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  1. Brown Jesus

    Brown Jesus Menso is for Dummies

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    Introduction

    Sorry for being late again, I put more time into the recap this week. I didn't vote in time last week, so I wanted to give you guys some better feedback. That being said, I think you guys will enjoy it. T.a.C is losing his title this week; you heard it here first. That adds some suspense to the Power Rankings; a lot of movement. All good stuff, so without further ado, your RBL Mag.
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  2. Brown Jesus

    Brown Jesus Menso is for Dummies

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    Jai Z vs Menso

    Jai Z

    Jesus, Menso.. ..ur trife,
    everybodies slut is ur wife;
    Mosez ran into The Burning Bush, but u asked to marry Magdalen for life.

    I was digging the wordplay and the concept, but I personally didn't think it hit very hard. Creative, though.

    And u knew she had nasty twat,
    u dont get cooch so y not tap it..
    ..last time I hearda bitch flashed u her breast, u asked for hot sauce and a napkin.

    This was cool. Hot sauce with chicken breasts and hot sauce, though? I thought that choice of wording killed the flow; not that it's that important.

    U get no propz, talk mad shit,
    not to mention u suck too;
    Out of the 5 chancez u had to nail TaC, he posterized u.

    Nice personal, but too/you isn't very impressive. Is that how many times I've lost to T.a.C?

    :scared:

    Plus u stay on my dick wth hate votez,
    Ima kill him, no question;
    And put B on his back long enough to reach Blue Ivy's conception.

    Tbh, I didn't get this lol. Everyone thought it was dope, though, so I'm probably just an idiot.

    Or Usherz Confessionz..
    ..thm sideline hoez u deal wth are weak as fuck;
    Ur bitch got tattooed eyebrowz.. ..complimentz of smittyrhythm, if he ever did make-up.

    I wasn't feeling this tbh. I think your verse started going downhill here. It was good until this point.

    We were supposed to pic battle,
    but I guess he got scared so;
    Count on him to do some sucker shit.. ..like morph into a mesquito.

    Lol whut?

    Bringing up an 8 year old post was not a good look

    Thatz some fag shit..
    he hada bare breast bitch n his face and ddnt hit?
    The Farmer and The Dell couldnt milk the game for what itz worth, til he faced a tit.

    Nah

    Fly guy? Piece of shit! Lucky I dont pull picz on this geek; this niggaz grill look like a Swiss Army Knife, u could cut, stab, peel and pop a cork wth his teeth.

    I liked the line, except I don't have fucked up teeth. Still cool conceptually, though.

    I'll stick an apple n his mouth, and roast this fool from the start;
    Go HAM? Not wthout PINEAPPLEZ.. ..we all know u got Kevin's Heart.

    Wasn't feeling this. Wordplay was disconncected

    And his Magz garbage, got no effort and shit;
    Punchline Of The 'Week', is ur rhymez highlighted..
    ..if they used the other synonym for ur lyricz.

    Week/weak? And its not a syno lol, it's homo... kinda weird you got that one wrong tbh. On top of all that, the rhymes are weak.

    And yea, I was hospitalized for 11 dayz,
    sick wth the craziest shit;
    Metaphorically quarantined, u could nvr b iller than Jai asa lyricist.

    Nah

    This wetback'll get his mellon cracked, split and served to the massez;
    2 Clay's of a different pod, u Aiken to b Cassius.

    Ehh..

    I thought your first half was good, but the drop off was significant. I think Sonny said it, your best 16 probably beat my 16, and I agree. If you cut your verse before the quote, I think the outcome would be different. The weak rhymes didn't help the latter portion of your verse, either.

    Menso

    The chickens joke are corny, but I only really showed for Hens,
    This ugly bitch only take self portraits, cus she doesn't have any friends,
    Its the animal kingdom in this mufucka, who'll save ya
    Crab face bitch, ya eyes on stalks like bull traders,
    Swine nosed whore, this shit is making me cry,
    Look, its fitting why ya nostrils like the infinity sign,
    Cliche line: You broke? Its just a guess, boo,
    I swear this bitch is homeless taking pictures in public restrooms!
    Or maybe you stay in the telly, romance and play in the setting,
    Fuck a honeymoon, though... this a funeral it ain't a wedding,
    Eyes are the window to the soul... you cruising with tint,
    I hate to look at you, cus locking eyes with you is a sin,
    Undeserved ego, stfu no one gives you respect,
    So you dress like a man... and no one gives you respect,
    And you haven't beat anyone since God knows when,
    Jai was bad then and she's been awful since,

    Not doing it. I might copy/paste one of your votes in; might usually means won't with me, though. I will say my closer sucks, though.

    :scared:

    I won on votes and lost on links. It was a good battle, like I said, Jai would probably have taken the W if she left some on the cutting room floor. I pretty much won this one on technique; stronger rhymes and more consistent punchlines.
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  3. Brown Jesus

    Brown Jesus Menso is for Dummies

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    Circleplex vs Noble

    Circleplex

    this dumb fuck says he dates some bitch he met on here
    but i bet its some nerd as lame as you who googled "female blonde", queer

    Ok.. kinda forced, but good personal.

    you need to off yourself for being this pathetic mayn tryn dive out yo window
    so we can see this soldier try jumping to his death...
    ...like the first god of wars intro

    Nice. The segue was seamless from the first punch and it was a ccool nameplay.

    an if she is real? i put cash she a slut gets filled up quicker than a penny jar
    laid with no top in public dozens of guys touchin her...
    ...like they at the mall tryna win a car

    Ehh. Not feeling the execution, I think it was working conceptually, though.

    she an easy slut, cum always drippin off her long hair
    it's like blackjack; shes 20 and when shes getting hit on...
    ...its likely somebodyll bust on her

    Wording again. Read the last comment tbh.

    to be "real" you dont belong in this leagues "scene" your winsll be stuck in place
    so youll end up getting a "cut" in the middle like you messed up the take

    Nice. I don't think the quotation marks were necessary.

    nigga you so soft you cut yourself on a salad leaf at lunchtime
    you write poems for your internet girlfriend and that shit dont need a punchline

    This is what I was looking for! This line was just a good personal; setup needed work, though.

    1 strike to your bird chest? itd probebly fold yah
    cus youre like rihanna in battleships...
    ...a skinny bitch calling themselves a soldier

    Ok.

    Noble no shows, so Plex gets this one the easy way.
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    Brown Jesus Menso is for Dummies

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    Breathless vs Citizen K

    breathless

    Citizen k, this is a shame
    Getting a loss from a legitimate lame
    Keeping my record the same on the winner's side
    Give a fuck less, blame it on my sinner's guide
    A splinter spliced in the grain I'm repeatedly exposed too
    Slide my finger along the lines drunk, delete an' then repost, puke
    I've tried to catch the divine truth but these ghosts juke

    Lmaooooooo!! VotW?

    :scared:

    Citizen no shows and breathlesss loses on links.
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    Brown Jesus Menso is for Dummies

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    Gee Wilikers vs C Price

    C Price

    Your Weak And Confused Only Before Birth Was Gee In Some Woom
    He Try To Be Cool...I Said Smoke Somethin...So He Lit Up His Kool

    Decent wordplay, but it wasn't hitting very hard.

    I Said "Son Daddy Meant Weed And I Need To Get High"
    He Replied..."R Kelly....I Believe I Can Fly....?"

    Lol... nah.

    You DumbAss I'll Coach You I'll Teach You How To Run Trackz
    Or Get Bitch Slapped Witcher Bitch Ass Like What Bitch Fuck That

    Multies were alright, but the punch (?) was weak.

    you smell like sweaty balls and frito's...BullShit And Burrito's
    Callin Yourself Gee But Can't Stick To The G Code

    Lol... ok.

    homo faggot i'll close yo casket and expose this addict
    When You Croak I'm Laughin Like There Go's That Ass Lick

    Nah. You aren't really putting punches in your verse… breathless gonna be pissed at you for swerving in his lane tbh

    :jaydamn:

    Rest In Piss And It Don't Take 24 to get this brotha lynched
    Smack His Bitch With A Sack Of Shit And Make Her Suck A Dick

    Same deal: its just some rhyming, not really a battle verse tbh IMO

    Gee Wilikers

    If your pitted against him, dont even try is my advice
    Battling you is like shopping for nic-nacs, who values the price?

    Cool. Wording was funky, but it got the job done.

    U been garbage…thought them no shows was a blessing
    Telegram got sent to you and u finally got the message

    This was good, too.

    His styles old as dinosaurs, n your name is just played
    If you B.C. , then G’s the meteor ending your age

    A little forced; the concept was cool, but the wording was bad.

    Ya flow is basic and bunched
    But a Price can vary, so I should expect anything
    Except any form of a punch

    ha ha nice! I think somehow punch could have been incorporated, but this was good.

    Plus it’s obvious you came here to represent the fag scene
    Price <is one letter away from purple rain and ass jeans

    ha ha dope

    Fuck giving you the business, I’ll wait til its stocks slim
    Then leave the price at an all time high…let go and drop him

    Didn't think this was closet material. Personally, I would've switched the order of the last two punches.

    Gee clear took this one; overpowered Price with good hard hitting punches. Some of those lines would've been real nice with better wording, but it was a good effort, nonetheless.

    Gee wins.
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  6. Brown Jesus

    Brown Jesus Menso is for Dummies

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    Sonny Daze vs SanerHxS

    Sonny Daze

    Week 29: Your computer “froze up”… you defeated yourself
    Week 29: My first shot as contender... history won’t be repeating itself

    Not much of a punch, but it was a nice way to open the verse. Set the tone.

    Wack record, weird name, all I thought was “who’s he?”
    But I’d address you “man-to-man” before Sonny “D“ would let you see that “2-3”

    Digging this. Setup could've been better, but, it was good enough.

    Cuz while your opponents were no-showin’, I was gloatin’ n show boatin’
    I’m like Silva in the ring, blowin kisses to Joe Rogan.

    Not feeling this so much.

    Your rhymes are all filler, there ain’t shit that’s complex
    Change your name to Saner-H, just forget the excess (xS)

    Nice nameplay. Very smooth conceptually from setup to punch.

    Close your eyelids, my rep’s spreadin’ like a virus, with no hope to contain
    So just call me a schizophrenic surgeon for how I’m going in-Sane

    Pause. No homo?

    :scared:

    But you’re from LA, where Mexicans are a plenty
    So if you wanted props, I wouldn’t give this S-A, N-E (ese any)

    haha very nice! Really digging the wordplay/nameplay.

    The Cincinnati Red Riding Hood, shooting up Hollywood
    I call your bitch ”milk”, cuz she always do my body good

    Nah

    This week, no luck of the "draw", your chances are looking “stale, mate”
    So if you ‘Harden’, My “16s” hit like Ron Artest, you ain’t fuckin with that “jailbait”.

    I think that this just had too much going on to have enough impact.

    SanerHxS

    Contendin for the title? This fanboy’s better off in the bleachers…
    Cuz when he reaches for the belt “UCSD rejected” like disappointed seniors (you see SD)

    Explanation wasn't needed; if they didn't catch that one, they're pretty dumb. Nice wordplay, though.

    Fuckin lame never seen a booth, I’ll be nice and let him come to mine
    Except when i told em' "leave your sole on the track" this faggot caught runners high

    ha ha nice. Not sure I've ever seen this cliche done.

    My flows come in waves...watch him wash away when the tide’s higher
    Cuz this netcee came "surfin for a win" but wound up like andy irons

    I feel like the OD angle could have been thrown in. This was ok, though.

    Maybe online you got hype…but comparing our lives is a stretch
    I’m from LA and you’re from Cincinnati…enough fucking said.

    lmaoooo... word.

    Shit, the only thing more played than his bars is his name
    And RapMusic must have the flu, cuz lets face it…we’ve all seen better Daze

    Played concept and kinda weak punch.

    No tough talk from his side...got no balls and he's dickless
    So watch him "quiver in my presents" like robin hoods christmas

    ha ha I can dig this.

    I thought this was a lot closer than the votes showed. Saner had a nice verse, a lot of wordplay, and some decent personals. Sonny just got this one with slightly harder hitting punches. BotW tbh

    SonnyDaze wins and moves into the Championship Match.
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  7. Brown Jesus

    Brown Jesus Menso is for Dummies

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    T.a.C vs Gramur

    Gramur

    T.a.C was wack til oldheads gave him a style and some rhymes
    he's so nurtured...Oneduh and Lotus conceived him in '09
    and now he got the sweetest lines?? shit, he's worthless
    looking like he took all the gay out of San Fran and stuffed it in his verses

    ha ha I was digging this.

    Ima hurt this star who was never a factor in the past
    so just call me the director putting this actor in a cast
    he's gassed...who gives a fuck if he's the champ? I'm wreckless

    http://board.rapmusic.com/rbl-top-2...p-1-oneduh-20-0-vs-2-richard-corey-4-0-a.html
    http://board.rapmusic.com/rbl-top-2...p-1-oneduh-17-0-vs-2-john-hensley-16-3-a.html

    ^those are REAL title matches..well, at least HE beat Breathless

    lmaoooo. This was a good personal. I can see this 4 line thing hurting you, though.

    no respect cos on a 1-10 scale...he's bogus, see
    if this kid is the 1...that gives nigguhs 9 more reasons to vote for me

    Cool

    he's not as dope as G..to say different gets me appalled
    his text career is hide & seek because there's no Peaking involved

    I see what you're trying to do, but the wording is off. If I never peak, wouldn't that mean I improve without end? Good attempt, though, wording this one seems tough.

    Tacky getting broads? fuck no...this ugly emo dike
    can't take a bitch on a date...because she'd rather take her life
    he tries to get head..but he don't know shit about deep throatin'
    so if yall hearing T bagged..I dumped his body in the ocean

    Not really closer material, and the first couplet was blah. This might be what lost it for you, Gram

    T.a.C

    1,2,3, and to the 4, now G’s through
    I wasn’t singing Nothing but a G Thang…
    …I was just counting the times I’ve beat you

    Ehh

    Bleed tool, cuz really you have not a wish
    Could never be the top dog...
    …But hes happy to be the bottom bitch

    Wow @ that setup lol. It was decent, though.

    I’ll ash this flame, you don’t have any hope
    I shoulda made this match on 4/21, cuz Gram’s already smoked

    Ash this flame? lol whut? Kinda played after that, and any pothead limited to 1 gram on 4/20 should get a new job... or be like every other stoner and sell a llittle weed. I'm done preaching now lol.

    Been here 5 years, yet you’re the same mess
    How can I hit you with any name flips when you’re still nameless?

    Ehh... it was ok, but still kinda played.

    Actin like it hurts to grow, I’ll burst his skull
    Flow hasn’t improved at all…
    …And dating ads are the only time he writes a personal

    Much better! Except Grams verse was personal lol. Still decent, though.

    His fans still look both ways and hold hands
    Feel like I’m battling OSEP…
    …Cuz retarded kids are the only ones pro Grams

    This was dope.

    You blow man, no respect, watch as he sweats
    Yeah, we have the same amount of losses…
    …Thanks to you already havin’ 3 resets

    Could've been worded better, but this was aalright.

    I call him a faggot, he’ll smile and stand the shit
    See, I aint talking mean grandparents when I say that Gram’s a bitch

    lol... no.

    Man, are we reading the same battle? I thought Gram edged this. I think T.a.Cs running out of gas, which doesn't bode well for facing Sonny. But, yeah...

    Vote - Gram

    :lp2:
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  8. Brown Jesus

    Brown Jesus Menso is for Dummies

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    Preview

    C. T.a.C(18-1)
    2. Sonny Daze(3-1)

    This is gonna be good. T.a.C better bring the A game or he finally gets an L. I think he's taking the L regardless, but I guess I have to show some support to the reigning champ.

    :math:

    3. Gee Willikers(4-3)
    4. Circleplex(1-0)

    This will be a good match up. I think Circle takes this one, and faces Sonny next week.

    :BlahBlah:

    5. Gramur(2-2)
    6. SanerHsX(1-4)

    This should be good, too. Gramur is coming off a loss that arguably should've been a win, so he is probably pissed. Saner is dope, tho; he's also coming off a loss. I think Saner takes this one.

    7. C Price(1-3)
    8. Breathless(8-22)

    breathless has a slightly higher winning percentage... wow.

    9. Jai-Z(0-1)
    10. PresentsOfMind(0-0)

    Never seen PoM, and if Jai has a more consistent verse this week, then she'll win.

    11. RicoSuave(0-0)
    12. Baby OJ(0-0)
    13. MADD ILL(0-0)

    Baby OJ tbh
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    Brown Jesus Menso is for Dummies

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    Power Rankings

    1a. T.a.C

    A 18-1 record comes with certain advantages...

    1b. Sonny Daze

    ... let's be real though.

    3. Gramur

    If you won last week, I'd have you at 2, below Sonny and above T.a.C tbh

    5a. Circleplex

    A win this week will put him higher on this list.

    5b. Gee Wilikers

    I know you're ranked ahead of Circle, but I feel he's been a little more impressive. A win would put you up in the 3 spot.

    Honorable Mentions

    SanerHxS, Jai Z
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    Brown Jesus Menso is for Dummies

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    Last Weeks Highlights

    Jesus, Menso..
    ..ur trife, everybodies slut is ur wife;
    Mosez ran into The Burning Bush, but u asked to marry Magdalen for life.
    Jai Z

    U get no propz, talk mad shit, not to mention u suck too;
    Out of the 5 chancez u had to nail TaC, he posterized u.
    Jai Z

    Plus u stay on my dick wth hate votez, Ima kill him, no question;
    And put B on his back long enough to reach Blue Ivy's conception.
    Jai Z

    Fly guy? Piece of shit! Lucky I dont pull picz on this geek;
    this niggaz grill look like a Swiss Army Knife, u could cut, stab, peel and pop a cork wth his teeth.
    Jai Z

    Swine nosed whore, this shit is making me cry,
    Look, its fitting why ya nostrils like the infinity sign,
    Menso

    Cliche line: You broke? Its just a guess, boo,
    I swear this bitch is homeless taking pictures in public restrooms!
    Menso

    you need to off yourself for being this pathetic mayn tryn dive out yo window
    so we can see this soldier try jumping to his death...
    ...like the first god of wars intro
    Circleplex

    to be "real" you dont belong in this leagues "scene" your winsll be stuck in place
    so youll end up getting a "cut" in the middle like you messed up the take
    Circleplex

    nigga you so soft you cut yourself on a salad leaf at lunchtime
    you write poems for your internet girlfriend and that shit dont need a punchline
    Circleplex

    His styles old as dinosaurs, n your name is just played
    If you B.C. , then G’s the meteor ending your age
    Gee Wilikers

    Ya flow is basic and bunched
    But a Price can vary, so I should expect anything
    Except any form of a punch
    Gee Wilikers

    Plus it’s obvious you came here to represent the fag scene
    Price <is one letter away from purple rain and ass jeans
    Gee Wilikers

    T.a.C was wack til oldheads gave him a style and some rhymes
    he's so nurtured...Oneduh and Lotus conceived him in '09
    and now he got the sweetest lines?? shit, he's worthless
    looking like he took all the gay out of San Fran and stuffed it in his verses
    Gramur

    Ima hurt this star who was never a factor in the past
    so just call me the director putting this actor in a cast
    Gramur

    he's gassed...who gives a fuck if he's the champ? I'm wreckless

    CHAMPIONSHIP 1. Oneduh 20-0 vs. 2. Richard Corey 4-0
    CHAMPIONSHIP 1. Oneduh 17-0 vs. 2. John Hensley 16-3

    ^those are REAL title matches..well, at least HE beat Breathless
    Gramur

    Actin like it hurts to grow, I’ll burst his skull
    Flow hasn’t improved at all…
    …And dating ads are the only time he writes a personal
    T.a.C

    Bleed tool, cuz really you have not a wish
    Could never be the top dog...
    …But hes happy to be the bottom bitch
    T.a.C

    Punchline of the Week

    [youtube]t925JwYXhVA[/youtube]

    Citizen k, this is a shame
    Getting a loss from a legitimate lame
    breathless

    Battle of the Week

    vs

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    Brown Jesus Menso is for Dummies

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    Outro

    I'm tired and hungry, so the rest will wait. This is the majority of the Mag; everything I currently have, anyway. I hope y'all enjoyed your Mag. have a good week, show up to your battles, and vote.

    RSTL will be having there season ending tourney in about a month. It's a whole different kind of writing; it takes a different kind of creativity. If I had time, I would probably spend more time over there; I enjoy writing the Mags more than writing RSTL verses, though, so you guys are stuck with me. Anyways, I'll post more info as time goes on.

    #RMlove
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    Brown Jesus Menso is for Dummies

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    breathlesss is gonna frame a screenshot of his PotW tbh
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  14. SonnyDaze

    SonnyDaze 7 train heavyweight

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    Good shit as always. Respect.
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  15. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    I enjoyed reading the battle recaps...insightful on what is working in a line and what is not...lol at some of the reactions

    Nice read brown, s/o for the rstl addy
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  16. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    FUCK YOU, I AINT RUNNING OUTTA GAS, BITCH.


    yeah, i kinda am. getting close to break time. after my next loss. which could be soon. Sonny had some nice lines.
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  17. breathlesss

    breathlesss Registered Sex Offender

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    Thank you for the unhonorable mention with the potw, I've been waiting for this moment... I knew the day would finally come when you guys get me, it just, it just feels so good to be understood for once...
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