North: 3. Richard Corey Vs 2. Jweaks

Discussion in 'The Rapmusic Storytelling/Topical League' started by Nebz, Sep 6, 2003.

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  1. Nebz

    Nebz R.I.P. Point Game

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    VERSES DUE Wednesday 10:00pm PACIFIC/1:00am EST
    VOTES DUE Saturday 10:00am PACIFIC/1:00pm EST


    Your Topics Are Here:
    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?threadid=634437

    LINE LIMIT:
    4 lines - NO SHOWS
    16 lines - MINIMAL
    60 lines - MAXIMAL


    VOTING:
    No crew votes
    No payback votes
    No 2nd Chance Votes


    YOU MUST MUST MUST -- POST YOUR URL'S OF ALL THE BATTLES YOU VOTED ON HERE IN YOUR OWN THREAD..

    VOTE ON 6 BATTLES!!!!!

    FAILURE TO DO SO RESULTS IN 3 VOTE SUBTRACTION!!!


    if you win by no-show u are encouraged to vote still in other matches!!!!!
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  2. Richard Corey

    Richard Corey battle like a savage

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  3. jweaksfromdapike

    jweaksfromdapike The Pain and the Poetry

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    lol...

    good luck to you my friend..lets make it a good one
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  4. Richard Corey

    Richard Corey battle like a savage

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    We have an issue here...

    I have something really important to do, but I can still post. It's just going to have to be tomorrow morning. Now I can post before 9 est. time. That's a definate, but I can't post right now. I only have my work computer to work with and I have to leave work.

    I know Jweaks wouldn't want to win by a no show, especially in a match that I know people were looking forward to, so I'm pleading, just let me post tomorrow morning.

    Jweaks if you want to post ours at the same time I understand. You can email me your verse and I PROMISE i won't screw with it.

    Just to show you I'm serious. THIS IS MY WORK EMAIL.... You only get to use it this one time...
    ryan_clark@thompson.com


    if you decide to use it, I'll post your verse first and then mine, with our names over top to distinguish them... If you instead choose to just drop right now or later tonight, that's fine too.
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  5. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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    its up to jweaks...
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  6. Richard Corey

    Richard Corey battle like a savage

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    Death of a Dream II



    I spot her from the corner of my eye, abnormal in her size,
    being only a quarter of the height of a normal kid at five.
    A smile masked her hungry bones and abuse-contorted eyes,
    as she blinked out of view like a distortion of the mind.
    "A dream?" I whispered to the subway train’s sleeping riders
    deep inside their minds someone’s seeing this weakened minor.
    She reappeared … an18th century memory, clothed in squalor
    Her gaze burned into me, with her black eye and broken collar
    bone… But I’d seen enough dreams by now, I no longer cared
    When a diseased deceased child looking on in hunger, stared.

    "Who you lookin’ for?" She asked in an old New York accent.
    Absent of empathy, apathetic I acted as if nothing had happened.
    "You shouldn’t be able to see me." I knew she was right…
    "How long have you been awake?"
    "For two years of my life…"

    ****

    "He must be psychotic by now," a female physician murmured,
    rereading the print concernin’ a young wife’s malicious murder.
    A conviction turnin’ over cause of a miracle clerical error,
    leaving the widower, Jason, in amazed and hysterical terror.

    "He hasn’t slept since," stated Corporal Mays in the doorway,
    as he and his small elite platoon grouped in the room with AKs,
    automatic techs, kevlar vests, precision night-vision goggles.
    "A week ago he slashed an orderly’s throat with a broke bottle…
    He escaped, to bring him in, I’m a need to take his report."

    "He’s my patient now. You take him down, I’ll take you to court…"

    "He believes stayin' awake's how he sees dreams pacin' around,"
    he said, unable to smile, "...If I have to, I'm layin' him down..."


    ****


    "I see dreams as they faithfully creep between awake and asleep
    Thru constant consciousness, leaving my heart unstable and weak.
    I’m looking for a dream. A queen with beautiful eyes."
    But the bruised girl moodily sighed,
    "tonight, by rule you will die…"

    The train was dead quiet, as the walking dream talked to me
    Then she looked up in awe, mouth open, paused and screeched!!
    She stood, silently wailing, pointing at the other end of the train
    …as one sleeping passenger began struggling as if from a pain

    "Oh no…"

    The Nightmare in the coldest instant, broke through existence
    Grabbed the girl’s throat in his fist and choked her in minutes!
    It was huge, a horned beast screamin’, half man half demon!
    I jumped from it’s hand reaching, ran to the man sleeping,
    "WAKE UP! IT’LL KILL ME!" But the man wouldn’t budge
    other riders woke up, staring at me, a levitating, hooded bum.
    On purpose it dropped me on my leg, and I heard it go pop!
    I screamed, then someone finally pulled the Emergency Stop!
    The train screeched to halt! The doors opened, I wriggled out.
    Limping cripple from unconsciousness’ taunting fickle mouth.
    I hobbled on… only to be stopped and stalled in the street

    …. As I was met by Corporal Mays and a wall of police …

    "Don’t let me fall asleep!" I begged, but they only pulled guns
    "Don’t move damnit," screamed Mays, "Don’t be a fool son!"
    "It’ll kill me!"
    "Okay…," said Mays, "just get down and stay!"
    He spat into his radio "Roger that! We found him safe."
    But the beast kept coming, I screamed, moving my legs numbly!
    The police all jumped, pumping and raising their techs on me!
    "DON’T MOVE!!!"
    "Please, I have to see my wife! She’s in my mind"
    I see others fine, but it takes time to find a dream of mine!"
    "No!" I screamed, the beast jumped on me! But they didn’t see
    until my chest exploded in blood and marks from invisible teeth!
    "Jesus!," screamed Mays amazed, but to pray, was too late
    I was sliced in half at the waist, body parts parted two ways!
    Then I saw her…
    My wife, my love, as she was supposed to be
    Without death overseeing. She smiled and, mouth open, breathed.
    I saw her floating over me as death’s darkness enclosed totally.
    "I’ve been looking for you…"

    "I know honey. Now, go to sleep…"





    edited to add the title
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  7. Atheist

    Atheist Storyteller

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  8. jweaksfromdapike

    jweaksfromdapike The Pain and the Poetry

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    ok..RC...heres your call on this...i just got home from over the past 2 days...been with my fiance..personal life stuff and whatnot...i dont have any kind of verse done...and i leave for work shortly....when i get home from at work at 9:30 pm eastern...i can do a verse...otherwise you can win by a noshow...

    its yours or teks call...in any matter...i wont be mad if you decide to just take the win...

    you would be deservant...let me know...of course i wont know your answer until i get home tonite...but yeah..holla
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  9. Richard Corey

    Richard Corey battle like a savage

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    what type of hypocrite would I be if I said "no".

    go ahead and post a verse. But for voting we may have to pick the winner by who has the most votes by the end of the voting session, rather than first to five...


    but could a mod erase all of the posts other than our verses and voting posts once Jweaks' verse is dropped...

    SINCE WE'RE KEYING...

    I want to add 2 lines ... only 2 lines.
    (everyone's prolly read my verse twice over, I want to make it a lil' fresher)
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  10. jweaksfromdapike

    jweaksfromdapike The Pain and the Poetry

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    ok...thanx...i'll key something up.... :)
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  11. jweaksfromdapike

    jweaksfromdapike The Pain and the Poetry

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    fuck it....i cant write..i got personal issues im dealing with..

    good luck in the rest of the tourney
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  12. TRAP.

    TRAP. i'm soo old school.

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    too bad, this would've been dope. props mr. corey on a job well-done. pce.
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  13. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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    RC moves on
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