Discussion in 'The Rapmusic Storytelling/Topical League' started by Tacky Jones, Jan 3, 2011.
which is good
agreed. i hope we get a few more votes
Yea...i'm sure MK will vote and i hope Danny votes as well...i hope Pain votes too but that's not looking too good...damn proud of you T.a.C
aside from me spelling "where" wrong. I would like for some one to be so kind as to show me where i used words wrong and placed them incorrectly.. thanks
obviously if i have to explain what im saying i missed the mark and i understand that.. im not tryna be argumentative or anything but on a honest note.
I wear a contradiction on my chest.
(that contradiction is a crucifex obviously..if one doesnt understand why a crucifix is a ccontradiction, its because jesus tells us to not worship idols)
& I've persevered through persecution
restitution cost beyond comprehensiveness
(basically what im saying is, through out all lifes struggles, im still in debt, beyond the capacity to understand )
an institution inflicting humans it got us stupid.
(the Federal reserve, and constitutional laws..i used the word got, to inner rhyme with taught. in the next bar)
Where taught to do it, so we maneuver,
accordingly to repay all this debt.
(evidence of conformity within society..this is relating to everyone on a level that is so undeniable it's ignorant to ingore)
As mother earth grows older, and mankind becomes bolder, we see
the order of the past become over it's moving sorta fast
(this is describing the beliefs and standards of the past, becoming outdated and replaced
ie:age of aqaurius)
it's a more significant sign... than a solar eclipse Or a deluge from
the polar caps.
(the fact that mankind is becoming more aware of past standards being wrong and advancing towards their own beliefs and standards, these things are more significant signs of the time then, natural disaster's or mysteries)
Our economy collapse isn't why I'm afraid in these last
days.... it's our "abominable ways", we think, goes unfazed
that got me amazed & contained
in this very room in my estate
(pretty self explanitory, it's not economy, or earthqaukes that got the character convinced he's in the last days, it's the fact that mankind has become so abominable, by rejecting god, and religion, and leaning on their own understanding. that's why the character feels the world has no hope.. bc their foundation isn't solid)
so idk how or where i used a word out of accordance. but im not saying im mad i didn't get any votes. i just dont understand how people didnt understand what i was saying, possibly bc they don't think like i do.
i also spellt eradicating incorrectly. and i may have forgot to make a word or two plural.
but the incorrect usage of irradiating, could be justifiably appropriate within the context.
jesus said to not worship false idols.
crucifix are considered idols in some branches of christianity
nigga u crazy jesus said to not worship idols PERIOD!
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1 John 5:21
Little children, keep yourselves from idols.
Exodus 20:4, "Thou shalt not make unto thee any graven image, or any likeness of any thing that is in heaven above, or that is in the earth beneath, or that is in the water under the earth:"
Deuteronomy 29:17, "And ye have seen their abominations, and their idols, wood and stone, silver and gold, which were among them
really wanna go this route nom?
side note: the crucifx being contradictive is my opinion btw.
jesus was on earth.
go to the sanctuary with all this nom.. tac or shad gone get pissed and ban me for spamming the board with this jesus talk. u know they hate christians
You shall make no graven image or any likeness of anything in heaven or earth, nor bow down to any such thing." This is derived from the first commandment and leaves no doubt about what God thinks of false idols
but what happened to the question about breaking my first stanza down.. bc i didn't see how i misused any words or anything, i gooogle shit before i use words and google how to use the word in a sentence.
When I Get A Minute I Will Do So LP, You Don't deserve just a 5 minute quick breakdown.
So, Again, When I get some time I Will give you the time you deserve and break it down.
You had bad word usage, came across fake and forced.
Don't google words, nor use google to see how to use them.
That in itself spoils it on your thoughts and creativity.
But Seriously LP. Your verse was full of words on words with no backbone.
Your 2nd half of your verse was better.
Read your verse out loud, can you without stopping yourself to think what a
word means or see if it's used right? That right there will stop the reader just for a sec
so he/she can verify it.
Also, You said YOU even had to look the words up in google to make sure they
were correct and used correct, now imagine if someone needs to do that when
reading your verse?
But, again when I get a sec I'll break it down for you.
I wasn't hating on your verse, it was just wordy but at the same time not wordy at all
and you had spelling errors and grammar errors up the ass, bro.
post up week 20's schedule, eh? I want to know who I will be up against or I can wait because I'm mad proud of my verse so far and its just making me happy.
peace to the gods
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