Rest in Peace Grandma!!!!! :'(

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  1. quotive

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    This is the farthest thing to being unfinished there is, but I just thought that I'd drop this on the board since everybody got a lot of good stuff going on, keep up the good work yall!!!

    As I grow up, my heart Grows Number/
    I wish I could hear your voice one more time, I wish heaven had a Phone Number/ I try to be strong, but my Soul Slumbers//
    I've got to constantly Surrender to Stress/
    Why did you have to be Stricken by Death?/
    I reminisce about the good times, because those are the ones I Remember the Best/
    You had so many good elements, so I hope you Rest in Peices/
    I mourn your death, but at the same time I smile because now your soul has been Left with Jesus//
    Grandma, thanks for Givin' me the Pleasure/
    to be alive, Rest In Peace, our Memories are Treasured//
    I understand it all now, my life's Lessons Learned/
    I miss you so much, the Sickness was Vicious, but I feel a sense of Less Concern/ I know your still with me, and your love will not be Kept to Burn/
    you we're a truly Precious Worth/
    your Death, it Hurts//
    I thought to my self, "Damn, I know my Grandma Didn't Die"/
    I made up explanations, and the most Senseless Lies/
    Without you around, my days are gonna involve nothing but Endless Cries//
    The Lords actions Lead to the Questions/
    but still, I was lucky enough to even Be in your Presence/
    I think its Needless that the family has to Grieve This, you we're the true Meaning of Precious//
    These dark emotions are Hard to just Keep/
    I Hardly can Speak/
    I wish, that for the last time I could place my Palms on your Cheeks/
    and tell you how much you meant to me, these Scars are just DEEP//
    I've been in a endless Clash with the Pain/
    I didn't get to see you, damn, the hardest Task is the Blame/
    I felt a Massive Collapse in the Brain/
    I think I'm losing grip of reality, Perhaps I'm Insane?//
    I've never really dealt with Problems this Long/
    All of my pain and stress is now Locked in this Song/
    My heart is weak, I used to think my Conscious was Strong/
    I thought I could handle the pain that dismantled my brain, but to be Honest I'm Wrong/
    I guess its true when they say you never really know what you Got 'til its Gone//
    I'm sorry I couldn't be there with you in the Hospital Room/
    Not only did I lose my grandmother, I lost my Confidence, Too/
    You died around the time that I thought my Problem's were Through/
    But I'll meet you there(simple plan song reference) on the other side someday, Possibly Soon.. //
    Why did you have to die? I have to cry and Pray for the Answer//
    You we're too good to die in pain, I wish you never Came up with Cancer/
    I can't Describe Changes/
    Death test's my life, and I don't have a High Patience/
    Part of me Changed You, now your my Gaurdian Angel, and I didn't want you to Die Nameless/
    so I wrote about you in my Rhyme Pages/
    I can't mend with my Mind Stages/ ...

    I'll add on when I'm done, hope you enjoyed... Stay up yall.. Uno!
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  2. illpoetical

    illpoetical raising the bar everyday

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    you honored her well
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  3. ShadyJE

    ShadyJE New Member

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    wow that was incredible...i luv ur multies too.....can u teach me how to write that well heh....well newayz great job! n check out mine sumtime
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  4. quotive

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    Madddddddd slept on..
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  5. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Heartfelt Dedication. Keep your head up man. She's in a better place

    one luv
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  6. kyza soza

    kyza soza This way up.

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    Grandma, thanks for Givin' me the Pleasure/
    to be alive, Rest In Peace, our Memories are Treasured//
    I understand it all now, my life's Lessons Learned/
    I miss you so much, the Sickness was Vicious, but I feel a sense of Less Concern/ I know your still with me, and your love will not be Kept to Burn/
    you we're a truly Precious Worth/

    These dark emotions are Hard to just Keep/
    I Hardly can Speak/
    I wish, that for the last time I could place my Palms on your Cheeks/

    ^^^they were the stand out emotional lines in this man, i feel where ya coming from on this one. She is in a better place, death sucks...but life sucks more....RIP to ya grandma man, she'll be happy up there knowing that you've mourned her the correct way and that she has stayed in your memories...

    keep ya head up fam

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  7. ~Eloquent

    ~Eloquent Narcissistic....

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    this was very deep man
    i remember when i lost my grandmother
    on my mom's side of the family
    we were very close
    probaly the closest to anyone in my family
    and when she died
    she had been sick for a long time with lung cancer
    i couldnt bare being at her funeral
    of course funerals are always hard
    but this was so extremely hard
    i couldnt believe it

    and reply to some others and people will be more open to read you
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  8. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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    ^yea. first time readin' anythin' from u so i'm gonna say welcome 2 tha realm. nice heartfelt piece here. u put alot of emotion in 2 dis right here. i liked it n' like soul said "shes in a better place"
    stay up
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  9. This was really moving. Really felt it..

    I'm sorry I couldn't be there with you in the Hospital Room/
    Not only did I lose my grandmother, I lost my Confidence, Too/

    I would be suprised if you did not write this to music with tears flowing from your face..I have been there

    Much love, and yes she is still with you..All you have to do is talk to her..Nothing can break that bond you have..May your heart be blessed in what you have learnt, and now go on and show your grandma what kind of man you can be for her..Keep the legacy going my friend..That love you feel for her will be your childrens love when they look back into your eyes as they get older..

    God Bless
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  10. ChyllTyrant

    ChyllTyrant AmIEternalOrAnEternalist?

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    i think that this was good at as it is... but i think it could have been stronger in another format...

    rhyming seems to be to playful for such a dark concept as death...

    my opinion anyway...

    PEACE

    ps. i liked this, don't get it twisted, you did your grandmother proud...
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  11. quotive

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    "rhyming seems to be to playful for such a dark concept as death..."

    Umm, playful?! Exactly what do you mean by "playful"?

    Dang, cats don't like good rhymes, sal good...
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  12. ChyllTyrant

    ChyllTyrant AmIEternalOrAnEternalist?

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    i never said i didn't like the rhymes, i thought they were exceptional...

    i just think it would have been better to do some unrhyming expression for piece like this...

    that's my own opinion tho, obviously u thought differently, so just do you i guess.
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  13. quotive

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    mk.. i guess
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