Old Poem of mine called "Mental Illness"

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  1. Knowledge

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    A lot of people don't realize I used to write/record & what not, & since the boards don't go back that far... figured I'd post at least one of my poems from back when I used to write more & post it under this alias.

    A rusted cage filled with fragile rage
    It's a feeling like wandering a 1,000 graves
    Soul depraved, I'm pondering, How am I standing
    Thoughtless, emotions en-caged
    Hope succumbs to emotion, devotion for escape
    Stand still, embody torture, enjoy a life rape
    Bound by see through walls hate becomes effusive
    Escape becomes illusion waiting for fate's conclusion
    Binding war with seclusion
    Reactions become muted, As they sing "just walk on by"

    "Just walk the fuck on by" Never stop or stumble or wonder why?
    How do you stand so still?, where do you find your thrills?
    Between mediation & the body that hate filled
    One day I'm insane & the next
    I'm taking my life in vain
    See escapism doesn't live here
    Imagine if you cried til all the water inside you died
    Strong willed inside but on the outside...

    Well that's another story, a different story
    How did I get here
    Will I ever get out of here
    Ever embody your fear?
    Feel that goose bump breeze
    Slowly tickle & buckle your knees
    A disease like paralysis
    Making you feel dead but still allowing you to breathe.
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  2. InTheStars

    InTheStars Reflective

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    I really enjoyed the smoothness of this and how I was pulled in with practically each word. I do think you meant in vain and not in vein, but that neither here or there. What else do you have from way back when that you want to share?
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  3. Knowledge

    Knowledge 12 lbs with dick insert.

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    Yeah, I did, thankfully my spelling & grammar has improved since then... :funny:
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  4. mr.rip

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    still got that heat. i haven't read your stuff in a hot minute. love your work.
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  5. Knowledge

    Knowledge 12 lbs with dick insert.

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    Too kind, thank you.
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  6. Jay Bee

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    i liked the imagery in this piece. felt like i was there or sum shit

    favorite line" Imagine if you cried til all the water inside you died"
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