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Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by broken_wings113, Dec 18, 2011.

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  1. broken_wings113

    broken_wings113 New Member

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    Nothing
    I feel Nothing
    I'm empty
    Numb
    Drunk?
    No--Maybe Drunk
    .
    .
    .
    Once I felt so much I couldn't bare to keep it all in
    It seems so long ago
    but it was not!
    I was vibrant
    full of life
    emotion
    laughter
    sadness
    joy?
    pain

    I was Everything!
    but
    now
    Nothing
    Dead
    no Alive
    My heartbeats confirm that this-whatever it is-is indeed life
    Breathing! Aware- Rolling with the punches-
    LIFE!
    Life?
    Life...Maybe not
    this is Nothing
    this is super high speed slow motion- swirling somewhere above my head
    Full of color
    Enticing
    Bidding me to reach up
    and up
    Calling me
    Telling me that everything exists just within my reach
    Tiptoes
    Fingers grazing
    I can feel it!
    I can
    |
    |
    No-Denied
    I'm inadequate
    I used to be enough --once...
    Maybe I should grow more
    Too old-don't they say women ceasing growing in their twenties?
    Don't know!
    Step Stool?
    Don't fall!
    Yes I can reach
    I'm here!
    I'm where I tried so hard to be but
    Nothing there!
    Lies! Lies!
    Tomorrow is a lie
    It's just yesterday in a pretty disguise
    Maybe Tomorrow? Yes Tomorrow will be Everything--
    misplaced hope but I keep on keeping on
    because
    everyday's like to today
    and today is nothing
    Nothing
    I feel nothing
    I think one day I was something
    but today
    Nothing
    I feel
    No
    I don't
    I simply don't
    This isn't anything!
    Drunk-no?
    Maybe...yes
    I raise my glass-
    There's Nothing
    test
  2. patrown

    patrown student for life

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    I'd be lying if I said I can't relate to what this says to me.
    My best advice to you is forget about tomorrow, and live for today.
    It's not all lies, but most of it is.
    My glass is empty too. Or else I'd be asleep!
    test
  3. Nebulaz

    Nebulaz fear God, not man

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    lol I would of loved if you ended it " I raise my glass- There's TOO Nothing"

    Just the thought of you toasting to cap off the ending. The toast in my opinion would be two fold. First, it would be the obvious punchline of raising the glass of wine. But second, that you'd be toasting yourself to this piece.

    It was chaotic. A feeling of frenzy and finesse. The character never felt comfortable, and neither did I. I sat with a pulse pounding from the hectic nature of the delivery, enjoying each syllable.
    test
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