RBL CHAMPIONSHIP TOURNEY - Mrjdm Vs Dethstryque

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  1. KroniK

    KroniK R.I.P. U

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  2. Mrjdm998

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  3. Mrjdm998

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    I'll start with the killer bars murk you without mis-used time
    So call this verse a pregnancy test, it makes the result clear with just a few lines
    (1)998 gave us Jay's Volume 2 and Aquemini
    But Deth's like "Fuck that, Can-I-Bus is the best thing I've heard in my life listen to the multi rhymes!"
    You probably own underwear with "real lyricist" woven into the back of it
    And I bet you wear a varsity jacket which says I heart multi-syllabics on the fabric
    You window licking spastic when you die your casket
    Will have "single syllables are for faggits" carved deep into the cheap plastic
    Only thing worse than his multi obsession's his love for mixed martial arts
    He falls asleep thinking about UFC and Royce Gracie's retirement split his heart apart
    Deth's daydreaming of fighting when he's relaxing eating or penning his queer basic flows
    The only time he's not thinking of MMA's when he's putting guys in rear naked chokes
    This wack opponent can't trouble me I'll leave you torn apart Deth
    I'm twice as good man I'm, double D like a porn stars chest
    Just 'cus you've been text battling all yah life doesn't make you a timeless veteran
    'Cus even though you have a few gold bars you just create trash like a reverse Midas complexion
    A mic you can use? That was a fuckin mindless invention
    Bruv, nobody wants you to spit like a chick with a hepatitis infection
    Nobody gives a fuck about your kickboxing 'cus if someone decided to pull several ratchets
    You'd resemble the tragic soldier who blew his brains out in Full Metal Jacket



    How long Deth's got left? Time's depleting
    This'll be the worst result for a D since the 09 Lions season
    Don't have to dump the clip like deleted scenes say night with the straight right
    Actually I might even just spare you because of how much I fucking hate Stryques
    My verses smack you hard D I'll cave yah skull with a bat harshly
    Now you're getting humiliated by my pen like you passed out at a frat party
    Because no matter how many martial arts he says he can use to kick butt
    Listing Asian striking techniques will never create a sick punch
    Fuck a hammer and nine I'll batter this guy with masterful lines
    Now get off the fucking internet and go tend to your Canibus shrine
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  4. DethStryque

    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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  5. Mrjdm998

    Mrjdm998 New Member

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    No show really?
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  6. DethStryque

    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    Nope.I'm dropping before 3am today; in fact? Lunch break is when I will key on you.never a no-show for me dawg
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  7. DethStryque

    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    Hell I got nearly 20 minutes.I'll key on you now.
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    TheProle Pls go, Milhouse.

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    All Verses Due Tuesday July 26TH 3am PST


    That's three in the morning. Which was like 7 hours ago.
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  9. Mrjdm998

    Mrjdm998 New Member

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    3AM Tuesday bruv.
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  10. DethStryque

    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    Chap look! One phat hook collapsed ya flat on ya back shook n bangs ya mane like I mag clapped ya hat til ya cap's cooked!
    In a scrap rook...all ya rhymes get fucked n murdered like I had snuff scene sex with ya rap book!
    You gotcha swag snook when 2 rounds ago I body bagged you n mounted ya head on a spike of sodding bamboo
    I left you slumped n asleep when I "punched lumps in ya beef". It's embarassin...an American "Nottingham'd//knotting hammed" you!
    My spit slits n shits on you like ya body shampoo is potty pan poo mixed with daggered quips so hazardous
    That you couldn't come back from Deth if Jesus of Nazareth taught you the Secrets of Lazarus
    Punches make you see stars like I plastered this bastard with brass knuckles crafted with asterisks
    JDM? I Casper'd that wakk nerd with wrath served tuh blaze yer wig like clapped nines
    You called me gay? In AMERICA we blast dimes but CROCHET and GARDENING are England's favorite pastimes! (link)
    You're like a mule on a Claymore cuz ya ASS MINE! If you're Jay-Z? I'm Eminem sendin blades
    Tuh ETHER ya weak verbs til ya grin gitz sprayed by RENEGADE pen grenades!
    Apply ya blood like warpaint cream n cammo lit ya team with beams then BLAMMO
    Liftcha Queen with fiendish ammo n invade ya land at the head of legions
    Bytch if you fail to pledge obeisance? I'll blow up Parliament cock n blam ya soccer fans then shit in The English Channel while reciting THE PLEDGE OF ALLEGIANCE!!
    Dawg I'll bring heat tuh ya dome like Russian Fever n lop ya damn head off like fuckin cleavers
    Git chopped like sausage beef for accostin me cuz you're rap's British version of Justin Bieber!
    Jab n double cross you like a plus sign and a crucifix! You're buyin the farm for battlin me!
    Your punches lack heat...but my hooks are fire like the spiraling arms of galaxies!!
    You Brits get abused if we rappin or scrappin bruh,I'm shaftin ya like asparagus plucked from the ruff
    So if we scrappin? You Hatton.I'm Pacman.If it's war? I'm America fuckin you up!!
    I'm a problem man! I'm roofin yo ass for woofin that trash,and if you keep on talkin man
    I'll dump the heat n feed clips n chopper blam this crumpet eatin tea sippin soccer fan
    My ock words launch this future Oxford Man tuh Auckland fam n wetcha like Aqua man with the raps I say
    You'll get dropped in a box if we box B,cuz you're a mere Khan//Amir Khan...I'm THE KING OF THE WORLD like CASSIUS CLAY


    (link): for some reason the link didn't work but if you Google England's Top 10 Favorite Pastimes,Gardening and Crochet are among them.That's soooo gay,lol.
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  11. DethStryque

    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    votes please...
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  12. DethStryque

    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    votes please
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  13. TheProle

    TheProle Pls go, Milhouse.

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    Mrjdm, I feel you could have forced your multis a little less when you were trying to make fun of Deth for over using multis. Your Full Metal Jacket, and 09 Lions season lines were expensive.
    Deth had a ridiculous amount of multies and I thought he overdid it, but the Lazzarus, and Asterisks lines were straight fire.

    If I've got to put in the vote, I'd go for Deth. His verse was just more polished and natural. Both had good punches.
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  14. TheIlliterate

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    Alright let's make this fast.

    JDM had the stronger opener.
    Deth brought less inner multis than usual, and JDM brought more than he usually does. Overall I thought both dudes were equal in actual rhyming ability.

    Deth had some lines that got a reaction outta me like the Lazzarus scheme, I liked that shit. But JDM had some slightly-clever jokes and creative schemes all around.

    I could tell Deth rushed this verse, especially closer to the end. Deth was far less consistent than JDM, Deth had the occasional nice line every 4 or so bars but JDM was aight the whole way through.

    This one was hard to call, especially since I know how Deth likes the votes to consider absolutely every aspect of rap.
    But I'm giving it to Mr JDM by a bit.

    Good battle, I enjoyed both verses.
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  15. smittyrhythm

    smittyrhythm you love 2 hate me

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    First off jdm no hate you annoy the shit out of me sometimes but you have improved VASTLY since your first battle with me. Youre developing better punches, wordplays, all around you've progressed as a writer. You havent quite hit your peak, but you've definitely learned how to apply your verse personally against your opponent.

    You probably own underwear with "real lyricist" woven into the back of it
    And I bet you wear a varsity jacket which says I heart multi-syllabics on the fabric
    You window licking spastic when you die your casket
    Will have "single syllables are for faggits" carved deep into the cheap plastic
    ----- here we have the classic 'casket' rhyme scheme..but its short. I feel like with a rhyme scheme like this you can unlock alot of good punches, which you have, but you couldve lengthened your bars (especially your 3rd) and put in a couple more multi's to give it an extra 'umph'. You've done this a couple times in your verse, and if youre going up against Deth you cant afford to go in with short bars unless the wordplay/punch/personal is particularly powerful. You wont win.

    Deth's daydreaming of fighting when he's relaxing eating or penning his queer basic flows
    The only time he's not thinking of MMA's when he's putting guys in rear naked chokes
    ----- good, funny.

    This wack opponent can't trouble me I'll leave you torn apart Deth
    I'm twice as good man I'm, double D like a porn stars chest
    ------ good pseudo-nameplay, needed to be polished a bit and stretched with a couple more multi's, but decent

    A mic you can use? That was a fuckin mindless invention
    Bruv, nobody wants you to spit like a chick with a hepatitis infection
    ------ Again funny, but short

    How long Deth's got left? Time's depleting
    This'll be the worst result for a D since the 09 Lions season
    ------ Too $hort.

    Don't have to dump the clip like deleted scenes say night with the straight right
    Actually I might even just spare you because of how much I fucking hate Stryques
    ----- Good. Decent nameplay

    Fuck a hammer and nine I'll batter this guy with masterful lines
    Now get off the fucking internet and go tend to your Canibus shrine
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    You gotcha swag snook when 2 rounds ago I body bagged you n mounted ya head on a spike of sodding bamboo
    I left you slumped n asleep when I "punched lumps in ya beef". It's embarassin...an American "Nottingham'd//knotting hammed" you!
    ----- beef is not pork... slippin

    My spit slits n shits on you like ya body shampoo is potty pan poo mixed with daggered quips so hazardous
    That you couldn't come back from Deth if Jesus of Nazareth taught you the Secrets of Lazarus
    ---- Your best bars by FAR, these will stand-out to anyone reading them.

    Punches make you see stars like I plastered this bastard with brass knuckles crafted with asterisk
    (?)
    ---- Am I confused or did you just totally skip a bar?

    JDM? I Casper'd that wakk nerd with wrath served tuh blaze yer wig like clapped nines
    You called me gay? In AMERICA we blast dimes but CROCHET and GARDENING are England's favorite pastimes!
    ---- Not your best, this wasnt even funny really

    You're like a mule on a Claymore cuz ya ASS MINE! If you're Jay-Z? I'm Eminem sendin blades
    Tuh ETHER ya weak verbs til ya grin gitz sprayed by RENEGADE pen grenades!
    Apply ya blood like warpaint cream n cammo lit ya team with beams then BLAMMO
    ----- wtf, where are you going??? are you actually tryin to pass off one bar for two? It isnt working, your verses flow is thrown way off

    You Brits get abused if we rappin or scrappin bruh,I'm shaftin ya like asparagus plucked from the ruff
    So if we scrappin? You Hatton.I'm Pacman.If it's war? I'm America fuckin you up!!
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    OMG Deth, what are you doing??? Did you even try? Because your verse seems thrown together and cheap. Sorry but man I cant just tell you this is a good verse because its not. You swung for the fence with British jokes but alot of the puns you used really werent THAT stand-out. You mentioned soccer like two or three times. And I dont see 1, NOT ONE, attempt at a nameplay...granted he's got a tough name to flip but with someone of your caliber it shouldnt be a problem to atleast produce one. You displayed your talent of multiples and your verse is more complete, but I dont think you really brought a diverse enough range of punches, you basically ONLY bashed him for being british. You addressed some things that were said, but eeehhhhhhhhhh dude you did not bring your A game. And for god-sake SPELL YOUR WORDS OUT CORRECTLY.

    Am I the only one that thinks when people write their verse like a text message it looks retarded and juvenile? Plus it just fucks up the flow of what youre trying to read, you have to keep going back and re-reading to make sure youre pronouncing everything in the correct harmony.

    Im sorry Deth, you know I respect your ability youre one of the best writers here, but I cant lie to myself or to the people on this board. When I read jdm's verse I thought to myself 'no way is he gonna pull this off, his bars are too short'. But after going over this twice, Deth beat himself with sloppy composition and bad preparation. Congrads little eng, you got my vote.

    Vote- JDM, by a pubic-hair
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  16. DethStryque

    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    Okay guys 2-1 JDM keep it coming.
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  17. IAmBenT

    IAmBenT Eat a dick, faggot

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    Imma do a line-by-line like MK used to do when he was around lol. This battle is actually pretty good and deserves feedback no doubt

    lol the first part of this had great multis/internal flow. not really feeling the canibus reference as I have not really seen Deth reference Cani all that much but maybe im out of the loop
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  18. IAmBenT

    IAmBenT Eat a dick, faggot

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    ok onto Deth:

    This is a tough battle.

    Mr J started off kind of badly worded and with not-so-good filler. Then he really heated up at the end with the last 10 lines or so, some killer stuff that made me laugh.

    Deth, I don't think this is one of his best efforts, I have seen him go harder, I think there is real affinity between these guys, and it shows, but he still brought fire. The extended metas alone took a lot of skill to link with such a tricky scheme, the fireworks were there, just missing a bit on the personal side.

    Vote -DethStryque, I really liked both verses, I felt that if MR J had done some editing to a few parts of that verse he would win cuz his content was solid, but Deth only really had one or two let-ups in this verse. Solid stuff from two of my favorites in the league.
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  19. DethStryque

    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    Whew! The drama is building and that is a HELLA VOTE DAWG!! 2-2!
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  20. D-MONIK

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    Great battle guys, really a clash of metaphors and hard hitting personals vs crazy multi rhymes

    Really impressed by jdm, he's progressed a shit ton since enterin the league, he didn't hesitate to throw punches from the start, and never really let up, he attacked deth and his love for multies and those lines hit hard for me, other lines were bangers and I felt that he was creative enough while not going to overboard with obscure references...

    Deth has a style that I constantly find troubling because the structure is built to be extremely ill, with the amount of multies and the potential to have amazing punchlines, although I think he went overboard here, he didn't seem to have the tenacity in the variety of his lines, through reading his verse is see a line I enjoyed then the following line would be very similar in basically saying the same thing, cleavers, knifes, macheties,

    You kicked his ass in every line and got repetitive after a while, I would've like to see some personals on British people or maybe some name plays

    Flow, metas, personals, overall. Jdm

    Deth easily had the best multies

    But overall ....

    Vote= mrjdm
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