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  1. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    I got this brittle shell
    It's ready to expose core
    baring my secret scar
    even now as it cracks
    I sip the inside yolk.
    To protect my hurt
    all I can do is nurture
    my nature and creature
    I offer no condolence
    I clean up the cover up
    looking for the way out
    seeing just an exit wound
    outside under 14.2 Psi
    boiling cess pools abound
    I think I'll drip in open bath
    become aware of depth
    with little to drown in
    my life is on the line
    this is paradise of paradox.
    A life saving memories
    spent at an absolute end
    as the shade strikes deep
    sinks familiar sun in me, never again
    clarity is death, feeling very confused
    I've wanted both. Was sure I didn't
    such a sterile horizon, that's me in a jar
    insightful I digress. Confess, reflex.
    still my chin lifts so high
    my mind rewinds mix tape
    Stop. Pause. Play.
    In this pineapple express
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  2. Chavvah

    Chavvah New Member

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    Coup, I really enjoy how you wrap so much detail in each line. I can since real life in all of your pieces. "I got this brittle shell It's ready to expose core baring my secret scar even now as it cracks I sip the inside yolk" Friggin sweet this first line. Great way to catch our attention!!
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  3. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    @Chavvah

    Hay cat thanks for reading...yes all my work comes from within...any artist will tell you as much. But, this is an extreme case, I am accentuating feelings on on sharp end of scale. You know what I mean. I share works online, never to people I know...it would be like them seeing me naked. Also this work was expanded on from smaller ones.

    I see you dropped a piece. I shall comment on it.
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  4. reggie jax

    reggie jax Well-Known Member

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    really enjoyed this piece, coup. you're a good writer.
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  5. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    @reggie jax

    hey thanks man, I appreciate you coming here and reading this.
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  6. iamJSwan

    iamJSwan New Member

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    needs more imagery
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    This was bodacious! I mean crazy tight... I totally wasn't expecting so much from the title, but now that i've read it the title fits and compliments it perfectly.
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  8. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    thanks for reading and I'm happy you liked ! I loved your reaction ;)

    Who is your daddy and what does he do ?
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