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  1. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    i sit in sobering silence
    sorting through surface surroundings
    deceiding object by object
    what it's true net value is
    was the work worth the cost of it?......

    maybe i'll just throw it where the garbage is.

    -i think of you-

    thumbing through a treasure chest of dreams and wishes
    fumbling through filed forget me nots and un-caught kisses
    consumed by constant questioning "does he know my existance?"
    i come home everynight to the same dirty dishes........

    maybe i'll just throw them where the garbage is

    -do you think of me?-

    can you understand where it is that i'm comming from?
    could you walk miles in my shoes, while just wanting to run?
    would you speak aloud if you knew you were talking to no one?
    or refuse a person because you are waiting for "someone"?

    maybe you'll just throw me where the garbage is.
    or do you know my net worth......

    -i think of you.-
    test
  2. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    dammm, i think this is the best ive read on here, luvd the whole thing, especailly the - i think of you - do you think of me? - parts, somehow made it so much more powerful - simply beautiful.
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  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Very Creative piece here. Structure was on point.

    "can you understand where it is that i'm comming from?
    could you walk miles in my shoes, while just wanting to run?"

    those two lines had alot of meaning to it. Nice shit holly

    one luv
    test
  4. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    "thumbing through a treasure chest of dreams and wishes
    fumbling through filed forget me nots and un-caught kisses"


    Flow was massive, in my opinion. I found each aspect of poetic devices in this piece and I thought h.wood did a damn good job of it, as well. Alliteration right to imagery, nice work here. I found that this piece had a very nice organizational structured format that exited out of one topic of the whole piece to a different topic, which I try doing many times, also. This piece itself lives up to the name... Priceless! My blessings..
    test
  5. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    wow - thank you for the replies
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  6. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    i could almost hear this when i read it, it was very nice..i loved the way you used the words that you chose, they really struck a chord.
    test
  7. really enjoyed reading this, it was hard hitting and the line"maybe i'll just throw it where the garbage is", at the end of each stanza, rounded it off in a blunt way, sorta shouting out, 'EVEN SO WHATS THE POINT'..It showed how hopless is all seemed.

    ''would you speak aloud if you knew you were talking to no one''?

    frightening thoughts, which shows power..



    stay UP!
    test
  8. Nebulaz

    Nebulaz fear God, not man

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    I hope i didnt take to long before you thought i was ignoring you.. this was really emotional, it spoke to me, especially b/c its been kinda going on in my household for awhile now. but u keyed every stroke perfectly and i love it.
    test
  9. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    ^ i was wondering-lol. thanks i'm glad you like it

    i'm kind of shocked at the responses , it took a much shorter time for me to write this one but the feeling was there thank you guys
    test
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