[RANKS] Tourney Rd. 1 Ranks and Lounge

Discussion in 'The Rapmusic Storytelling/Topical League' started by Tacky Jones, Jun 10, 2012.

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  1. Cereal_Killer

    Cereal_Killer no ESCAPE

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  2. Kuja

    Kuja Jack Skellington

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    Time to make a start i think, well soon as i get back from town
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  3. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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    I love candy in my cereal.....no homo
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  4. Cereal_Killer

    Cereal_Killer no ESCAPE

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    i will mule for you any time cutie..
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  5. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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  6. J Keeper

    J Keeper Super Jesus

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    I completely forgot about this.
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  7. TheInkwell

    TheInkwell New Member

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    Glad you showed
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  8. J Keeper

    J Keeper Super Jesus

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    I didn't, really.

    I keyed a concept up and am hoping T.a.C. shows mercy.
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  9. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    wait...what?
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  10. Aesthet1c

    Aesthet1c The Morning Star

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    I really like the mood you build, going in depth on traumatizing events is really tricky because you can sound like ur looking for pity but you really made me attached to your lyrics.

    But looking at this from a critical angle. It seems like you are just rhyming your past together. Which is fine, but 3 verses of the relatively same story really draws me away from my emotions I felt during the 2nd verse.

    But you stayed on topic very well. Almost, too well. Like said before I was getting bored on the 3rd verse because you make it seem like you want fans to feel sorry for you.

    If this is a true story, I dont know what to really say other than "You are an inspiration" if I said anything else I would taint the compliment.

    Wish I could say more but your lyrics were very level all the way through. But, You could use some syllable modifications here and there.

    I racked my memory trying to figure out shit
    Calling her, asking her, until she told me forget about it
    She makes shit up, she gets that from her mother’s side
    Claiming I used to beat her until her brother tried
    To come over, he hit me and I beat him til that fucker died
    Got off on self defense, to this day I wonder why​

    Try and incorporate more metaphors and bigger words.



    It would be a shame if your competitor doesn't show up, cant waste lyrics as deep as these.
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  11. J Keeper

    J Keeper Super Jesus

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    Wasn't I late?
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  12. J Keeper

    J Keeper Super Jesus

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    Wow I got my days fucked up, weird work week.

    I'm a fucking retard sometimes.
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  13. Ravenous510

    Ravenous510 Well-Known Member

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    Hey guys...

    I don't think I'm going to be able to finish this by midnight tonight....

    I'm almost done, but I need a closer, and I have to get ready and go to work right now...

    Is it possible for you guys to shoot me an extension until like early tomorrow morning?

    Like maybe 5 or 6 a.m. or something?
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  14. patrown

    patrown student for life

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    ravenous post that in your thread. i believe if it's not denied it's an automatic acceptance.

    lmfao keeps.. what strain you been smoking? i need some of THAT.
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    new (to me) people: do you read this when not participating in the tournament or are you a wandering money hungry poet?
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  15. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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    Aesth...u can't post in battle until both have showed up or one no shows..
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  16. TheInkwell

    TheInkwell New Member

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    99% certain i'm being no-showed.. =\ debating whether to post a no-show verse or post the verse i was working on until i realized this fact
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  17. patrown

    patrown student for life

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    can my extension request be denied at 11:59? lol.. just wondering..
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  18. TheInkwell

    TheInkwell New Member

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    ^ that'd be a bitch move for someone to do, soooo i'd say you're safe =p
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  19. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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    I wouldn't allow that lol plus NG is usually good with allowing Ext.
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  20. TheInkwell

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    yeah, NG is a pretty solid dude from what i remember
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