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  1. Atmosphera

    Atmosphera New Member

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    Hail forth his greeting of the new morning
    Where all glory is defined within a single smile.
    The humanity of his spoken truth is utterly compelling,
    Maybe I shall hang my coat and warm up next to his craccling fire.
    The warmth of his virtue tingles my solemn heart
    Where a once gaping void has since been filled.
    My angel, deepest love growing from the very start
    And draw over the covers where haste lay spilled.
    His perplexed beauty I do worship,
    Within the texture of soft skin, naturally black mattered hair.
    Climb aboard and set sail in my storm riden ship
    And the love my lost soul mate gleefully makes me aware.
    It was that April midnight
    Where it all was finally laid to rest.
    A hapless soul in the grips of darkness' plight
    With a shameful destiny clutched closely to vest.
    So sweet the taste of his large lips
    As I am smitten by this steady diet,
    Laying just beyond these trembling fingertips,
    We lay upon a feathered bed with all of my nightmares to quiet.
    test
  2. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    i loved it

    actually reminds me of one of my fav poets on here..²²²²it boi.....

    was real smooth....pictured this in my mind....dont understand what took u so long to post something on here...u defenitally have talent

    The humanity of his spoken truth is utterly compelling

    loved that line

    def want to see more....
    test
  3. unspoken1

    unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen

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    nice piece...i havent seen you in the realm before so i would like to be the first to welcome you.....keep writing
    test
  4. Craccer_Jacc

    Craccer_Jacc SudAnillyst

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    very nice piece the imagry was on point and i loved the emotiopn u displaced but it also showed us alot about yourself keep the vibe flowen through coax....



















    *strolls out smoken a KOOL*
    test
  5. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Now this caught my eye, because it had as much imagery as I like, not as much as I do myself in my pieces. Although, it was enough and had be paying full attention. I found this to be interesting, because of the word choice that described the image that I needed to say..

    "My angel, deepest love growing from the very start
    And draw over the covers where haste lay spilled.
    His perplexed beauty I do worship,
    Within the texture of soft skin, naturally black mattered hair."


    ^ This was artistic within the words that you had used. Simply a smooth and lovely piece, mos def. My blessings..
    test
  6. Atmosphera

    Atmosphera New Member

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    Thank You For Your Kind Replies

    Pity It Showed Me Nothing Still Yearn For The Desire
    test
  7. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    well first off I like you "name"....that caught my eye

    and then after I read this poem I was pretty impressed

    Good work....nice imagry And use of words...I enjoyed this for real

    PEACE AND GODBLESS
    test
  8. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    Yeah i like that...makes me wanna throw my hands up in praise. Not really too keen on "religious or spiritual" pieces because that's a very touchy subject, but this wasn't at all overbearing like a lot of joints that move along the same lines. Good read.
    test
  9. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    You have a very unique style, i like it alot. The imagery was really good. You got a way with your words. Very smooth piece. I hope to see more from you soon

    one luv
    test
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