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Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by sagacious infant, Jun 10, 2003.

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  1. sagacious infant

    sagacious infant reflecting the sun

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    pack rat
    heart travels at speed of O
    picking up baggage as we go
    leaving a trail of remote controls
    leaving self with the least bit of control
    they all have a hold
    because we make it so
    giving up self in search for O
    O O OOOOOOO!!!!! no
    don`t pick up what we can`t carry
    don`t carry what we don`t need
    switch speeds
    O to all right
    all right to "that`s tight!"
    no tossing baggage out of spite
    just get rid of what we don`t like
    make sure we get them remote controls back too...
    test
  2. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    for some reason it made me laugh... in my mind i read it in a lyrical sence (dactyl). nice piece... made me think of erykah badu's "bag lady" a little bit.
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  3. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    ^^Ironic comparison.

    Anyways, i think I get the poem. You spend a lot of time in the hidden and esoteric.
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  4. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    yeah this made me laugh too, piece was very unique in it's way. And it did remind me of bag lady

    good shit

    one luv
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  5. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    reminded me of bag lady as well...seemed to have a bit of a lighter feel to it,but maybe that was just me[dunno]...really liked it. good job girl.
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  6. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Um, different.. You always come with a different approach to dropping poetic pieces, which I like. I agree, this one somewhat reminded of the Erykah Badu track, as well. I only heard it once, yet I agree it had me remember it a bit. Overall, a different and interesting piece which is always good, you come with meanings behind a weird concept to approach those meanings. My blessings..
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  7. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    well it didnt remind me of bag lady.....
    i like your cryptic, abstract style ms. thang

    "heart travels at speed of O
    picking up baggage as we go
    leaving a trail of remote controls
    leaving self with the least bit of control"
    ^^^
    i liked that

    i think i got the message from this piece.....much luv
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  8. nice n simple

    nice n simple Is Stimpy On Crack ?

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