oOWhen I Close My EyesOo

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  1. Atmosphera

    Atmosphera New Member

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    When I close my eyes I can know
    What it is to feel lust
    The touch of another - bare skin against skin
    The smell of musky desire
    Taste the sweat brought forth from passion
    Pull my hair - tame me
    Savor my nectar
    and relish in sensuality with me
    Look into my eyes at the moment
    When you feel intensity crashing upon you
    See my anguish and understand my craving
    As no other could
    Feed me on your desires and nourish me
    With your love
    Hold me in arms protecting and warm
    Then bath me in scented water
    And cleanse my soul and
    Make it pure again​
    test
  2. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    (whoa, gotta get used to this new board style...)

    nice piece... full of imagery, you painted the picture in my mind... great job.
    test
  3. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    I liked this...this came across really sensual...Left a little to the imagination. Nice.
    test
  4. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    this poem was filled with beautiful imagery. Keep it coming

    one luv
    test
  5. UnknownLady

    UnknownLady Senior Member

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    This was beautiful. I was feeling this piece from the begging till the end. Good piece keep it up!!! I'll be looking for more.

    I am Out
    test
  6. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    your so good...i will never understand why u didnt wanna post your stuff.....Pull my hair - tame me
    Savor my nectar

    liked that....love reading your work...keep it up
    test
  7. Atmosphera

    Atmosphera New Member

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    test
  8. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    i dont think i have seen any of ur pieces yet , but this one was very nice with broad imagery....keep writing and welcome to the board...


    ~one love~
    test
  9. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    nice...great imagery...sourta dirty but sweet at the same time hehehe i like it.
    test
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