Quick Freestyle, 16 bars

Discussion in 'Open Mic' started by Ace the Prophet, Dec 7, 2010.

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  1. Ace the Prophet

    Ace the Prophet A Prophet to the Game

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    Just a little somethin I typed up on my phone a couple weeks ago. Had it posted here before the site restored the back up or whatever so it got lost. Anyways, here it is. No real direction, just wanted to write somethin, haha

    Needs are so timeless, all our wants are endless
    Life is just a dream of everything our mind renders
    Money's just a fabric that politics lend us
    Listen to the messages that everybody sends us
    Stand up to the backbone that always tries to bend us
    Overthrow the forces that just wanna upend us
    Reach out to the soldiers tryin to defend us
    Do it by the decade, let's come to a census!
    Follow all the motions but look out for the sensors
    Laser-pointed systems aiming for your senses
    Five others lost, now everything is senseless
    Chances slipped away, now grasp it as it tenses!
    Take a look, see it all, wipe off all your lenses
    Never let it follow you no matter what the trend is
    Never let it run on and never let it sentence
    You to blank confusion, I mean what I meant is...​

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    http://board.rapmusic.com/open-mic/1253849-experiment.html
    http://board.rapmusic.com/open-mic/1252134-shoot-me.html
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  2. Radical Sun

    Radical Sun New Member

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    I remember this - this was good sh!t.
    Bump.
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  3. synical

    synical Blow Gang/ESP

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    its cool, id like to c some more stuff from u tho
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  4. Ace the Prophet

    Ace the Prophet A Prophet to the Game

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    Haha, good lookin from both of ya. And synical, check out the links in my sig for my audios if you wanna hear some stuff. Uppin this
    Posted via Mobile Device
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  5. bagglad

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    it was nice burt unfinished want a part two to this man but i thought this part stood out the most doe

    http://board.rapmusic.com/open-mic/1254307-vocal-sayings.html----peep-----peep

    Laser-pointed systems aiming for your senses
    Five others lost, now everything is senseless
    Chances slipped away, now grasp it as it tenses!
    Take a look, see it all, wipe off all your lenses
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  6. the omega man

    the omega man so, it goes

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    Lines I liked:
    Do it by the decade, let's come to a census!

    Five others lost, now everything is senseless

    Chances slipped away, now grasp it as it tenses!

    Never let it run on and never let it sentence





    I love the wordplay
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  7. Ace the Prophet

    Ace the Prophet A Prophet to the Game

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    Haha, good lookin on catchin the wordplay. Bagglad, i'll get to your piece in a second.

    Uppin
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  8. Ace the Prophet

    Ace the Prophet A Prophet to the Game

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  9. RaGe Vv

    RaGe Vv New Member

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    this is pretty dope...my favorite part..

    Needs are so timeless, all our wants are endless
    Life is just a dream of everything our mind renders
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  10. DFVaInSDF

    DFVaInSDF I'm Back

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  11. eM_eighch

    eM_eighch Member

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    u right this was quick, u shoulda quickly right clicked and hit delete
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  12. BLACK ATTICUS

    BLACK ATTICUS An Actual Show Rocka!!

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  13. IgloS

    IgloS Eye Glows

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    this was pretty sick.. I liked that you kept the same rhyme scheme through out the verse.. nothing really seemed forced.. though some seemed to just fit the rhyme scheme and not really do much more

    Life is just a dream of everything our mind renders
    Money's just a fabric that politics lend us
    -that was my fav. right there.. very true.. really like life is just a dream line.. that was the stand out thought to me
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  14. twenty_ROCK

    twenty_ROCK Crack Illz

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  15. JASON ANTHONY

    JASON ANTHONY White Devil

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    I wouldn’t say that it didn’t have direction. This very easily could have been a song if you’d taken the time.

    A lot of times I read people shit here and it’s choppy as fuck. This flowed nice and actually got somewhat of a slight shiver out of me.

    Make this a song and repost.
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  16. Ace the Prophet

    Ace the Prophet A Prophet to the Game

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    Shit, I need to get on here more. Way more replies than I expected, lol...good lookin everyone. I'll get to all your pieces here real quick
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