Purest poerty

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  1. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    My heart became a chasm of nothingness
    On the day I realized that love is
    And forever must be, to claim its essence
    A study in imperfection.
    I fled home, to the towers of my inebriated fantasy
    To make mirrors of my heart and soul.
    Behind the shattered glass
    Is a mist too grey to see through,
    A dull sheen that no sun
    Can hope to brighten with its warmth.
    A heart betrayed by its own
    Overpowering love
    Teaches itself to become numbed to pain
    I’ve learned to check my pulse twice
    To see if it’s still beating.
    I am growing so weary of this burden that is my intellect
    I am a child enriched by the lands of literature
    Yet lacking in the most basic of
    Experiences necessary to growth.
    I yearn to bask in the depth of my emotion
    Bathing in the purest form of poetry.
    Yet I chase the smoke of a fire
    Burned to embers long ago.
    test
  2. j$crILLa

    j$crILLa ~$crillVille~

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    "My heart became a chasm of nothingness
    On the day I realized that love is
    And forever must be, to claim its essence
    A study in imperfection."

    beutiful opening..... the way its worded. everything

    nice peom
    test
  3. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    beautiful poem as a whole... i loved the way it flowed and essence of it all... great job.
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  4. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    opened up well, and didnt stop. nicely written

    one luv
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  5. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    yes, as the others have said this was great from start to finish.......i like your style
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  6. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    Yes opened it up very well, the best poetry is the poetry that holds ya from the first line, like this one did, excellent peice
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  7. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    thanks for the comments everyone
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  8. illpoetical

    illpoetical raising the bar everyday

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    that was really nice i liked the opening as well
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  9. Dark_Angel

    Dark_Angel Dark_Angel

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    My heart became a chasm of nothingness
    On the day I realized that love is
    And forever must be, to claim its essence
    A study in imperfection.

    i know it already been quoted but i liked it enough to repeat it, i really liked this peice and what you were saying at the start had me drawn in, loved it
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  10. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    To make mirrors of my heart and soul

    damn...dope line...think this might be my fav piece by u....although i cant say i remember all of yours...but good job...keep it up
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  11. WELL DAMN.

    this was gold, to many lines to quote but

    I fled home, to the towers of my inebriated fantasy
    To make mirrors of my heart and soul.

    this poem had me glued from start to finish, loved it
    test
  12. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    thanks everyone
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  13. MzLashay

    MzLashay Livin'

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    from beginning to end this was a very well put together poem

    mad props
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  14. Optical MusiQ

    Optical MusiQ Let Tha Revolution Begin!

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    I yearn to bask in the depth of my emotion
    Bathing in the purest form of poetry.
    Yet I chase the smoke of a fire
    Burned to embers long ago.
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    This by far is the part that reverbarates thru my soul. Captavating poem yet thru it all my heart speaks these same words in a place often not visited... Thanks for that peice it's exactly what the Doc ordered.
    test
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