. Gankplank

    Gankplank New Member

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    Your shit doesn't make much sense bro.i recommend you go back to the basic rhyme scheme and try to express your thoughts better and stop forcing multis.
    test
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