pearl dreams

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  1. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    i have been divided into halves
    sectioned off by seclusion and lost ahold of moralities grasp.
    made empty
    shallow
    put up for grabs
    throwing up my hands, giving away what i never had
    self destructive
    a detriment
    a detour to crossing paths
    forever devoted to a home that considers me trash
    so i
    build up my confidence only to be buried by karma's wrath
    seduction is
    a physically intimate
    but guilt filled emotional trap
    my ear drums explode and i am enclosed by the echos of hearts i've cracked
    shattered to unvaluable pieces
    what was once, worth much more than glass
    of course my luck is bad....
    i shudder at thoughts of the aftermath
    pain is forgotten but so intense after the fact
    while being held
    you can pretend it's love's arms that wrap
    and being kissed quiets the lips that scream for answers back
    "i'm good for no one" rings my thoughts as voice mail answers that
    it seems happieness is a present far too great to ask
    so half of me locks away,
    avoiding today,
    recapping the past
    while the other half
    sifts through sand to find the grain
    that wont wash away so fast
    one thats sparkle is worthy of what could be made
    if we let time pass
    test
  2. Atmosphera

    Atmosphera New Member

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    I Could Quote The Whole Poem But What Justice Would One Have

    You Write From What You See, Feel Or Even Need I Loved How Every Line Made A Thought In My Head The Thought That One Doenst Really Want To Remember.

    Great Poem, Nothing More To Say !


    Peace & Harmony
    test
  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Nice work holly, was kinda sad and made me think about alot of shit. The wordplay was dope too

    "and being kissed quiets the lips that scream for answers back
    "i'm good for no one" rings my thoughts as voice mail answers that
    it seems happieness is a present far too great to ask
    so half of me locks away,
    avoiding today,
    recapping the past
    while the other half
    sifts through sand to find the grain
    that wont wash away so fast
    one thats sparkle is worthy of what could be made
    if we let time pass"

    my favorite part

    one luv
    test
  4. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    wow...this really touched me....i loved the whole thing....very much on a sad tip..but really real as well...reminded me of somebody that i know
    test
  5. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    thank you very much for the great replies appriciate it
    test
  6. sagacious infant

    sagacious infant reflecting the sun

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    been there


    that karma is a beast

    i enjoyed reading this...all three times...and the opening line sort of threw me off until the end

    beat down...beating being self inflicted, consciously n subconsciously ....but there's still hope and an open gate for the next experience

    thank you for sharing that! even if everything i typed was just dribble
    test
  7. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    I agree with the replies here, I found this touching and it very much so hit home. A couple lines jumped out at me and that shows aspects of deliverance and voice. Your own voice helps the reader know exactly what you're talking about, know who's really talking to them, it really helps me to enjoy it. I was impressed by this piece, found it divine in all ways, mos def. My blessings..
    test
  8. vinous

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    you can pretend it's love's arms that wrap
    and being kissed quiets the lips that scream for answers back

    fave lines rite there^^,
    niceness all round tho
    test
  9. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    whats good h. wood?

    havent seen u round in a bit

    this piece was amazing......always enjoy your work...like atmosphera said...i feel bad pickin out my favorite lines b/c your piece is quoteable........but

    build up my confidence only to be buried by karma's wrath
    seduction is a physically intimate my ear drums explode and i am enclosed by the echos of hearts i've cracked
    shattered to unvaluable pieces

    damn.....just damn

    wish u would drop by more often..
    test
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