NW: 1. DiC Gets Gully vs. 16. Valium

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  1. Baron Mynd

    Baron Mynd Swaggersaurus Rex

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    All rules that are applied in the league will also be enforced for regulating the tournament. If you're not familiar with the rules of the RSTL, please read them HERE!:
    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=876433

    The only difference will be that in this tournament, your opponent will get to pick your topic for you. Topics must be picked and posted within the match thread within 1 day. If it's not posted, the opponent of the person that didn't pick a topic in time will get to choose his/her own topic.

    One more additional rule and this one is crucial so you all need to be aware of this. If you do not vote, you will not advance in the tournament at all. I don't care how many votes you're winning by, you will need to vote to advance on 4 matches weekly. When the league re-opens, these 4 matches will include voting on league matches. And in the elite 8 before the league reopens, there will be only 3 matches to vote on. That will be the only exception, but all 3 matches will require your vote. Voting matches a tie will not be permitted and won't count as a vote.

    Topics will be up Tuesday 12am PST every week and topical choices are due Wednesday 12am PST and verses are due Sunday 12am PST, 3am EST, 8am Greenwich with votes due Tuesday 12 am PST, 3am EST, 8am Greenwich

    Also, there will be no recycling allowed. Nothing you've ever posted anywhere online will be allowed. The mods will be checking verses for authenticity with online search engines.

    This is a match by match tournament so there will probably be no show wins and losses.

    Topics Are HERE!: http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=1030432

    Lets Get Ready To Ruuuuuuuummmmmmmbbbbbbbbbllllllleeeeeeeeee!​
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  2. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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    topics for you to choose from

    Consumed by Hate

    I'm afraid I'm being an awful nuisance.
    Edith Sitwell

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  3. Valium

    Valium New Member

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    So I'm all up in this bitch's jaw about to bust a nut
    When the slut pulls out a kleenex I'm like "What the fuck!"
    I duck outta the party cuz this shit's retarded
    The chick runs out sayin' sorry while my car gets started
    I'm tryna get this bitch discarded but she hops into the whip
    Coppin' a feel off my dick this's some fucked up shit
    She hops onto my pogo stick with her clit ridin' cowboy
    Callin' me her boy while she's jumpin' for joy
    I'm tryna drive back home about to bust wit no dome and
    Right then the bitch pulls out! I spray tha winshield moanin’
    "Oh shit I can't see!" I swerve, hittin’ an oncomin' truck
    My airbag pops out and smacks me straight in the nuts
    The slut flies out the windshield - now she's dead as fuck
    Shaken up as I walk out seein’ a guy stumble outta the truck
    This gonna fuckin' suck, the dudes fuckin' huge, mean lookin' at that
    He looks at me, then the body and says: "you gonna tap that?"
    Necrophyliacs aside I ditch the ride cuz its stolen anyways
    Right off the bat I knew it was gonna be one of those days
    I walk a ways when this lady stops and says "need a ride?"
    Only after I get in I notice she's got an adam's apple the size
    of a golf ball, and that Juanita's ID's probably says Juan on them all
    When she says "it's bowling night" I see my face gettin' hit with her balls
    Right then we pull up to a police blockade, askin' me to get outta tha van
    I'm fucked, but right then Juanita's like "KEEP YOUR HANDS OFF MY MAN!"
    She stepped out I was like daaammn that bitch gonna fuck him up
    If she’d have demanded a sample that man woulda peed in a cup
    We get up to the bowlin' alley in Raleigh where the ‘Canes are king
    Rollin’ up ‘side some white gangsters with 20 inch rims
    They’re all diggin’ Juanita cuz she’s busty and black
    Forecast is ‘mixed with a 50% chance of gettin’ tapped from the back’
    So I enter the establishment to call my homies to get me
    Fuckin’ AT&T tryna’ charge me a dollar fifty
    I slam the phone back when this fat owner of the bowlin’ lanes
    Comes waddling over smiling saying he’s got tons of change
    “Why don’t you reach into my pocket..“ I smacked him in the jaw
    Fuckin’ faggot I oughta- “but I saw you parked out with Juanita!”
    Whole world’s gone mad, ain’t anybody normal left?
    Felt like leavin’ that Alley with dignity was some sort of theft
    So I flagged down the 5-0 on the highway and decided to confess
    The cop ignored my story retorting “20 years of marriage, and my wife left”
    “Sir, if you won’t arrest me can you at least give me a lift?”
    “Sorry, I’m busy” as he proceeded to drive straight off the cliff
    Eventually I hitched a ride- all this shit because some drunken whore
    Came up and said “I’ll show you mine if you show me yours”


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  4. Valium

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    fyi i dont give a shit which topic u use
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  5. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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  6. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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    The day was crisp in a maze of mist in the sky's wind
    The Sun sets an orange bliss in the embedded horizon
    A seemingly serene scene that should hold pleasures inside it
    But instead it's supplied with unbearable measures of violence
    Protestors start riots outside a clinic sentencing youth....
    To get protection and abortions against parental views
    Picket signs stencil the news of the ignorant few
    Conservatives who wish the younger kids will do as they do
    Is it the right of moms and dads to accept if a life
    Should be born in their child? who should truly get to decide?
    In all likeliness, teenage pregnancies in mid-income houses have
    Grandparents raising their baby's baby and bills are allowances
    So these parents escort daughters into surgical steps
    An adult like decision made to murder their eggs
    But of course there's going to be people against this process
    So the debate continues to inflate within this conflict


    A bottle is thrown through a window and it's scented with hate
    Only filled with water, but still vicious as it hits a young face

    "You're a disgrace. This is a horrible sin of your faith."

    Although that concept's correct, he's being a hypocrite anyway
    Can't judge a person for choices if they repent every day
    And acting high and mighty isn't helping shit being safe

    Her father turns around and races towards the religious fool
    Kicks his boot into his chest so hard, his ribs are bruised

    "You think you're better than us and want to believe that we're trash?!
    I'm gonna make you change your mind while I'm beatin ya ass"

    The guy tries to turn around and run away from this father
    But with a blow to the back of the head, he was made to a martyr
    An astonished face from everyone in the crowd as he falls
    With his body crashing lifeless and that compounded the loss

    "What the fuck did you just do dad? I think that he's dead."

    Answering her own question as it rings in her head
    He can't respond; his life flashes in a glimpse of some seconds
    With anger issues riddled within it and now he gets to regret it
    The silence is interrupted with more bottles of plastic
    He dodges some but most of them are rockin him backwards
    Four people rush him quickly and one throws a trashcan
    Hits him across his shoulder and brings him down to fold on his hands
    Trying to breathe as this riot's increased with lightning speeds

    "You like to kick people old man? Well then, try out my feet."

    They kicked him around like a soccer ball into the ground
    But the old guy gets up and punches his teeth into his mouth
    Another right hook follows to his friend on the right
    And his fingers are bloodied from it being rinsed by his eye

    "Damn, that old dude is gangsta wit it and thas on the real."

    They all agree, but for that someone had to be drastically killed
    The police arrive just before the violence is worsened
    Arresting them all.... but very late in providing some service
    All of this over the right to freely choose how to live
    Ironically victims were made for being too religious
    Blinded by hate, these consequences come from all that you do
    And this father was just a victim that didn't follow the rules


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  7. _millz_

    _millz_ New Member

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    valium....your piece was random as fuck....i mean some parts were funny...but some where just pointless...uniqueness is another that this lacked...this is like a weaker version of eminems "as the world turns"....just a pointless less funny story with a weaker set of rhymes...some parts you had good wording and others are off. overall this was decent but nothing special....keep your head up.

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    dic.....this was worded very well...had a solid consistent flow without becoming monotonous....the story line was average nothing spectacular but was more polished and consistant than that above....pretty good use for the pic you had...assuming you didnt give this your all after reading the above but it still wins this battle

    vote- dic
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  8. Brains

    Brains The Phantom

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    Valium- lol some of this was funny. Other than that tho, you didn't display much lyrical ability. For a light-hearted type piece (which this is) it would have to be REALLY funny or clever in order to override the lack of strong writing.

    DiC- You set up a vivid image which fit the pic well. Your ryhming was definitely more complex than that of your opponent this week, even though it wasn't any masterpiece or whatever.

    Vote - DiC
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  9. Got Life?

    Got Life? Resident Megalomaniac

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    Dic...are you battling yourself using your name and an alias?

    valium - umm...this reminded me way to much of a lot of the retarded pieces i've seen Dic write...just all over the place in an almost funny, but not quite manner...not really the kind of writing that I enjoy...

    dic - this story wasn't by any means one of your best but it was solid...your mechanics were on point throughout the piece...aside from that it worked well with the topic...

    vote = dic
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  10. SacriFICE

    SacriFICE TRUspeak

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    Vote: DIC

    Yeah, Valium, you got a little chuckle from me at the end, and a few laughs here and there, but after that, that's all this verse was... nothing great at all, rhyming and flow were all over the place... It felt too random to me... I did like the end though, made me laugh.

    DIC: This was pretty decent, but not the best I've read from you by far. However, it progressed nicely, was written well, and ended well enough to get you the easy win in round 1... A couple parts I hated though, the "beatin' ya ass" part and what not, I know that's how you write, i just didn't like that, but didn't take away from the verse overall.

    Pretty easy vote here, a somewhat funny, not very well written piece, to a decent story with dope rhyming..

    Vote: DIC
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  11. DeadKing

    DeadKing The Perfect Method

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    valium - you have potential, but for the verse that is posted, it is very basic. some of the words you used to rhyme were just ehhhhhh ok. i liked that you stuck to the imagery and all but when the finish product is posted, it could of been polished up alot more.


    dic - alot more polished in comparsion to valiums verse, flow was on point, and you had some good imagery as well. i liked how you posted your topic at the end of your verse, whereas most people post it at the beginning, you really tied it all together by posting it at the end. not much gripe here, really good read. deservable win....


    vote dic
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  12. Baron Mynd

    Baron Mynd Swaggersaurus Rex

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    Valium was hilarious in places, not what I expected to read at all, and I kinda agree with old Got Life? that it read a LOT like his old work. Seriously. It was a better showing than I expected, so I'm guessing Valium isnt as new to this as I first thought. Shame he went out so early, cos with a win here to boost his confidence I really think he could of gone on and devoured some heads. He's better than some still in.

    DiC - I'm glad you took a break from the story book you've been writing. lol. This was refreshing to read, yers- A lot more polished in areas, I enjoyed the picture right at the end too. That was a good touch.

    Basically I'm voting Valium cos I'm bitter at being out so early and want DiC to sit on the bench with me. :^) Lol.

    Vote - Valium
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  13. TaLi RodrigueZ

    TaLi RodrigueZ Washed Up Rapper...

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    LOL^

    Ok um, this one ended up being sort of tough for me to figure out.

    Vote = DIC

    I think DIC edged out just about every aspect of this here other than humor, which I suppose is a little ironic. Overall, Valium's piece was funny, but it quite superficial in terms of the storyline. It kept unravelling, which was sort of cool, but as I read it, I didn't really feel like I was being led anywhere in particular. I don't know if that makes shit for sense. It doesn't really help that I'm not really into pieces dealing with dicks and balls and what not lol. Just a personal preference thing. DIC's was borderline dealing with the same struggle. I was reading it thinking, where in the hell is this going, but at least there was the larger social commentary thing going on to hold it together somewhat. I don't know, neither of these were awesome, but DIC's rhyming was a notch above Valium, flow was a little more consistent, and it seemed a bit more serious, which is more to my liking. Not to mention something else, Valium, but I won't go there lol.
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  14. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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    one sided.... valium.... i get this weird visual that ur emotions werent in this ... and that ur concentration on trying to give a good fight against the likes of DIC werent up to par at all..

    DIC is pretty much cruising in this one utilizing some semi to mid level writing... i think he got an easy win.... more mechanics polished and just more intriguing from the interest level...

    vote - DIC

    not much to reason... simple and plain..
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  15. J o o k

    J o o k Guest

    Two cool pieces here no matter how the votes look.

    Val, you had me laughing in a few places, the mechanics were nicely constructed, and the rhyme scheme was simple yet enjoyable. I would like to see you develop as a writer because your pieces are fresh, and that's what this league needs man. Good showing.


    Dic, at this point, you know it wasn't your greatest showing, but you showed and you won nontheless. Your mechanics are always nicely prepared, and your story was solid. I guess you had that jook mentality of coasting through the first round lol nothing wrong with that. Good showing, look forward to seeing you in the future rounds.

    vote - dic
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  16. Urizen

    Urizen I hate humans

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    vote - Dic

    Valium - this was a piece unlike any other
    I mean it read away real funny and I couldnt tell if you were serious
    or just joking but either way I didnt get what was going on and
    I still dont ... story was kinda vague

    Dic - easy huh flow on point wordplay on point all in all nice piece
    I liked how you used that pic I couldnt think of anything
    but you did so that was nice too
    all in all nice piece

    easy battle dic took it
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  17. Vern Acular

    Vern Acular 12x RSTL Champ

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    vote dic

    why? what can I say more than he outshined the other dude in almost every area in which i'd judge on, flow, rhyme scheme, imagery, writers voice it was all there props i loved the verse dic
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  18. Ribo Nuke

    Ribo Nuke Audiodidact

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    Valium - wow man, this was wierd, pretty funny. I'm pretty sure the last piece I read from you was a really good piece that didn't rhyme. Well the rhyming was much better in this, it was way too random though, with no real twiswt or anything clever, the only thing you had goin for you was randomness and humor. Keep goin at it though man. You seem like a pretty good writer.

    Dic - Dope piece man.. Lyrics were on point for the most part, few parts that the rhyme scheme could have been boosted, but you did what you needed to do to complete this. I like the point of view of not really knowing, or letting us decide who the bad guy is. This was better than your oppenets piece with gets you the win.

    Vote - Dic
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