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  1. kyza soza

    kyza soza This way up.

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    i didnt say that it wasn't to my taste...i mean, the other piece that i just left feed on

    i thought that was pretty nice

    anyways

    thanx for the feed anyways

    ill be on the lookout for your future drops
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  2. blackNmild

    blackNmild New Member

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    1st off thanx 4 lookin at my drop.

    I’ve had to rebuild my confidence, rebuild the stocked up cries
    Waiting that little bit longer, till I inevitably have to relieve them again
    Life is just one long road so I am gonna have to buy some new shoes
    And it’s like a chess game with god, but damn, it’s now he’s turn to move

    This right here,dis is everyBody'z internal struggle, everyBody who truly lives and breathes air, those who juss pass thru life ckan't feel dat. That verse wuz real.It aktually inspired me to write on sumthin i've been ponderin a long time. U said life is like on long road, i alwayz saw it as circular trak wit mines dat don't move but replace themselves after bein set off. AS u get olda, u rememBa where da mines are thus u grow wiser and more aware of where and where not to go and what and what not to do.Dis bein about u friend kinda hit home 4 me,his decisions about drugz.Not so much da drugz but da choices we make. A ckouple weex ago, some friendz and i broke into dis place stole alotta load of stuff and got ckaught, dat one choice has changed my life like that. Da referense u make about ur friend put da situation in a whole nutha light 4 me.Im not even da ckriminal type, ut it's da decisions u make and da moves u make(chess) ya dig. It wuz unstructured and unrestrained, i liked it alot
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  3. LiQuiDliFe

    LiQuiDliFe RSTL Phenom

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    i normally dont like poems that dont rhyme....but i liked this one...very emotional...your pain was felt while i was reading this...good shit...i enjoyed...
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  4. birdawg

    birdawg New Member

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    yo, this is completly ill, Reminded me of when one of my bois died...

    "Hands bounded together, I hate struggle!, where’s my freedom?"
    --like this line it really shows how powerful the struggle can be...you compared it to a physicall struggle to give it power, thats dope....

    I casn really feel your pain on this one as I can relate...

    keep writ'n man and thanks for gettin at mine....
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  5. christofer

    christofer .Nothing Is Sacred.

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    some dope shit.. came at it in a very nice way.. had something to say and said it!! good drop!
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  6. kyza soza

    kyza soza This way up.

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    thanx all of you...feed is much appreieciate...feel free to drop links people
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  7. Anglewing

    Anglewing New Member

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    This was a good poem everyone can relate to the lost of a loved one. It brought back painful memories that i long to forget. And wish the past could be erased but that can't happen best thing to do is talk to friends and families. There was a lot of emotion and love in this piece. Hey i also liked the one about chasing demones. that was my favorite.
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  8. kyza soza

    kyza soza This way up.

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    thanx angelwing...much appreciated
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  9. eatemup

    eatemup New Member

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    Why does it take death to show you how much you miss someone?
    Regretting all the things I held back on, and the things I wish I said
    Never telling someone what they mean to you before…
    …It’s too late

    this is a very emotional piece it did kind of go off twords the end I can relate to it I to just lost my cousin on jan 9th 2004 but very tight piece
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  10. kyza soza

    kyza soza This way up.

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    thanx much appreciated...and condolences for your losses
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  11. StubbilyMug

    StubbilyMug DayorDollar Records

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    this seems emotional..but its alot of shit in one thing..tryin to put all the shit in ur head on text...comes out a bit unstructured i think...not much realization in it except your conclusion you draw..then put down

    be easy bro
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  12. kyza soza

    kyza soza This way up.

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    thanx mayne...much appreciated
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