RBL Championship Match: 1. J Dot C 11-0 vs 2. Blackdef 10-1

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  1. john hensley

    john hensley 7xRBL

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    For real tho, Def is No. 1, I'm being honest and serious...
    Now read that last line over again, this time without any periods...

    ^^i don't even post much on here, but i've seen this line flipped almost word for word....alot. Totally takes away the impact of it.


    anyways:


    Jdot:

    you had some cool lines, some of your punches were fresh and shit i havent seen. But that line above, i dont know, im not really one to judge since i'm a newbie, but that is weak that you bit that one.

    Black:

    not a bad verse, i thought you had some cheesy lines, but you held it down and had some cool punchlines.

    vote: Black
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  2. Con God

    Con God New Member

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    show links... and drop a vote
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  3. Copywritten

    Copywritten Copy Me

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    vote on my battle
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  4. Copywritten

    Copywritten Copy Me

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    You here off nobodies to noshows so ya record’s fake hype hoe
    Jay’s got everyone laughin at 12 like the host of The Late Night Show
    -Ehh, not bad
    He’s so pitifully played and predictable, Jay can’t rock me writing
    I see his punches coming… especially when my aim says J dot C’s typing
    -Haha, like this
    I stay proofin his lines, so I aint lying when I say Jay’s stupid Wack
    But I’m not gonna poke fun at his rap level… I wouldn’t stoop to that!
    -Ha
    He’ll only fade to Black in comparison, none’s felling his shitty writs
    The only Blueprint this Jay could be seen on is for building an idiot
    -Lol, not bad
    I’d son you into oblivion, but you have been I heard so why try..
    ya mom’s a brickhouse, so she musta got laid by Serge or Razah
    -hahaha, nice
    Heard Oz got ya name tatted on his dick… yea, you told me about it…
    But don’t get mad at me, ^I'm not the one puttin words in ya mouth trick
    -Ehh, seen somethin like that before
    a fagot bitch that has a lisp and his obsession with dick’s relentless...
    this Gay Cee’s charged more cocks than pissin on electric fences
    -Hahah, shit made me laugh but didn't really hit hard
    Your only dope shit was bit from Galv, now you’re wack and hopeless
    Only thing you got on lock’s ya car door when blacks approach it
    -Decent

    Overall, I got Black taking this. Less played lines and more lines that had me laughin'


    Vote - Black
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  5. Reflexx

    Reflexx [insert cool thing here]

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    Lemme break it down...

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    J Dot C:

    I dismantle g's, no way Def can handle me...
    I'll leave him in a pool of his own blood, like swimmin wit his family...

    kinda stretched but meh..

    Jay's lethal wit text & I should be mentioned among tha best...
    So I'm here to stake my claim ^^^.....thru tha middle of ur chest...

    uh...no.

    All u do is post text, u have no life at all, stupid queer...
    But noone's called u dope, matter fact, noone's called u in years...

    blah..

    & ur girl hates u, stays screamin on sum other shit...
    So Black's always in tha doghouse, tryin to get wit another bitch...

    wtf? blah..

    Plus I heard ur dick is small, ur bitch told me wit laughter...
    That's why Def stays wit a hand on tha pump, like kids wit asthma...

    meh..

    For real tho, Def is No. 1, I'm being honest and serious...
    Now read that last line over again, this time without any periods...

    nice..

    Tha fact is ur pretty wack, and I find it funny that...
    People at ur shows have their hands up.....prayin for their moneyback...

    if he's so whack why is he performing live shows lol... blah..

    Plus I'll fuckin end tha hype, when I shred this tyke...
    & leave a blade in Def's throat, like he's givin head to Snipes...

    nice...

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    Blackdef:

    You here off nobodies to noshows so ya record’s fake hype hoe
    Jay’s got everyone laughin at 12 like the host of The Late Night Show

    meh..

    He’s so pitifully played and predictable, Jay can’t rock me writing
    I see his punches coming… especially when my aim says J dot C’s typing

    nice

    I stay proofin his lines, so I aint lying when I say Jay’s stupid Wack
    But I’m not gonna poke fun at his rap level… I wouldn’t stoop to that!

    lmfao, nice

    He’ll only fade to Black in comparison, none’s felling his shitty writs
    The only Blueprint this Jay could be seen on is for building an idiot

    ahahaha nice

    I’d son you into oblivion, but you have been I heard so why try..
    ya mom’s a brickhouse, so she musta got laid by Serge or Razah

    meh..

    Heard Oz got ya name tatted on his dick… yea, you told me about it…
    But don’t get mad at me, ^I'm not the one puttin words in ya mouth trick

    meh...

    a fagot bitch that has a lisp and his obsession with dick’s relentless...
    this Gay Cee’s charged more cocks than pissin on electric fences

    kinda played.. but it was okay..

    Your only dope shit was bit from Galv, now you’re wack and hopeless
    Only thing you got on lock’s ya car door when blacks approach it

    kinda nice..

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    Well, this battle was nice since it wasn't another one sided battle. Jay's lines were played out like hell and his verse was stretched out like hell with all the dots... Multies were kinda the same, personals the same.. Blackdef took the flow and with harder punches.. good battle both of you.

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  6. -Oz-

    -Oz- ^^^^^

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    I'll be counting the votes up.
    Vote Jay Cee, more clever. Had more lines I liked as opposed to lines I didnt like. The No.1 line was dope.
    Pretty good battle, Conceptz aint come as hard as he been coming though.
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  7. Menso

    Menso Go Lakers!

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    J dot C

    I dismantle g's, no way Def can handle me...
    I'll leave him in a pool of his own blood, like swimmin wit his family...

    nice opener..

    Jay's lethal wit text & I should be mentioned among tha best...
    So I'm here to stake my claim ^^^.....thru tha middle of ur chest...

    blah..

    All u do is post text, u have no life at all, stupid queer...
    But noone's called u dope, matter fact, noone's called u in years...

    ok..

    & ur girl hates u, stays screamin on sum other shit...
    So Black's always in tha doghouse, tryin to get wit another bitch...

    ok..

    Plus I heard ur dick is small, ur bitch told me wit laughter...
    That's why Def stays wit a hand on tha pump, like kids wit asthma...

    lmao..

    For real tho, Def is No. 1, I'm being honest and serious...
    Now read that last line over again, this time without any periods...

    nice..

    Tha fact is ur pretty wack, and I find it funny that...
    People at ur shows have their hands up.....prayin for their moneyback...

    blah..

    Plus I'll fuckin end tha hype, when I shred this tyke...
    & leave a blade in Def's throat, like he's givin head to Snipes...

    ehh..

    Blackdef

    You here off nobodies to noshows so ya record’s fake hype hoe
    Jay’s got everyone laughin at 12 like the host of The Late Night Show

    ok..

    He’s so pitifully played and predictable, Jay can’t rock me writing
    I see his punches coming… especially when my aim says J dot C’s typing

    lol..

    I stay proofin his lines, so I aint lying when I say Jay’s stupid Wack
    But I’m not gonna poke fun at his rap level… I wouldn’t stoop to that!

    meh..

    He’ll only fade to Black in comparison, none’s felling his shitty writs
    The only Blueprint this Jay could be seen on is for building an idiot

    lol..

    I’d son you into oblivion, but you have been I heard so why try..
    ya mom’s a brickhouse, so she musta got laid by Serge or Razah

    lmao..

    Heard Oz got ya name tatted on his dick… yea, you told me about it…
    But don’t get mad at me, ^I'm not the one puttin words in ya mouth trick

    lol..

    a fagot bitch that has a lisp and his obsession with dick’s relentless...
    this Gay Cee’s charged more cocks than pissin on electric fences

    meh..

    Your only dope shit was bit from Galv, now you’re wack and hopeless
    Only thing you got on lock’s ya car door when blacks approach it

    closer left me hangin, but it was alright.

    Vote Black

    JdotC had a few played concepts, he did have a couple dope lines tho. Black was more original, and the punches were wittier.
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  8. hardhat harry

    hardhat harry Watch yah Head

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    well he made a bitching thread in hookups so scratch my original thought
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  9. Ibeechur Moms

    Ibeechur Moms IF

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    damn...this is a close battle....it really does boil down to originality. Some people like a good flip, like myself. Others get pissed at the fact of using played concepts. Yup, JC had maadd flips, but some I werent feelin. I didn't feel the stake one, or the asthma, the snipes or the prayer one... It was like, I saw it commin a mile away. But the NO.1 line was killer, severly played, but flipped very nicely.

    Black def, alot of ur shit was far fetched and at times hard to grasp unless read a few times. But the Aim convo line and the blueprint line are what decided it for me.

    Extremely close, but at the same time, shoulda been MUCH better.

    vote= Blackdef
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  10. Mc KoRE_WReCkeD

    Mc KoRE_WReCkeD Mc To The Kore

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    i felt a couple of jay's lines, but very few...i feel black came more consistant with disses, verse was more attacking....

    You here off nobodies to noshows so ya record’s fake hype hoe
    Jay’s got everyone laughin at 12 like the host of The Late Night Show

    fav line...


    vote-DEF
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  11. J Dot C

    J Dot C 1x RBL Champion

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    16-17

    uppin for sum more votes...
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  12. Con God

    Con God New Member

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    might be 14-17 if oz doenst count those two wack votes
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  13. prem0nition

    prem0nition pre·dom·i·nant

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    JayCee
    I dismantle g's, no way Def can handle me...
    I'll leave him in a pool of his own blood, like swimmin wit his family...
    pool of blood lines are kinda played, but at least you put a different spin on it sorta.. wasn't really feelin it though
    Jay's lethal wit text & I should be mentioned among tha best...
    So I'm here to stake my claim ^^^.....thru tha middle of ur chest...
    the punch is clever, but the set up coulda been a more direct rather than just talking about how "lethal" your text is. could've dissed your opponent and made it more effective
    All u do is post text, u have no life at all, stupid queer...
    But noone's called u dope, matter fact, noone's called u in years...
    this concept has been a dis since way before any rapper was around to use it as a punch, but cool idea
    & ur girl hates u, stays screamin on sum other shit...
    So Black's always in tha doghouse, tryin to get wit another bitch...
    kinda like it
    Plus I heard ur dick is small, ur bitch told me wit laughter...
    That's why Def stays wit a hand on tha pump, like kids wit asthma...
    this was a straight punch
    For real tho, Def is No. 1, I'm being honest and serious...
    Now read that last line over again, this time without any periods...
    this was another good punch
    Tha fact is ur pretty wack, and I find it funny that...
    People at ur shows have their hands up.....prayin for their moneyback...
    have their hands up praying for their money back? it half makes sense, but it's a stretch
    Plus I'll fuckin end tha hype, when I shred this tyke...
    & leave a blade in Def's throat, like he's givin head to Snipes...
    seen the blade/snipes lines before, others were better

    the problem with your verses is mostly in your wording, the concepts (even though some are flipped) are cool, you just need to make your disses harder and/or more direct. sometimes your first line isn't a set-up, you're just ending it in a line that rhymes with the word at the end of the punch line.. make the set-up lead into the punch and make it all directed at your opponent, it's cool if you have a line talking about yourself as long as it's clever, but to just say "my text is lethal" is a waste of space.



    Blackdef
    You here off nobodies to noshows so ya record’s fake hype hoe
    Jay’s got everyone laughin at 12 like the host of The Late Night Show
    yeah, this works
    He’s so pitifully played and predictable, Jay can’t rock me writing
    I see his punches coming… especially when my aim says J dot C’s typing
    nah, not really.. the lead in made it seem like it was gonna be something clever but you ended it weak
    I stay proofin his lines, so I aint lying when I say Jay’s stupid Wack
    But I’m not gonna poke fun at his rap level… I wouldn’t stoop to that!
    decent, straight-forward, but effective
    He’ll only fade to Black in comparison, none’s felling his shitty writs
    The only Blueprint this Jay could be seen on is for building an idiot
    building an idiot? the concept was there, but you definitely should have thought this one out more
    I’d son you into oblivion, but you have been I heard so why try..
    ya mom’s a brickhouse, so she musta got laid by Serge or Razah
    this was almost dope, but it coulda been put together better
    Heard Oz got ya name tatted on his dick… yea, you told me about it…
    But don’t get mad at me, ^I'm not the one puttin words in ya mouth trick
    played punch
    a fagot bitch that has a lisp and his obsession with dick’s relentless...
    this Gay Cee’s charged more cocks than pissin on electric fences
    hmm, I don't feel this one
    Your only dope shit was bit from Galv, now you’re wack and hopeless
    Only thing you got on lock’s ya car door when blacks approach it
    in the first line you're talking about one thing and in the second you're talking about something completely different and they don't connect in either way..
    in addition, YOU ARE A BITER as well, so don't dis someone for something YOU ALSO DID, but the closer punch was alright, just needed more of a set up


    verse was pretty decent, a couple flips and some bad wording, but overall it wasn't bad. probably shouldn't dis people for something you've done though, because some of us know who you used to be on another site...



    vote - Blackdef



    HOPE YOU GUYS READ THIS BREAKDOWN, I TRIED TO LEAVE SOME CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM TO HELP YOU GUYS WRITE MORE EFFECTIVE VERSES
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  14. J Dot C

    J Dot C 1x RBL Champion

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    ^^u breakdown each verse...hate on his lines more...than u vote for him without an explanation of why u voted how u did? after a breakdown like that at least explain ur vote...
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  15. prem0nition

    prem0nition pre·dom·i·nant

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    you both had 2 punches I felt, he had more lines that were alright, my main problem with his verse is calling someone else a biter, my main problem with your verse is that your wording is off a lot and the ideas aren't fully developed

    so that to me equals a win for him, and I'm saying that honestly even though you probably don't believe it
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  16. Focal

    Focal SOX WORLD CHAMPS SUCKA

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    well i really wasnt feelin a lot in either verse.def had the aim line which was nice and J had the asthma line. bottom line i was feelin j dot c's lines a little more than def's.thats why he gets my vote
    Vote: J Dot C
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  17. IgloS

    IgloS Eye Glows

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    I dismantle g's, no way Def can handle me...
    I'll leave him in a pool of his own blood, like swimmin wit his family...
    -old punch... new flip
    Jay's lethal wit text & I should be mentioned among tha best...
    So I'm here to stake my claim ^^^.....thru tha middle of ur chest...
    -nah
    All u do is post text, u have no life at all, stupid queer...
    But noone's called u dope, matter fact, noone's called u in years...
    -dope
    & ur girl hates u, stays screamin on sum other shit...
    So Black's always in tha doghouse, tryin to get wit another bitch...
    -nod bad
    Plus I heard ur dick is small, ur bitch told me wit laughter...
    That's why Def stays wit a hand on tha pump, like kids wit asthma...
    -too corny for me
    For real tho, Def is No. 1, I'm being honest and serious...
    Now read that last line over again, this time without any periods...
    -lol.. cool, cool
    Tha fact is ur pretty wack, and I find it funny that...
    People at ur shows have their hands up.....prayin for their moneyback...
    -ok
    Plus I'll fuckin end tha hype, when I shred this tyke...
    & leave a blade in Def's throat, like he's givin head to Snipes...
    -nah


    ayo...
    You here off nobodies to noshows so ya record’s fake hype hoe
    Jay’s got everyone laughin at 12 like the host of The Late Night Show
    -not bad
    He’s so pitifully played and predictable, Jay can’t rock me writing
    I see his punches coming… especially when my aim says J dot C’s typing
    -lol
    I stay proofin his lines, so I aint lying when I say Jay’s stupid Wack
    But I’m not gonna poke fun at his rap level… I wouldn’t stoop to that!
    -sorta played
    He’ll only fade to Black in comparison, none’s felling his shitty writs
    The only Blueprint this Jay could be seen on is for building an idiot
    -so so
    I’d son you into oblivion, but you have been I heard so why try..
    ya mom’s a brickhouse, so she musta got laid by Serge or Razah
    -lol
    Heard Oz got ya name tatted on his dick… yea, you told me about it…
    But don’t get mad at me, ^I'm not the one puttin words in ya mouth trick
    -cool
    a fagot bitch that has a lisp and his obsession with dick’s relentless...
    this Gay Cee’s charged more cocks than pissin on electric fences
    -nah
    Your only dope shit was bit from Galv, now you’re wack and hopeless
    Only thing you got on lock’s ya car door when blacks approach it
    -lol

    vote=black.. he had better punches to me
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  18. HIGHRISE

    HIGHRISE New Member

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    j dot c...

    pretty decent flow kinda in and out .... the punches were pretty good .... good structure and word play

    black def...

    flow was better that j's in my opinion the punches weren't overally as good tho...
    good structure and good word play

    ova all i thought that it was close and i vote on it like dis like a boxing match...

    punches: j-10 black-9
    flow: def-10 j-8
    sturcture: j-10 def-9
    wordplay:def-10 j-9
    vote-def 38-37...

    good battle tho
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  19. lil hot sauce

    lil hot sauce Dallas Mavericks

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    vote-J dot C

    this was a good match, a close one i might add...but i liked 14 of the lines from jay...but only 12 from black(which is still dope as hell)

    anywase...jaycee got this

    good battle guys
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  20. BLooDSHoTT

    BLooDSHoTT R.I.P. Point Game

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    this was close
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