porcelain boy SOLDIER

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  1. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    If I never talked
    I wouldn't listen more
    Cos I'm that fresh, frozen dialog
    Of conversations unspoken
    Between contention and sulfur heat

    If I never listened
    I wouldn't listen, or be thirsty
    Because I'm a rooster quit cold turkey
    Deploy this tactic, can't you see some static ?
    Constituting emergencies on my path with
    Dynamic planning, with fast bandwidth

    I'd parkour wisdom on empire
    Broadcasting reversals over tight rope
    So, the less noise I make
    The more I communicate this:
    Body language like ghost shell
    Illumines my snake pit,
    pent up mostly, by screaming wholesale

    What is it, but is what is
    Sometimes when, on what consequences



    Don't you get it fool ?

    I'm that Porcelain boy soldier, little atlas chin
    Who Chariots a land rover, over his requiem
    Riding cursed Frankenstein monster
    First to herd Cyclops in past bad posture

    Though, you will fail to understand this,

    Because of Fair Trade Poppy Fields
    Awful habit. Contrived little carcinogens
    Dry Skittles eaten alive by his Rabbit Friend
    Easter eggs: painted by China synthetics
    Incubated puzzles cracked concave genetics

    What ?




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  2. GaLaTeA

    GaLaTeA Well-Known Member

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    ...that was amazing.
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  3. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    thanks...just wrote it now. lol

    what does this mean to you ? I have no idea.
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  4. GaLaTeA

    GaLaTeA Well-Known Member

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    The title itself is interesting to me, because instead of using "Toy", you went with "porcelain boy soldier" ~ which leaves room for further implications of innocence lost within being trapped as a warrior behind a facad of being able to shatter at any second ~ porcelain is made of kaolin (white clay), and it usually is shaped into a thin layer of material of anything; in this case it could as well be a reference to skin tone, or being boyishly afraid, yet forced of being strong, a man. (I could however be completely wrong).

    It's giving off an rebelious vibe in terms of spoken word being able to draw conflict as well as discussion, but more so it's showcasing the inner voice of a swift mind wrapped in attitude of baring a chip on a shoulder due to being in possession of knowledge...

    ..then again, I could have missed the whole point.
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  5. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    mind = blown

    I had no idea what this meant, but the attitude/tone you described is how I feel right now,which is why this written went together fast.

    Thanks a lot Galatea for your well thought out reply. Those are rare.
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    GaLaTeA Well-Known Member

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    Don't mention it, you're very welcome.
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  7. the omega man

    the omega man so, it goes

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    dude seriously, you are getting more and more delusional

    This poem means nothing. I agree with the above that your title means something, but the poem makes absolutely no sense to me. I admit that sometimes your poems have difficult subtle meanings. But, dude if you don't even understand it how can you expect me to? Lol

    I read it 5 times, and I still don't understand the "rabbit eating skittles" metaphor
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  8. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    LOL

    thanks for reading. I thought about leaving the last stanza out for that reason but since I wrote it I left it.

    When I write I don't think about anything, ever. And Galatea got it right the first time, evidence that it is you who is delusional.

    Haters gonna hate.




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  9. the omega man

    the omega man so, it goes

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    lol i be delusional like a muh fukka, ya heard me?
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  10. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    @omega, I just thought of this

    you don't understand it because in the poem I said you wouldn't...wut now ?


    I also just found out my meaning today....

    Fair trade poppy are drugs...Awful habit to get into, cancer bad health
    They look like dry skittles (pills etc)...eaten alive by my sinfulsefl...(tricky rabbit friend)

    They are lucrative and appealing like easter eggs...but bad like China (globalization?)

    It's all a puzzle, cracked by smarts....It all ties into the entire poem, like when I say I got wisdom and I'll pakor it on empire (spit it to the public ?)

    lol ok maybe I'm just a bit off the rocker
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