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Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by CenTral AxiS, Jun 2, 2003.

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  1. CenTral AxiS

    CenTral AxiS New Member

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    I stare into empty space, ask questions to all those who hear,
    Those who listen answer silent far away but still near,
    I have time to escape from sessions of madness in life,
    But am missing the meaning never finding what lies within sight,
    Am I blind or just foolish should I know this role I play,
    I find my chooses are crucial each one I make each and every day,
    Which way is a mistake which path is the correct one to take,
    If I lose then I win but when I win will I fall?
    No when I win I will learn and the answers I seek will unfold,
    I progress though the stress and the tests I am dished,
    Am not blessed but manifest the way I want to live,
    No random thoughts in my mind each thought is thought through,
    The negative sort I cast aside and the positive soon become true.
    test
  2. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    "No random thoughts in my mind each thought is thought through,
    The negative sort I cast aside and the positive soon become true."


    The rhyme scheme and flow of this piece were very elegant and delicate, mos def. I found it to be smooth with all these complex, yet simple at the same time, questions. I found your whole concept to the drop creative, although done quite a few times here in the Poetry Realm. You did it quite well though, I must admit, nice joint, family. I thought it was something we could all learn a bit more about poetic thoughts from. My blessings..
    test
  3. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    The rhyme scheme was pretty basic and flowed like a basic A-B rhyme scheme. The theme I got from the poem is you have a lot of stuff on your mind and a lot of internal conflict, and you're trying to push that negativity to the side.
    test
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