Rock the atmosphere

Discussion in 'Open Mic' started by bagglad, Dec 25, 2010.

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  1. bagglad

    bagglad Member

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    ROCK THE ATMOSPHERE

    Have a raw plan that draw on my command of the English
    Grammar and that give me distinguish glamour to bring this
    From textbooks let you have a complex look at this illustration
    This stuff could kill a nation and and bury sadness and build a creation
    Hot and usual like the plot of a musical taking a neater stand
    Like Peter Pan so I’m caught busy like theWalt Disney land
    At home drinking mad juice but a wrong or bad use could
    Send your blood and sugar skyrocketing so its sad in the hood
    To try be energetic when in reality only a diabetic pumping insulin
    Grand into your adrenilin gland very dangerous smoking Winstons
    Lots of jazz I see but as for me except a rap song and slap a dome
    Every niow and then I feel ok, my art is fact and dangerously strong
    Like a heart attack, look when it comes to fame I earned my shot
    Because I learned a lot from a dog, how to obey and sit never stop
    Barking stay legit when outside darken then chase my own tail
    Erase my trail when I creep, my girl don’t have to know my e-mail
    Have plenty of fun with fans but anyone can do work provided they
    Are not a true jerk just a few alert to my kitchen coffee do perk away
    Right now thinking great but drinking make such fool of folks in schools
    With hopes of never becoming an alcoholic drunk in public just fuels
    Ttrouble, life is a true alarm with hardcore deals but you need two arms
    And four wheels, from the church impressed the way the gospel hurl storms
    We live in the best of possible worlds today and I’m afraid it’s true it harms
    Our economy for Christmas and gas prices has again become a fast crisis
    Got applications somehow with gatts I allow cats in shows if they have stats
    And flows enough to battle because this stuff will rattle the best so hats
    Off to skills, never panic a clever mechanic give me a wrench and I soars
    And like French doors I open up onto your backyard from your house floors
    Even be haters inside theatres but I’m a creator with much to offer and pours
    Rhymes down microphones and clowns get shown up trying to defeat this
    Because like a piece I fit into puzzles feast face legit struggles keep a list
    Of enemies

    My links--- http://board.rapmusic.com/open-mic/1254501-pause-game.html

    My links--- http://board.rapmusic.com/open-mic/1256503-first-verse-my-next-single.html
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  2. Radical Sun

    Radical Sun New Member

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    I like ya flow man. Sometimes it feels hard to follow but I think it's because the verse is all lumped together. I definitely feel ya verses though. It reminds me of just sitting on the steps spitting.

    Good stuff man. Glad you keeping Open Mic alive.
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  3. bagglad

    bagglad Member

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    thanks radical got to keep doing what i'm doing
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  4. JASON ANTHONY

    JASON ANTHONY White Devil

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    I agree with Radical when he says it's hard to follow. You have the multi's but a lot of the time I had no idea what you were talking about.

    Lots of jazz I see but as for me except a rap song and slap a dome
    Every niow and then I feel ok, my art is fact and dangerously strong


    ^
    This seemed like a filler that made no sense.

    Otherwise it was cool. Your style is sick.
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  5. bagglad

    bagglad Member

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    thanks for the props on this one for real yall
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  6. the omega man

    the omega man so, it goes

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    good shit, yeah at some times it was hard to keep flowing...

    I read these things outloud to see how they sound but many times I was caught off guard by a word or two.

    I get all your rymes, they all make sense to me...

    This is an overal decent verse...

    I give it a 7/10
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  7. bagglad

    bagglad Member

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    thanks for all the props on this one for real
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  8. M-theory

    M-theory Saint Esprit

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    You have no command over the english grammar.
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