[RANKS] Week 17 Ranks and Lounge

Discussion in 'The Rapmusic Storytelling/Topical League' started by Tacky Jones, Dec 20, 2010.

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  1. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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    Did you really have to do that?
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  2. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    just trying my best
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  3. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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    You have like 4 different fonts and sizes along with all three alignments....not saying your verse was bad or anything but it's a bit much with the formats
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  4. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    experimenting.. that's all.. tryna keep the reader interested.
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  5. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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  6. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    tryna be original.. i just hope the story resonates with the readers as much as it did with me, it's sorta my wifes life story but altered a lil bit.
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  7. HeartCloaker

    HeartCloaker Winter is coming

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    Drop the 'ism' off 'Antidisestablishmentarianism', put 'comprehensible' before 'fashion,' completely drop, "that my friends is indispensable," and explain why you're saying that their disorder is insufficient. Shouldn't it be the less disorder the better?
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  8. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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    be original with the story...the format doesn't tell the story...you do...
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  9. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    you're right.. i agree.. i just wanted to add a lil personality that's all..
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  10. Cigma

    Cigma Maxwell's Demon

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    your asinine psuedo intellect, and Antidisestablishmentarianism attitude


    There should be a - in between psuedo-intellect.

    Also there shouldn't be a comma since you have 'and' to connect subjects.
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  11. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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  12. J Keeper

    J Keeper Super Jesus

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    I never wanted to be underground.

    I'm tryin' to run the table on these mother fuckers.
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  13. Got Life?

    Got Life? Resident Megalomaniac

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    Lmk what you have in the works, I still have a bunch of solid industry connects.
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  14. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    welcome shady K to the league! get comfortable. look around.. see what it do!

    and to the otherz.. glad to have you aboard.

    lotta brandon newbies this week..
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  15. Cigma

    Cigma Maxwell's Demon

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    lol t.a.c made a silly verse

    funny though
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  16. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    just dropped my verse. merry christmas everybody
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  17. J Keeper

    J Keeper Super Jesus

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    Word, I'm actually supposed to go to a studio in the next couple of weeks, but people are flakes so I wouldn't hold my breath.

    Regardless, I'll hit you up, either in the next couple of weeks, or in Feb. when I'm back on the Island.
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  18. Got Life?

    Got Life? Resident Megalomaniac

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    Whatever's clever homie, I don't even remember my aim sn/password much less have it installed, but i'm on my cell all the time, and if you have kik messenger you can kik me @ GorillaE on there also.
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  19. J Keeper

    J Keeper Super Jesus

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    Word, I'll just shoot you a text or an e-mail.

    Don't even know what the fuck kik is.
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    Got Life? Resident Megalomaniac

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