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  1. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=755276

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    Bumps and bruises pave the way
    For beautiful scars
    Oh... they are beautiful scars
    You’re not going to hurt no more

    And you’ve been through the rough
    but when “the rough gets rough
    The tough gets going”
    And you’re my hero
    Persevering, empty evenings
    Hollow candles
    Burned downed
    With dripping wax on table cloths
    Moths that are attracted to light
    Die in their quest for life
    Never liking the night
    You hide in darker shadow
    That night cased over
    The moon lit sky
    While crying for the next day, to hear
    Your hurtfull pain and heartfilled screams
    Well you went through the stormy weather
    With your rain coat on
    And your boat that floats on water
    And I’ll take your hand
    And make you land
    In my arms, where you’re safe
    You know you’re safe
    Cause in my arms you’re away
    From a world that doubts you

    Bumps and bruises pave the way
    For beautiful scars
    Oh... they are beautiful scars
    You’re not going to hurt no more
    test
  2. Bhitiah

    Bhitiah Powerful Scriptures

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    "Moths that are attracted to light
    Die in their quest for life"


    "And I’ll take your hand
    And make you land
    In my arms, where you’re safe
    You know you’re safe
    Cause in my arms you’re away
    From a world that doubts you"


    Incredible.
    test
  3. babyangel17

    babyangel17 New Member

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    that was good i liked it
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  4. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    i really like this piece, it opens up the readers mind in a sense to the point of understanding exactly what you are trying put out. Good job in the whole imagery of this piece, i could relate to this .... bumps and bruises pave the way


    by the way your signature piece is lyrics from The Ataris, just in case you didn't know na mean, im not calling you out or anything, but i just read the whole thing about shadygrady biting and shit so i was just letting ya know, i like the Ataris alot by the way, peace and keep up the good work
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  5. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    good read allnakey, i was feeling the imagery in this piece and i can also relate to this piece, good shit

    btw your sig is lyrics from the band Ataris, just letting ya know in case you didn't already, b/c this whole bhitaih chick having a fit over shadygrady biting off of other songs. no hate dawg just letting you know i know who it is aight peace keep up the good work
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  6. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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    Moths that are attracted to light
    Die in their quest for life


    another enjoyable piece nakey, always like readin' ur work
    stay up
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  7. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    Yea... I like the ataris, I should put quotation marks around that or something, but w/e My sig is never something I wrote. But good looking out
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  8. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    So true....these lines stood out most to me.....bumps and bruises cause beautiful scares that can be helpful to someone else....
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  9. Subconcious

    Subconcious CiPrIoLa DyNaStY

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    This was really something here...I had to read it three times because I kept fading into it going off on just one thought you had. It was amazing the way you blended it all together.
    Very dope read allnakey.

    ^^Luv^^
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  10. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    Cause in my arms you’re away
    From a world that doubts you


    nice....comforting words for someone.....

    piece was nice..i like the lil intro and outo..i always wanted to do something like that in a poem

    Upin for you
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  11. I liked this. some nice imagery with the wax on table cloths, you seemed to really free your words in this piece. Take care
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  12. RRxKiLaKaZ

    RRxKiLaKaZ Battle Obsessed Warlord

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    *snaps fingers*
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  13. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    truly loved this piece.....it was strong and set quite a mood.....also full of some "jaw-dropping" lines.....wonderful
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  14. ~Eloquent

    ~Eloquent Narcissistic....

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    this was very good man...
    very solid
    someone to stand by someone no matter what happens
    thats a tough person to find
    but even though they might not always show appreciation...
    i cant think of a better friendship built then by loyalty...
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  15. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    I've been gone for a minute, but I come back and find you haven't lost a beat. You know I always love your pieces so I'm not going to repeat whats already been said.

    much love

    peace
    test
  16. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    Aight, got a question, is it supposed to be Beautiful Scars or Beautiful Scares? Just askin...Anyway, reading the title alone reminded me of "Juicy" but the poem itself was just as laid down and calculated as the song...Anyway, dope piece...just curious about the Scars or Scares bit...
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  17. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    scars, bad typo, seems you were the only one to pick up on that, even I didn't notice the typo
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  18. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    well it could still hold truth to be beautiful scares because fear is a healthy attribute at times ya know? But, just wanted to know from your perspective...dope drop like I said though...
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  19. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    Yea either way it was a good line right? lol, got lucky i guess with that typo. It does make sense, cause in both ways it works really well.
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  20. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    I was left in awe the moment I read the first 4 lines..This is remarkable ! Simply heartfelt and lovely! Excellent job!
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