Rapmusic Battle League - #1 contendership- Theilliterate Vs smittyrythym

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  1. KroniK

    KroniK R.I.P. U

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  2. TheIlliterate

    TheIlliterate Well-Known Member

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    In. I'll go 20 or something.

    EDIT: na fuck that let's go 30.
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  3. smittyrhythm

    smittyrhythm you love 2 hate me

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    checkity check so go ahead and get your weaponry wet
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  4. smittyrhythm

    smittyrhythm you love 2 hate me

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    lets go little it..i got bigger fish to fry.
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  5. TheIlliterate

    TheIlliterate Well-Known Member

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    breathe man, we'll get it. here i'll go 24 for ya.


    you sound like you wanna scope some meth, and i don't gotta quote the thread
    makin' it out like your lines float over heads like what you wrote's the best
    in reality they're simple like: I'LL CHOKE YA NECK UNTIL THIS BLOKE IS OUTTA BREATH
    ... well if that's your idea of multis at least you'll get the vote from Deth

    and i can do your style since you don't rap it clever cuz/
    jus throw in random words that rhyme like birds and time till we forget how whack the setup was/
    tbh though, you've got a flow, an there's a couple touches i can learn from you/
    like how putting what you "say in quotes" to "sway some votes" DON'T make your punches personal/

    now i'm rhymin' with ease, divine in due time like white wine with the cheese
    think you're prime for givin' dimes a quick squeeze? Smit please...
    saying you're into hittin' chicks would be a lie or a tease
    cuz even in Smit's pic you can see, a two-dimensional guy on his knees

    i'm a vagabond crossed with Megatron but my style's prime like Optimus
    you've got an undeserving ego that's a mile wide and not legit
    cuz when you listed your 10 wins it was child-like and awful, kid
    at the top of your post you should have wrote: "MY ENTIRE LIFE'S ACCOMPLISHMENTS"

    we called you a faggot so you spammed the lounge, like you snapped bro
    there was NOTHING your raps showed, just you actin a joke tryin to get in the last blow
    but listen fag MR.J said it best... tell us why you mad though

    talking smack on the net? now that's a cheap card to have used
    cuz all that that proved was that my ten year old sister beefs harder than you
    see my every line is personal like a diary journal, but what THIS kid's kickin' is soft
    you bitin TaC's swagger the way your raps stagger-- I'm thinkin Smit's rhythm is off
    while Ven was sleepin' your pen was squeekin, dude's been writing for me for weeks
    while my eyes are saggin' i fried this faggot so i can finally get some sleep

    good luck dude.
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  6. TheIlliterate

    TheIlliterate Well-Known Member

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    that's weak homey.
    making me rush my verse so we could drop at the same time then you pull this shit. nice.
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  7. smittyrhythm

    smittyrhythm you love 2 hate me

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    (905)895-4521 you might need this :funny:

    Yes I am a villain.. most hate my writtens and so it's automatic and given
    That you wont get votes for lyrical jokes but for talkin average-shit to a 'rhythm'
    To be honest duke all you brought is proof that you've yet to move on from Dr. Seuss
    Cuz you floppin a deuce and you lost your juice when you teethe on puns from a toddlers booth
    You just bought your 'noose' and you 'against the ropes' from a 'solid-drop' you can 'knot-produce'
    Let me introduce you from an ill-taught dusche to name & wordplays for their 'prop or use':

    It's time to wake you dont shine as great and took the 'L to B' next to my weight
    When I looked at 'the ll' on a richter-scale I had to set his name next to 'lite rate'
    Put-it-together, rib roast this fake now I'm patient and waitin to get a plate-
    When I see 'ill lit' in front of the 'e.r.' soon afterwards he'll be gettin 'ate'
    I was in debate if I made his 'heart-break' with the way he 'fiddles with Petty-filler'
    My art's way over ya dome like Sistine pillars, on the mic I'll angel yo sweaty spillers
    'Triple-round burst' when I flex the trigger from just '1-shot', I'm a steady killer
    You'll see his center get hit with 3 (the'lll'iterate) like he tried to d-up on Reggie Miller

    He 'may pull' a retreat see him 'leave n red' just like his national flag -
    start packin his bags book a flight to 'B.C.' and put him back in the past
    I'll put my 'two cents in ya face' to replace the iris X from off 'deth lids' X-(
    And after I 'cross his eyes' out ill-literature skills progressed to 'Dyslexic'
    Speakin of 'X' his time-table sloppy and the clock has obviously stopped
    So I'll multi-task from apostrophe's to the properties of numerology- watch:
    You probably sparking parsley-pot partially when you should be harvesting crops
    But the 'scripts' I got will get rid off 'ill feelings' like products pharmacy's stock
    I'll trade bargaining shots towards your New Market but I'm not targeting shops
    Your artistry's never bought, gets tossed, 'ill litter it' with all the garbage he drops...

    this concludes Reading and Writing 101


    pardon me, doc...

    :eek:wned:
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  8. smittyrhythm

    smittyrhythm you love 2 hate me

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    oh wtf, u went 24? you said 30

    fuck it Ill shorten it..
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  9. TheIlliterate

    TheIlliterate Well-Known Member

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    i went 25, miscounted.
    it was an unfinished verse. i just posted what i had written at the time cuz i thought you would post right away.
    i guess not.
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  10. smittyrhythm

    smittyrhythm you love 2 hate me

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    :funny: ya that was posted that night while you was on, you dropped the following day I wasnt online. It's not that deep brahhhh
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  11. DethStryque

    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    THIS BATTLE IS SLEPT ON.Good job by both of you guys! Tomorrow I'm breakin yall votes down bar-couplette vs bar-couplette style,so the voting and comparison will be clean clear lucid and accurate.Good job you guys! The winner of this battle most def deserves #1 contender status.
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  12. TheProle

    TheProle Pls go, Milhouse.

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    Ridiculous battle. When I read Illiterate's verse, I figured that nothing smitty could have replied with would have got him the battle back, but I was almost proved wrong.

    Ill's verse was just so fluid, it was read just as easily as it would have been to hear in person. His punches were great, and nothing seemed overly forced. On the other hand, Smitty had some ridiculously innovative and illustrated bars, but some of them felt like he was showing off he could rhyme two completely obscure things perfectly. I can see how someone might enjoy that, but it was a bit tougher to go through.

    If it was just based on punches, I'd go with Smitty, but Ill had the whole package with this verse.
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  13. DethStryque

    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    I most definitely respect the importance of going for the whole package and not just punches (unless the punches from one verse just slaughterhouse overwhelm the other verse) alone...and when I did the infamous 15 category breakdown that I use (most of which I displayed in my breakdown of RaZ vs TaC) I reached the opposite conclusion. Smitty took this 10-5.

    OPENER--SMITTY: The difference here is that TheIll had the siccer rhyme scheme in the opener but he didn't layer it with punches,so when his punch came at the end of the 2nd bar coupler? It was pretty easy to decide the winner. TheIll's punch was a decent personal. Smitty's was not only a clever and stronger punch but it was given more weight because TheIll fulfilled Smitty's prediction with his opener.

    FLOW: SMITTY. Both of these lyricists had smooth flow but Smitty began to step up his rhyme scheme from the 3rd bar on,and any lyricist of skill will tell you that maintaining a smooth flow with elevated rhyme scheme is harder than doing the same thing with less complex schemes

    METAPHORS--TIE: Both of them threw numerous metas but they alternated in power,so even though Smitty had the more numerous metas he didn't always have the quality that TheIll did and TheIll didn't overpower Smitty with his less frequent meta use

    VOCAB--SMITTY: Pretty clear here. Next.

    PUNCHLINES--SMITTY: Clearly Smitty had the wider array of punchlines,although he didn't have anywhere near the amount of wicked personals that TheIll has. Basically Smitty swarmed TheIll with a vast array of everything except personals that hit hard,were creative,slick,and funny.

    PERSONALS--THEILL: My manz TheIll just WENT IN on the personals. I mean he had me lol with the personals man...he kilt Smitty's style of "using quotes" to emphasize his punches and Smitty's spamming man...he just went in on that. Very good job there.

    VOCAB--SMITTY: both of these guys went in with the vocab. I honestly lean toward Smitty here too because bar for bar Smitty had a clear edge in the use of clever wordplay--which is a subcat of vocab--slightly more accurate use of each and every word,plus his word selection and the visuals he drew were slightly sharper...but it wasn't really clear enough to make the difference that he usually makes and TheIll was good in this category too.

    WORDPLAY--SMITTY: The clever use of wordplay is Smit's strength. Next.

    NAMEPLAY--SMITTY: Smitty used the only instance of nameplay with the 3 in ya center punch,lol

    CREATIVITY--SMITTY: Because Smitty used a wider palette of subjects for creativity and he went deeper with the various subjects that he used than TheIll did. TheIll went absolutely off with the creativity in his personals,but he was creative ONLY in the personals and he made the cardinal mistake of using the overplayed OPTIMUS punch...man. Shame on him for that.You're much too good for that dawg.

    CLOSER--SMITTY: The "Ill litter it" punch is much more clever and harder than the fried this fag/get some sleep punch of TheIll's...


    VOTE: SMITTY...and there is no way that TheIll is a LW in the RBL regular tourney. He's MW at least.
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  14. smittyrhythm

    smittyrhythm you love 2 hate me

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    Uppin for votes

    And deth- there are 5 nameplays..look closer.
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  15. DethStryque

    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    That was a typo by me. I saw the nameplays. Thanks.
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  16. TheIlliterate

    TheIlliterate Well-Known Member

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    if this shit gets 2 votes I'm getting the fuck outta here.
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  17. Mrjdm998

    Mrjdm998 New Member

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    Smitty is one of the few battlers who can always come with creative concepts and seems to always have set-ups which make the punchline hit harder. This was hard to judge as Ill went for a much more personal approach while Smitty just went all out with wordplay. After reading both verses a few times I feel that Smitty edged. Ills verse was amazing due to the way he disected Smittys style down perfectly which using good schemes and an above average flow. However I think Smitty overpowered him with solid punch after solid punch, while Ill had a few misses (Optimus prime, the diary journal line didn't seem that creative) in his verse. This could really go either way and I've flip flopped a few times on it to be honest.

    Vote: SmittyRhythm
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  18. smittyrhythm

    smittyrhythm you love 2 hate me

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    mooch-hoez grassy-ass.. 2-1 up
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  19. Twinmania

    Twinmania Maybe we don't exist....

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    Dayum at the dopeness of this battle:

    The Illiterate

    OPENER - 5
    FLOW - 8
    METAPHORS - 8
    VOCABULARY - 8
    HUMOR - 6
    PUNCHLINES - 8
    PERSONALS - 10
    NAMEPLAY - 4
    WORDPLAY - 5
    VISUALS - 6
    RHYME SCHEME - 7
    CREATIVITY - 7
    CLOSER - 5

    Total: 87


    wasn't particularly feeling the opener or closer but verse flowed really well and the personals kept hitting, dope verse.


    smittyrhythm

    OPENER - 6
    FLOW - 8
    METAPHORS - 6
    VOCABULARY - 8
    HUMOR - 7
    PUNCHLINES - 7
    PERSONALS - 5
    NAMEPLAY - 10
    WORDPLAY - 8
    VISUALS - 7
    RHYME SCHEME - 8
    CREATIVITY - 6
    CLOSER - 8

    Total: 94


    Great verse. Flowed really well and the nameplay was consistently good. Liked the closer and the rhyme schemes were on point

    WINNER: smittyrhythym
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  20. Jai-Z

    Jai-Z Bangem, Jai

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    Ummmm... honestly.. I dont know what the fuck yall were reading... but, I thought Ill creamed Smitty. Not saying Ill was amazing, but he came pretty decent. I liked a few of his punchez.

    The "outta breath/Deth" was funny.. the "clever cuz/setup was"... was Lol... the "2-dimensional avatar diss" was chucklesome. Your getting better, jst cut out the filler and your cool.

    Smitt your cool as hell... and youve gotten bettrr too, but this verse was pretty terrible to b honest. Your versez against Deth were much better than this. Most of this verse had hella stretched wordplay.. and fucked up wording. Your last 2 punchez were your only decent.


    Vote= Ill.. easy.
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