Pulling a Chick at the Club

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  1. bagglad

    bagglad Member

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    Pulling a Chick at the Club

    Shook and correct and must put in effect some love talk
    That’s the way a thug walk up in the club right now caught
    With no money, strong and gamble raw and like a long-handled
    Saw cut through mess, butt of this girl true and bless candles
    In the night could make sex right// “look boo my cap shades
    my eyes let me parade in your pies, lips plumb raw got a decade
    of vibes and random flows you should abandon your clothes in
    imitation of Eve and you’ll receive love like nerver before and win
    my heart we’ll then depart for bed business are you down with that”? //
    “wait I wear perfume in America and assume the character of a phat
    Sex machine plus have complex dreams about boys doing me but
    Wake up before they get up in it I always yell wait a minute my cup
    Cakes be wet my hips stay fit and I don’t play the hypocrite two thumbs
    Up never a dumb butt, I really do think you want some bad you wanna cum
    On the sheets have rum and go skeet skeet like a water pistol you want true
    Satisfaction while you perfom two action and that’s having sex while you do
    Some kissing, the wind make my coo-chee hairs cool love affairs could rule
    A girl’s heart and rip her world apart I wear pearls and smart not a hood fool”//
    “girl your body hit me in the head I must git you on the bedspread we can duel
    The surprise is the cream pies between your thighs can’t believe my eyes my fuel
    Is running out you funning around no doubt time to express satisfaction your breasts
    Is the action let me suck your wet tits and get it the power of a thug seem to impress
    You like a flower bud we can both go bloom and host a slow tune in my room so drink
    The wine and think divine because you dressed in pink and fine I’m like Colonel Klink
    On Hogan Heroes my slogan has no zeroes let me lock you down because you hot
    And brown my plot is to go down town while you moving your thing all around
    Make you scream cream at the same time run your fingers through my hair I’m a hound
    Dog girl I bark at a bone and when its dark no phone call just the bed and a stone wall”

    http://board.rapmusic.com/open-mic/1253026-chase-murda-presents-air-attack.html
    http://board.rapmusic.com/open-mic/1252977-around-way.html
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  2. synical

    synical Blow Gang/ESP

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    i love the topic and i see where u going with this piece but it just seems a little too dragged out for me and could of had a little more depth to your story..i think you can murder this topic but find a way to make it seem smoother and a little more entertaining..overall this is a decent job but i think you can do better..keep elevating...1
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  3. bagglad

    bagglad Member

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    synical THANKS FOR THE PROPS AND CRITIQUE
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  4. Chase Murda

    Chase Murda hostile enviroment

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    to be honest some of these lines was dragged out but i aee what your tryin to do..i think your alot better then what your typin,,,not hatin jus be real..i like your style jus try to find better an shorter words to match with your topics
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  5. bagglad

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    thanks fo rthe props and critiques on this one for real chase
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  6. Radical Sun

    Radical Sun New Member

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    I go with long winded lines myself - this was cool man.
    Bump.
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  7. bagglad

    bagglad Member

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    Radical Sun thanks for the props for real
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