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  1. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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    Everyday that goes by,
    I become more sad.
    I cry myself to sleep at night
    Remembering tha good times I had.

    But now it's all gone,
    And I screwed it all up.
    No matter how hard I try to fix it,
    It's never enough.

    Tha tears that I cry,
    Are both salty and red.
    I try to start over,
    But this pain I cannot shed.

    I sit in my room
    Leaning agaisnt this cold hard glass.
    Questions run wild through my head,
    That I dare not ask.

    Now I spend my days in tha dark,
    Crying alone.
    Drowning in my mistakes...
    I should have known.


    Please come back...

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  2. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    Yea man depressing shit, this is kind of where I am at right now too so i can feel you to a certain degree. Real deep man, I can picture this all just really happening cause i've been there,, well I should say im going thro it. Just nice with the emotion and you just came raw, good shit


    Stay Up, Much Love, Peace
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  3. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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  4. Psycho69

    Psycho69 A Soul Born In Verse

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    That's deep. I can really relate to that.

    Great piece.
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  5. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    Indeed sad, but you can't go blaming yourself for everything that happens in a relationship, even if it is your fault. Remember, it takes two, so it's not just you. For everything that you did, she could have helped you overcome, and you the same...
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  6. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    Yea i know what you mean and all, but I usaully blame myself for everything that goes wrong in my life. Cause it is my life, Key word MY, and everything that happens in it all comes back to ME therefor I usualy take everything out on myself. Not saying it's the right thing to do, Actually it's something im working on to fix. I ust need to understand that not everything happens is my fault, but w/e right
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  7. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    no it's not whatever, just running off and acting like everythin is whatever doesnt make it any better...Ever hear the expression that silence is Golden? Well, in this case, it isn't. In this case, you have to give yourself a voice, and that voice must give you the strength to overcome anything and everything in your path. And if you can't get over it, go around it, or move it, there's no going back, and no need to stop just because something is hurting you...Move on, forward, ahead, and all the rest of the words that mean to go...Because when you can, things are a lot clearer...And granted, it's nice to take the time to stop and smell the roses and watch the world for what it is, but never, ever, let the world pass you by.......
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  8. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    In that case everything is yours for the taking, meaning what every you can't get' over all comes back to you, it's your fault. Cause it all comes back to you, no matter how much it aint your fault you're the one stuck with it, so why not take the initial blame. Anyways I didn't really mean w/e as just it's not big deal, i meant to be like i was still kind of undecided on a proper way to deal with things and blame. But anyways you do raise some nice points and i would never keep myself silent, I use my vioce everyday, though im a quite person. XERO's words of wisdom, you got a lot of good advice, but it aint all easy to follow. Actaully your advice is more or less like a phylisophy(sp) "run with the world"
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  9. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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    ur right. even if somethin's not ur fault ur tha 1 still stuck wit it, n' u have ta either fix it or overcome it, but deres always dat thought of what if i did dis instead...feel me?
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  10. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    Well, thanx for that compliment, but like I had to learn an extremely hard lesson in pain, it is necessary. Pain is a lesson that we all must learn, but fear works just as well. Think about it. Besides, nobody said it would be easy and that somebody would guide you the entire way. Like Morpheus said, "I can only show you the door, you have to go through..."
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  11. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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  12. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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  13. blaquest

    blaquest Yodel At Me

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    dukes u going threw the same shit i am stay up good poem
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  14. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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    thankz homie
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  15. MarQuise*

    MarQuise* Can You Hear Me*

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    i was feelin you on this, i liked the structure, it was simple, althou i gots to say i enjoyed your other drops more, they were somewhat deeper than what this one is. Still Lv'n it thou.
    Much Lv
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  16. lewdDog

    lewdDog Life is are own illusion

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    this is good very basic....loveing the format...seemps like my poetry when i 1st started..minus the good format...good work poet peace
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  17. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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  18. Dru-P

    Dru-P Alaskan Assassin

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    Hey I liked this man, I feel it, dropping some poetry, nice work..
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  19. StubbilyMug

    StubbilyMug DayorDollar Records

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    didnt think it was that deep
    pretty tho, slides along

    I sit in my room
    Leaning agaisnt this cold hard glass.
    -this i liked, says the most to me

    be easy bro
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  20. glasspen

    glasspen Brooklyn Bitch

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    The ending left me wanting to hear more. kind of like those movie where your like damn thats all. It was good though. I love the way you just express yourself. where as other people on here are so caught up in writing something and using big words that they dont even know. This was cool. three pens out of five.
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