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  1. Blemishes render this picture motionless, in a wild barrel that tumbles down an elevator shaft,
    The past has wings, my feelings took off to find its better half.
    Only myself-- now I could use the truth,
    without substance im the perfect landscape without an artist who knows hue..
    Fold and tuck away yourself, for far and wide I wish to find you comfortable,
    Never faultering, im always altering, can you love the untouchable?
    test
  2. Novaman: RaWKiLLa

    Novaman: RaWKiLLa New Member

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    shotr and sweet...keep it up!
    test
  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    "The past has wings, my feelings took off to find its better half."

    good line, great piece again by you

    one luv
    test
  4. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    i agree...always enjoy this lil drops
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  5. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    ^ i like the imagery in this line and love the question here great poem^
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  6. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    nice poem..a lot said in that lil piece there..nice imagery.
    test
  7. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Short, yet you kept it going with a well selective choice of words, rhyme scheme was decent, and for keeping your opinion, -- Keeping what you needed to say onpoint was very nice to have me more interested in every line after the first one dropped. Overall, nice, yet short piece. My blessings.
    test
  8. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    great imagery great peice

    MAD LOVE TO YA STAY UP
    test
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