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Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by iLL Script., Jan 29, 2004.

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  1. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    decent piece...i know the feeling...nice emotional piece

    made for a nice read

    good job
    test
  2. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    can definitely feel this piece - not there at the moment but been there - its alrite - after awhile u get numb, and then start feeling bad about not feeling bad anymore....heh.
    test
  3. Thrilla-Ali

    Thrilla-Ali Dapper Don

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    iunoo this peice was like mad depressing, with the same theme. i'll be truthfull man, i wasn't really feellin it but i read ur collab stuff wit poet n that was tight as fuck, so im awaiting to see more, wun
    test
  4. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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    thankz everybody. anybody else lol
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  5. Mr.13

    Mr.13 New Member

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    that was a good piece... expressed yourself nicely.. format was on point.. flowed nicely throughout.. and was a bit depressing... tight shit dog....... keep um coming... i'll check the rest in the siggie.. pz god
    test
  6. Dark_Angel

    Dark_Angel Dark_Angel

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    i havent read anything from you before but i can definately relate to this poem, alot of the things describe i can certainly link back to myself. its good to know someone else feels the same. even though theres heaps. but very nice poem, the description was good and i will read more from you from now on.
    test
  7. shaft600

    shaft600 New Member

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    GOT TO SAY THIS IS AN AWESOME PIECE TWENTY FIVE RESPONSE ;WELL LET ME PUT MINE UP IN HERE FOR REAL

    Holding a swaying thug’s gun is like weighing above a ton
    Them scrubs run and duck lead game has no love dun
    Yeah having critical wisdom is like a political system can’t
    Duck debates my luck either she or he hates as rhythm taints
    Face psycho action like Michael Jackson see funky lame
    Troubles got a monkey name bubbles get lumpy fame
    Arrested for tucking in cats for bucking my stats, cops
    Silly and mean like Billy Jean the brutality don’t stop
    My imagination is in Never, Never Land stay bound
    test
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