One Wish

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  1. tk2oo3

    tk2oo3 New Member

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    if only i was granted one wish
    id wish to possess, the happiness of a newborn child
    but this is reality, what i wish is a dream, thatll never come true
    hoping will get me nowhere, cuz wishes are never granted
    theres no magical way to, go back in time, to those carefree days
    but you can take me there, me and you, we can go there, together
    together we can escape this earth, and climb up, to the seventh heaven
    i wouldnt commit so many sins no more, you could ease the pain
    in those times of need, i could depend on you to comfort me
    though i havent cried in years, i could show you the silent cries, hidden in these tears
    have them gently strolling down my face, like drops of blood
    but please dont let me feel, like im doing this alone
    hold me close, i wanna gently lay back, onto you
    i wanna feel the warmth of your body, the softness of your touch
    i wanna feel your breath, brushing up against my skin
    i wanna feel the underscribable comfort, in your womanly squeeze
    i wanna feel the friction, between your skin and mine
    i wanna feel the same passion, thats killing me inside, up inside you
    i wanna die, and reincarnate, up inside of you
    so we could always be one, instead of two
    your beauty is flawless, like a rose without the thorns
    lost in the fragrance, im completely yours
    my heart is in your hands, you can do with it as you will
    i can no longer control myself, i just flow with the passion
    its rushing up inside of me, like rivers
    i cant help but, let it carry me to you

    (side note: i was feelin horny & sad at the same time thats kinda noticable horny - 2nd half, sad - 1st half, theres more emotion in it than that but those are the 2 main ones.. & this isnt finished tho im not goin go back to it i jus dont wanna feel too much emotion in me again like that to the point that im hurting like that.. & uh why am i writing so much poetry lately.. its really not my thing..)
    test
  2. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    i cant answer why you have been writing so much poetry........but im glad you do and i enjoy your work.......

    i wanna feel the same passion, thats killing me inside, up inside you
    i wanna die, and reincarnate, up inside of you
    ^^^
    raw

    nice piece

    peace and blessings
    test
  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    "i wanna feel the same passion, thats killing me inside, up inside you"

    pretty dope line. Nicely written piece

    one luv
    test
  4. utsukushikumegami

    utsukushikumegami That's Ms. Goddess to you

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    "but this is reality, what i wish is a dream, thatll never come true
    hoping will get me nowhere, cuz wishes are never granted"


    if only this wasn't true...this was nice, keep em' coming tk...
    test
  5. tk2oo3

    tk2oo3 New Member

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    i think you misunderstood that part.. what i meant by that was that something cant magically happen it has to be done by something.. so the only thing that could bring me back to those carefree days of a kid is a woman.. so it still has a happy ending.. kind of..
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  8. Angelica

    Angelica Angelicious

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    I think it's a really cool verse
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  9. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    "hold me close, i wanna gently lay back, onto you
    i wanna feel the warmth of your body, the softness of your touch
    i wanna feel your breath, brushing up against my skin
    i wanna feel the underscribable comfort, in your womanly squeeze
    i wanna feel the friction, between your skin and mine
    i wanna feel the same passion, thats killing me inside, up inside you
    i wanna die, and reincarnate, up inside of you
    so we could always be one, instead of two"


    this part was lovely... wonderful poem.
    test
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