RBL Contendership Match: 3. Joey Donuts 10-1 vs 4. I Deal 20-3

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  1. FórmÅl LôGíc

    FórmÅl LôGíc Black Listed

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  2. Joey donuts

    Joey donuts Yeah yeah yeah

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  3. I.deal

    I.deal The BOSS of all BOSSES.

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  4. I.deal

    I.deal The BOSS of all BOSSES.

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    Fuck it, imma be honest here.


    The RBL’s got real problems. Some of it aint phony
    Look at me. I had to go though Adonis & Imp…… just to face Joey.
    For real, that’s a joke. How you deserve my best dukes -
    When Spooky wasn’t even bothered to write a verse against you?
    Your trash, bottom line…. shit is NOT made up
    Everybody in the league know JD’s better off shot…. straight up.
    Come on, average joe. ya bitch is enormous & furthermore
    Her menstrual pads got bigger wings then most prehistoric birds of war.
    I’ll be Mr. Honest... She only love you off gin & tonics.
    The attractions kinda like phone digits, she cant quite put her finger on it.
    So stop getting abused. Go get yaself a style pimpin.
    Cuz right now you gettin played more consecutively then cal ripken.
    Plus you aint get no mag exposure. It just aint ya time geek -
    But you’re a shoe-in to win the award for ‘next best thing’… to a bye week.
    Don’t try me. Really scrap, you wont last till the final -
    I was up in title matches before you were even matched with a title.
    Do the math if its vital… But, to me that shit don’t matter
    Ay'body know deal's the real number one... & this kid’s no factor.
    Get ya wig blown backwards, for spittin weak testaments
    Scientz is consider a tough class, your just considered a pre-requisite.
    So hit the exit quick. I dunno why you think you can handle me -
    When you don’t even have the handstrength to get a grip on reality.
    Tang’ll make you a casualty. I see you aint about shit.
    Battling obviously aint ya strong suit, but neither are any of ya outfits.
    So believe, ya streak is dead. Cause this is a full out rout.
    & At the end of the day....
    The only extension you'll have left to make is ya pull-out couch.

    Ungh.

    –24, Deal wit it.
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  5. Joey donuts

    Joey donuts Yeah yeah yeah

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    I got my own buzz goin ‘round, and tang is more than jealous
    I’ll maul your chest to the point where some stores develop
    I’ll be quick to smack you, or give you one of them a-team punches
    That’ll make you do more revolutions then the 1800’s
    Heard your middle name is danger, you must be dope…
    …So in that case your first name must be no
    This dude is really a thug, I failed to mention he’s a killer
    I mean tang is so gangsta that he had to be represented by guerillas
    Never liked you, I can say you gotten good with the months
    But I wont give you the respect you urned, until I put you in one
    Your truly a , top 5? You’ll be newly removed
    After I put you through enough suffering to be classified as jewelry abuse
    Prob seen every line twice or more, and yeah I get that from rivals
    Remember doug? Well tang is like his moms, a bitch that recycles
    And tang with a girl? Please, she’s prob a lame and a trick
    I think someone’s a little big headed
    Too bad we cant say the same for your dick
    So now you’re the foundation of the league? Tang’ll get bitch slapped
    Only reason the board is on his back, is cause he was bullied in gym class
    Known to toot his own horn about his dick, and good at poppin shit
    Bitch, treat your mouth like your underwear and put a sock in it
    Despite all the hype I been hearin, your text’s redundant
    So really your only flattering yourself like chest reductions
    Keep braggin about your hype, you might as well switch states liar
    Or else I’ll have to mircyou faster then mixtape pirates
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  6. Ibeechur Moms

    Ibeechur Moms IF

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    tang

    Your trash, bottom line…. shit is NOT made up
    Everybody in the league know JD’s better off shot…. straight up.

    Get ya wig blown backwards, for spittin weak testaments
    Scientz is consider a tough class, your just considered a pre-requisite.


    Joey

    I got my own buzz goin ‘round, and tang is more than jealous
    I’ll maul your chest to the point where some stores develop
    I’ll be quick to smack you, or give you one of them a-team punches
    That’ll make you do more revolutions then the 1800’s
    Known to toot his own horn about his dick, and good at poppin shit
    Bitch, treat your mouth like your underwear and put a sock in it


    I personally liked joey's verse better....just a little more clever

    this can go either way...depending on voters tastes in punches....Ideal was more personal...but some of his shit just didn't do it for me....

    I think that sock punch by joey was the clincher


    vote= joey
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  7. Tone Sans.

    Tone Sans. Sansaloni, Tony

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    this was a pretty nice battle. Both of your verses had their strong points but i just felt joeys more. This line was the line of the battle in my eyes:

    Known to toot his own horn about his dick, and good at poppin shit
    Bitch, treat your mouth like your underwear and put a sock in it

    that was toooo dope. nice battle.

    votejoey
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  8. cheemagun

    cheemagun THA RAWEST

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    tang
    The RBL’s got real problems. Some of it aint phony
    Look at me. I had to go though Adonis & Imp…… just to face Joey.
    For real, that’s a joke. How you deserve my best dukes -
    When Spooky wasn’t even bothered to write a verse against you?
    Your trash, bottom line…. shit is NOT made up
    Everybody in the league know JD’s better off shot…. straight up.
    Come on, average joe. ya bitch is enormous & furthermore
    Her menstrual pads got bigger wings then most prehistoric birds of war.

    I was feelin this part str8 thru.. but I wasn’t really feelin the rest of your verse as much.


    joey
    I got my own buzz goin ‘round, and tang is more than jealous
    I’ll maul your chest to the point where some stores develop
    Known to toot his own horn about his dick, and good at poppin shit
    Bitch, treat your mouth like your underwear and put a sock in it

    This two lines were str8 nice.. but the rest of your verse I didn’t feel.

    Vote= tang.. I think he came with more wittiness and more nice lines then joey did.. but I was expecting a MUCH better battle.. props to both tho.
    return the favor..
    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=803514
    pz..
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  9. L. Jack

    L. Jack New Member

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    Ideal

    For real, that’s a joke. How you deserve my best dukes -
    When Spooky wasn’t even bothered to write a verse against you?
    Plus you aint get no mag exposure. It just aint ya time geek -
    But you’re a shoe-in to win the award for ‘next best thing’… to a bye week.
    Get ya wig blown backwards, for spittin weak testaments
    Scientz is consider a tough class, your just considered a pre-requisite.
    So hit the exit quick. I dunno why you think you can handle me -
    When you don’t even have the handstrength to get a grip on reality.
    Tang’ll make you a casualty. I see you aint about shit.
    Battling obviously aint ya strong suit, but neither are any of ya outfits.


    Joey donuts

    I got my own buzz goin ‘round, and tang is more than jealous
    I’ll maul your chest to the point where some stores develop
    I’ll be quick to smack you, or give you one of them a-team punches
    That’ll make you do more revolutions then the 1800’s
    Heard your middle name is danger, you must be dope…
    …So in that case your first name must be no
    This dude is really a thug, I failed to mention he’s a killer
    I mean tang is so gangsta that he had to be represented by guerillas
    Never liked you, I can say you gotten good with the months
    But I wont give you the respect you urned, until I put you in one
    Your truly a , top 5? You’ll be newly removed
    After I put you through enough suffering to be classified as jewelry abuse
    And tang with a girl? Please, she’s prob a lame and a trick
    I think someone’s a little big headed
    Too bad we cant say the same for your dick
    Known to toot his own horn about his dick, and good at poppin shit
    Bitch, treat your mouth like your underwear and put a sock in it
    Despite all the hype I been hearin, your text’s redundant
    So really your only flattering yourself like chest reductions
    Keep braggin about your hype, you might as well switch states liar
    Or else I’ll have to mircyou faster then mixtape pirates


    Overall, Joey got this, Basically his whole verse was flames
    That urned line was the line of the battle in my eyes.

    V/joey
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  10. squarelicious

    squarelicious together we rice

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    har, pretty nice.

    both of them had some good lines. ive never seen donuts before, heard of him, not bad. some funny lines like first names a no, rofl. close, but i think tang takes it slightly. took a few reads, but tangs verse just seemed more original (ironically, cuz he recycles).. ionno, he just had a really cool execution about his lines. he flows smoother, and the lines connect. joey had some setups where i was like, he pieced these couplets together, or i was puzzled in where you were going, etc.. punching power was kinda equal, so i hadta be picky.

    v/ tang


    PS i mentioned u 2 in my verse, but it was a joke yo so joey dont take it to heart. like i said, i never seen u before and i just happened to need a wordplay at that line lol


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  11. Copywritten

    Copywritten Copy Me

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    Vote - Tang
    Cuz he didn't use that played ass sock line
    Originality is key...

    Known to toot his own horn about his dick, and good at poppin shit
    Bitch, treat your mouth like your underwear and put a sock in it

    "treat your mouth like your crotch and put a sock in it" - l-ehvasion
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  12. ZuChiE

    ZuChiE New Member

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    god damn at that maul line




    but ideal took this with some hotter shit, he hit pretty hard every line
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  13. Donis

    Donis New Member

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    hmmm



    I actually think Tang took this as well, even though this was really close. Joey had a few really good concepts, but Ive seen a lot of them before (the sock line, especially), and his format of presenting them was kinda bland at times. Tang had more of an original swagger to his shit, which I dig.


    Good stuff fellas. I enjoyed reading this. Buuuuuuut...


    v - I.deal.
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  14. The Second Comming

    The Second Comming you aint poison!!!

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    i have no idea why joey is getting votes.. i mean, his verse was pretty str8, but it did not contend with tang's verse.. tang had heat this week.. very nice verse tang

    i was feelin the birds of war, cal ripkin, scientz, and extension lines..

    joey had the maul and urn lines.. that was about all i felt really.. too many dick references n shit.. decent verse tho.. just not enough to win.

    vote= tang
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  15. FórmÅl LôGíc

    FórmÅl LôGíc Black Listed

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  16. The Royal Penis

    The Royal Penis God.

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    Despite all the hype I been hearin, your text’s redundant
    So really your only flattering yourself like chest reductions

    this line was so badly worded.... everything else was blah... honestly put a sock in it?


    whatever, this wasn't close.. i was questioning joey's record, and after seeing who voted for him, i know why he's 10-1...


    vote-Tang...

    Do the math if its vital… But, to me that shit don’t matter
    Ay'body know deal's the real number one... & this kid’s no factor.
    Get ya wig blown backwards, for spittin weak testaments
    Scientz is consider a tough class, your just considered a pre-requisite.
    So hit the exit quick. I dunno why you think you can handle me -
    When you don’t even have the handstrength to get a grip on reality.
    Tang’ll make you a casualty. I see you aint about shit.
    Battling obviously aint ya strong suit, but neither are any of ya outfits.
    So believe, ya streak is dead. Cause this is a full out rout.
    & At the end of the day....
    The only extension you'll have left to make is ya pull-out couch.

    killing kids like ALWAYS.. lol... peace.
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  17. QuicK SyllaBle

    QuicK SyllaBle New Member

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    vote- Joey...came wayyyy more original...i hate when people recycle and thats what tang did....joey came with the maul line...the 1800's...tang came with some ok lines but i dont think it got him the win
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  18. Aven Brooks

    Aven Brooks .. bladerunner ..

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    .. damn .. now THIS is a battle .. both came with it .. tough vote ..

    i.deal's best ..
    The RBL’s got real problems. Some of it aint phony
    Look at me. I had to go though Adonis & Imp…… just to face Joey.

    Come on, average joe. ya bitch is enormous & furthermore
    Her menstrual pads got bigger wings then most prehistoric birds of war.

    So stop getting abused. Go get yaself a style pimpin.
    Cuz right now you gettin played more consecutively then cal ripken.

    Get ya wig blown backwards, for spittin weak testaments
    Scientz is consider a tough class, your just considered a pre-requisite.

    So believe, ya streak is dead. Cause this is a full out rout.
    & At the end of the day....
    The only extension you'll have left to make is ya pull-out couch.

    .. i.deal's worst ..
    So hit the exit quick. I dunno why you think you can handle me -
    When you don’t even have the handstrength to get a grip on reality.

    Tang’ll make you a casualty. I see you aint about shit.
    Battling obviously aint ya strong suit, but neither are any of ya outfits.


    .. joey donuts best ..
    I’ll be quick to smack you, or give you one of them a-team punches
    That’ll make you do more revolutions then the 1800’s

    Heard your middle name is danger, you must be dope…
    …So in that case your first name must be no

    Despite all the hype I been hearin, your text’s redundant
    So really your only flattering yourself like chest reductions


    .. joey donuts worst ..
    And tang with a girl? Please, she’s prob a lame and a trick
    I think someone’s a little big headed
    Too bad we cant say the same for your dick

    Known to toot his own horn about his dick, and good at poppin shit
    Bitch, treat your mouth like your underwear and put a sock in it



    .. overall .. i heard the mall / maul line before .. donuts had 2 concepts that are overly used .. i.deal had 1 .. i.deal jus had a couple more quotables, thats why he gets it .. nice battle ..

    vote .. i.deal
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  19. shadows edge

    shadows edge Red Sox, bitch

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    Joey had some nice lines at the start... if you had stayed that consistant you would have had it. Rest was kinda bleh... Ideal came just more consistent... pretty witty throughout, i like the style and wording...

    v. ideal
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  20. Yuno Alwin

    Yuno Alwin ..as usual

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    I got my own buzz goin ‘round, and tang is more than jealous
    I’ll maul your chest to the point where some stores develop

    haha...

    that mall line was flava....but sorry to say dude tang still got it with more consistency....i think if yall woulda went shorter lines you may have won but some people are better at writing longer battle verses with consistent punches and tang did this time..

    vote-Ideal
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