Reflexx `Vs.` MC Lyrical

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  1. Reflexx

    Reflexx [insert cool thing here]

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    `First to 5 votes wins, 3-0 is a K.O..
    `10 lines minimum...20 lines maximum for each member.
    `A breakdown for votes is needed.
    `No hate votes/dick riding votes/crew votes, you know the fuckin' rules



    Battle verses are due Tonight at 9 P.M EAST.
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  2. Mc Lyrical

    Mc Lyrical Lyrically -Ill-

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    iight check........



    I'll slice you open and Spread your blood like Italin Dressin/
    I'll Snap your back and really have you Flexxin// -(1)-
    See i anit you i dont do my dad and have "Oral sex"man../
    You need Understand i had every thing Planned// -(2)-
    from the blades to tearing your bladder Glands,And leaving your body there bleeding/
    This is what you get for Cheating!!//-(3)-
    - Cause -
    You suck on the mic like the way you suck your dad/
    Your a dumb fuck only won cuz it was just luck, this is all just sad//-(4)-
    Ill bring the heat on you like your wearing a Heating pad/
    You white your middle names Chad,Your Faviorite word is "RAD"//-(5)- (Radical white word)
    Yeah we all know your white ,Eminem wanna be "Trying to blend in with the night"/
    Your a Disgrace to be called n Emcee Why do you fight?// -(6)-
    Pretending to be tight when your not,/
    Even if you try your not Able to "Drop it like its hot"// -(7)-
    You bound to get Caught, Gat Brought Right aimed at your chest/
    one shot, blast your organs and blood right outta your vest// -(8)-

    The way you Flow HAs me Laughing /
    Like Tickle me Elmo, you the next victim ima be Trashing!// -(9)-
    Why you acting Black?, all you doing is talking Crap/
    Trying to spit? man your shits wack, you should really Quit-RAP// -(10)-

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    Meanings for people who dont know-


    Bladder Glands - Your bladder basically the thing that holds your urin-

    White guy trying to blend in with black people-
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  3. Reflexx

    Reflexx [insert cool thing here]

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    This's a quick spar, so I'ma point out all yer mistakes
    Well the first one was uh, well that verse you made
    You dissed me pitiful kid, go re-write ya shitty rhymes
    Am~I~Cool~Like-You~If~I~Type~In-Squiggley-Lines?
    You talked alot about my dad, guess you like the dicks
    Yer so fuckin' pussy with fists, you wouldn't fight a bitch
    Yer just like a fat kid dude, "I don't wanna waste bars!"
    The only guns this kids purchasing are the ones at k-mart
    You racist mother fucker, dissing the color of my skin
    You ain't worth addressing by name, so I'll call you "it"
    Why should I waste lines on yer pathetic geeky ass?
    We can tell yer garbage no wonder yer speakin trash
    Everything you just said, YOU even know it's not true
    Give yer cd out for free, not even a police would cop you
    I just fucked you up, just call me a whore with words
    Read below of what a geek would say about yer verse
    He'd say suttin like: 'that's clever nonsense ...better stop-it'
    "I this, i'll that" dude stop saying what you could never accomplish
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  4. Mc Lyrical

    Mc Lyrical Lyrically -Ill-

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  5. Reflexx

    Reflexx [insert cool thing here]

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    Uppin' for votes.
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  6. Lauren7

    Lauren7 Pats fan since '96

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    Shit... definitely goes to MC Reflexx. Both were pretty hot, but Reflexx's had better stuff. The squiggly lines thing was hilarious, the "waste bars" thing was great, police thing, "speakin trash"... all great parts. Lyrical had a few great moments too, but nothing like that.

    Vote: Reflexx

    (I know I don't have 500 posts, but people on here are struggling for votes right now so you can count it if you want, and if you don't, at least its feedback).
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  7. Reflexx

    Reflexx [insert cool thing here]

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    It's allowed since now I know what's going on...by means of all the sleeping on of battles.

    me: 1

    him: 0
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  8. stick's ghost

    stick's ghost Tommy Johnson

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    vote - reflexx

    even though both verses sucked, his sucked less..
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  9. Reflexx

    Reflexx [insert cool thing here]

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    me -- 2

    him -- 0

    Uppin' for votes...
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  10. Reflexx

    Reflexx [insert cool thing here]

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    Upping for one more vote...
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  11. tRaVeStY14

    tRaVeStY14 Unstopable Records

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    vote- reflexx
    his shit was way better then umm wats his name?? oh yea lyrical yea dawg u sucked!
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  12. don killa

    don killa New Member

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    one more credible vote for this.....1st kid really lacked in every category..no originality,flow was choppy,his concepts were very amatuer at best and his punches were very,very weak...but what do you expect from youngstaz jus learnin the game....

    reflex was a bit more polished as far as structure and flow...he had some ok concepts but his punches could have been alot more complex....basicly i seen them all before....

    stay up fellaz....vote:reflex
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  13. Reflexx

    Reflexx [insert cool thing here]

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    4-0...K.O I guess, good job mc lyrical...keep battling like I told you too don't drop outta rap music now man.
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  14. Bonnie Bathory

    Bonnie Bathory New Member

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    Good verse reflex.
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  15. Mc Lyrical

    Mc Lyrical Lyrically -Ill-

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    ehh dumb bitchs

    im new
    atleast give advice
    insted of dissing me?!>!
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  16. Bonnie Bathory

    Bonnie Bathory New Member

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    I'll slice you open and Spread your blood like Italin Dressin/
    I'll Snap your back and really have you Flexxin// -(1)-

    Both are punchlines, neither are particularly special. Saying what you're going to do physically to someone online is kind of weird.

    See i anit you i dont do my dad and have "Oral sex"man../
    You need Understand i had every thing Planned// -(2)-
    from the blades to tearing your bladder Glands,And leaving your body there bleeding/
    This is what you get for Cheating!!//-(3)-

    You shouldn't use a line to set up a punchline unless your punchline is going to be worth it. It's wasting a line. Using this and what I said on the last line about not saying what you'll do to physically harm someone online, I get this:

    See, I ain't you, I don't have oral sex with my dad, man... But it's your plan...
    Though he always leaves your anus bleeding... That's sad man...
    But see that's what you get for cheating...

    I duno, shitty example, but it sounds better to me. Moving on,

    - Cause -
    You suck on the mic like the way you suck your dad/
    Your a dumb fuck only won cuz it was just luck, this is all just sad//-(4)-

    This is not very grammatically pleasing to the ear. It needs to flow better through the mind when someone reads it, rather than having to go back two or three times to understand. That sounded freestyled right there.

    You suck on a mic like you suck on your dad...
    Dumb fuck only won outta luck, and it's sad...

    Would've been easier to read. Rhyming one syllable words, unless the flow is uncanny, usually doesn't sit well with the readers, either.

    Ill bring the heat on you like your wearing a Heating pad/
    You white your middle names Chad,Your Faviorite word is "RAD"//-(5)- (Radical white word)

    I like this, it's funny, though incredibly inappropriate if you want votes. A lot of people rapping online are white.

    Yeah we all know your white ,Eminem wanna be "Trying to blend in with the night"/
    Your a Disgrace to be called n Emcee Why do you fight?// -(6)-

    Calling white rappers Eminem is really played out, so I don't favor that line at all. The second line doesn't really make sense.

    Pretending to be tight when your not,/
    Even if you try your not Able to "Drop it like its hot"// -(7)-

    This line is straight out of Dr. Suess land. Bad reference to a phrase. "Even if you try" is not creative.

    Maybe:
    Even if your ass was on fire, you couldn't "drop shit like its hot"

    You bound to get Caught, Gat Brought Right aimed at your chest/
    one shot, blast your organs and blood right outta your vest// -(8)-

    Nice flow, really. Terrible choice of words. Battle rappers online tend to not talk about blasting others, since we are online. Though, again, nice flow. I would switch "right" and "aimed" though.

    The way you Flow HAs me Laughing /
    Like Tickle me Elmo, you the next victim ima be Trashing!// -(9)-

    Here it appears you are saying tickle me elmo trashes victims! You have to be concious of where you put phrases in your lines.

    The way you flow, has me laughing like tickle me elmo...
    You're the next victim I'm trashing, don't be so fickle in hell though...

    I duno, another bad example, but you see what I'm saying about making sense, I'm sure. Moving on,

    Why you acting Black?, all you doing is talking Crap/
    Trying to spit? man your shits wack, you should really Quit-RAP// -(10)-

    WTF is acting black, ok? Anyway... Again with the one syllable lines.


    Overall, you need to put more thought into your punchlines, and be concious of how you are typing your bars so they make more sense and/or flow better.
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  17. Reflexx

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    ^ I'd thank him/her (not sure) for breaking yer verse down, that right there should definately open yer eyes up to what you need to improve on and such.
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  18. Mc Lyrical

    Mc Lyrical Lyrically -Ill-

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    lol thxz... ill be working on it...
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  19. don killa

    don killa New Member

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    one more credible vote for this.....1st kid really lacked in every category..no originality,flow was choppy,his concepts were very amatuer at best and his punches were very,very weak...but what do you expect from youngstaz jus learnin the game....

    reflex was a bit more polished as far as structure and flow...he had some ok concepts but his punches could have been alot more complex....basicly i seen them all before....



    ehh dumb bitchs

    im new
    atleast give advice
    insted of dissing me?!>!



    i did bro ......but i aint got time 4 a breakdown playa....pz
    stay up fellaz....vote:reflex
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  20. Reflexx

    Reflexx [insert cool thing here]

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    Thanks Don, drop more feedback if ya wanna ..doesn't matter to me.
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