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  1. Atmosphera

    Atmosphera New Member

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    Deep within the depths of time
    near the ocean’s nave I’ll find
    a dozen pearls of lustrous days
    beneath the silent, shadowed maze.

    They stretch throughout this heart of mine
    Entwined inside a drop of wine
    That passes over memories
    Of mortality, in the seas.

    The curling crush of Neptune’s waves
    Resound against tomorrows gates
    And threaten to collapse the spell
    Around this haunting, tale I tell.

    The autumns drift within the sea
    As summer sleeps eternally
    Which brings the winter chill upon
    The gloaming’s slumber, far beyond.

    I’ll drown within your cobalt gaze
    Till stars grow dim beneath the haze
    And past horizon’s distant door
    To cast my pearls, upon the shore
    test
  2. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    "The autumns drift within the sea
    As summer sleeps eternally
    Which brings the winter chill upon
    The gloaming’s slumber, far beyond."

    oh shit that was nice. Wordplay, imagery, the whold package. I wish you would post more often.

    one luv
    test
  3. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Word choice, as well as imagery impressed me a whole lot while reading through this piece. Definite some mind boggling type material you had written here to have the reader think, is there more then just a message of 'weather' and I'm sure there is, it's quite obvious, although maybe not.. But, overall, great imagery < that really stood out, mos def. My blessings..
    test
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