of days gone by....

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  1. WoKoBo

    WoKoBo New Member

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    gimme any feedback...



    I lie on the warm, silky sand
    of a deserted ivory beach.
    my thoughts my only companions.
    As the salt-laced breeze gently caresses the shore,
    my mind drifts...
    and she wanders through my daydreams,
    never knowing.
    but then, from the crashing, white-crested waves,
    she emerges.

    As she approaches, her playful smile teases
    and her penetrating stare beckons
    and i know that she is all i desire.
    before i can speak, she reaches out to take my hand...
    and together we trace the shoreline
    leaving a trail of footprints
    and two names scrawled in the sand.

    all the while, she speaks not a word
    but gazes into my eyes,
    venturing so much deeper
    to my heart - a place where few have ever been.
    She kisses me and changes me,
    becoming a part of me
    and forever touching my world.
    Fingers intertwined, two stands as one,
    words unable to express all the love i feel for her,
    wishing i could stop the clock
    and live in that moment forever.

    As dusk creeps over the horizon,
    we watch the sunset colors slowly slip away,
    their fleeting beauty never to be forgotten,
    I reach out for her, longing for her warm embrace.
    but as the gently lapping tide
    slithers through the letters in the sand,
    she is gone.

    and i stand along on the cold, wet shore.
    my tears my only companions...


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  2. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    "before i can speak, she reaches out to take my hand...
    and together we trace the shoreline
    leaving a trail of footprints
    and two names scrawled in the sand."


    The creativity and imagery of this piece had me growing new pictures of the scene in my head. This had you thinking of each step this piece had taken, because it was so much indepth and in detail, that you can't help yet pay attention and follow along with what was happening. Is this of a lost love or of a love you wish you could have? That's the meaning I got from this, although the portrait of you and your daydream was so real, that's what hooked me in. My blessings..
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  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    This was a really great piece. Didnt you post this before already?

    But anyway i'm glad to see some of your work again

    one luv
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