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  1. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    A Long lost love ran itself outside the confines of a pen.
    So I walked away backwards
    Until there was too much tunnel to see the light at the end.
    Safe not sorry
    Contradictory to the wind
    Disinclined to tread lightly, I packed a chest full of affliction.
    There is comfort in silence
    And delight in the bat of his eyelids…
    But when the stars align I wonder- if insanity really points skywards?
    Or is perpetual direction more wild than climbing?
    Here
    This place
    Isn’t it the same place I’ve always been!
    And where are you my friend of no friend
    Between the lines
    Hiding as the seekers do when I count to ten
    Juvenile diversion I feel alive again
    This time I’m Marching forward
    But Where do I begin?
    test
  2. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    Yesss indeed. Been there before. Not again. Good to read your work again
    test
  3. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    thank you
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  4. Poetic Concept

    Poetic Concept New Member

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    At first I was thinking this would be a childish rant...but I came to like this....very inspirational at time as well as an almosy poignant tone...the indecision and self confliction is really powerful...fav part that kind of high lights all of those is...

    There is comfort in silence
    And delight in the bat of his eyelids…
    But when the stars align I wonder- if insanity really points skywards?

    only criticism u should really work on ur structure...it helps the writer move the reader along instead of forcing the reader to balance the flow by themselves
    test
  5. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    Thank you , Appreciate the feedback
    test
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