No One Ever Asks... (i'm leaving in case u aint know)

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  1. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    eh... no one cares, but i just wanted some feedback on this poem i wrote at the peak of my depression... i still may not return though...
    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?threadid=630458






    No one ever bothers to ask why I never smile…
    Or why my eyes are forever red from crying but
    I never shed a tear…

    Nobody ever asks why I sit alone at times
    In my own little world…
    Where everything else is as insignificant
    As my name is to the next person
    With a best friend
    A boyfriend
    And another one of each on reserve…

    But no one ever asks why my phone never rings
    Why my e-mail box is full of FWDs, junk mail, everything
    But a small note saying
    “I was just thinking about you the other day…”

    And I can’t even begin to count the number of people
    Who have actually asked about my past
    And where I may be headed in the future…

    I can’t count them because there aren’t any.

    It makes me wonder about my very existence…
    If I exist in anyone else’s world other than my own…

    I sit in a room completely shrouded in shadows
    Except for the luminous glow of my computer
    And I wonder if things will ever change…

    Because I’m tired of living life
    Where everyday is the same…

    Because nobody asks me how my day went…
    And even if they knew,
    They probably wouldn’t do anything
    To enhance the day that follows…

    And how do I know?
    Because no one ever bothers to ask
    Why I never smile
    Or even if I know how to…
    test
  2. Novaman: RaWKiLLa

    Novaman: RaWKiLLa New Member

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    this was deep...in the since that alot of times we see people and we think everything is ok, but they are really hurting inside. And sometimes they just need someone to say a soft word of kindness.
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  3. *DowntownStar*

    *DowntownStar* ____________________

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    i asked but you didn't answer because you were too busy trying to find force the wrong people to love you.

    bye gemi.
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  4. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    Like a sad song of a violen, everybody has heard this, but nobody has ever written on it like this. I too suffered from a broken smile. I lied to everybody else without ever saying a word...Damn...keep ya head up...
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  5. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    damn....loved it....emotions just rolled right out...ive been feeling like this for the last month....and u just put it into the perfect words for me....i really loved this piece...

    mad love
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  6. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    Feel ya, Damn....deep piece....well expressed....keep ya head up

    much love

    peace
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  7. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    "Because I’m tired of living life
    Where everyday is the same…"

    ^you not the only one, i feel the same way. This was very emotional, mos def a venting piece. I dont know what you're goin through now, but i hope everything turns out okay and you return back to us.

    one luv
    test
  8. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    i was deffinatly feeling this piece...i could relate a lot to it.....

    But no one ever asks why my phone never rings
    Why my e-mail box is full of FWDs, junk mail, everything
    But a small note saying
    “I was just thinking about you the other day…”

    And I can’t even begin to count the number of people
    Who have actually asked about my past
    And where I may be headed in the future…

    I can’t count them because there aren’t any.

    ^^that right there is my life exactly... i keep asking my boyfriend and friends how their days are going, and what growing up was like for them....in hopes that one day they'll ask me back.,...

    but ya....this was one of my fav pieces on here cause i could relate a lot with it....great job
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  9. NAiT

    NAiT myself

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    you know who asks ? You ask yourself. That's just life. Were always gonna be lonely. Realize this though, you've always got yourself. You ain't never gonna betray yourself. Never gonna leave you. Never gonna hurt yourself, and if you do any of these things.......you did it to yourself. Beyond that, gods always there wether your paying attention or not. Wether or not you even believe. You wont be lonely forever. When you get whatever it is your looking for, it'll just be that much better. Most people don't appreciate what they have. You'll be able to.

    4 questions: Are you really making an effort to reach out, or are you just asking why?

    second - if your have other people you talk to, and ask how their doing.....stop asking them for a while. Eventually they might notice.

    I know how that depression goes. Believe. What you wrote, is REAL similar to my life. You said you had a best friend, a boy friend, and two of each on hold. That's more than me. I've got no girl, no *true* friends, just a collection of acquaintences. I see each of 'em about once a month. I'm past that depression though

    third question: If you were asked how your doing or WHAT you've been doing, do you have a response?

    last and final question, how are you doing right now at the moment your reading this?


    if you really have no one to talk to:

    AIM - NaitSedate
    e-mail - NathanCarson@hotmail.com

    and I don't even know you. see what happens when you reach out? That's all you gotta do. Somebody you know cares, tell 'em whats going on. Looking for help from a compuer screen ain't always gonna get it.
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  10. marc antony

    marc antony It's all about da ass....

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    Are you sure you and me aren't the same person???

    this is crazy how i could relate to this!!!!!

    lol...im starting to feel paranoid......
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  11. tk2oo3

    tk2oo3 New Member

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    damn this was a good poem an really i underestimated what you were capable of.. damn.. sorry i had a reason for it but yea i underestimated you by a lot.. but anyways this was really good.. i aint the type to dickride round here heh so that actually means somethin :) anyways i remember readin your poems before like when i read my first megami piece or somethin.. im done postin poetry now tho cuz of a lot of these people it aint worth it you get nothin out of it.. well have fun in college an goodbye if you leavin this..
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  12. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    *pinching Gemi's cheeks* Pick your chin up doll...I'll email you and tell you I was just thinking of you.[kissu]
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  13. Dark_Angel

    Dark_Angel Dark_Angel

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    beautiful peice in a very sad way. i cant relate to the things your feeling here...cos that aint my life, but i do relate to it generally, i've been depressed for 8 months, so i can definately relate on some level, but really keep ya head up and i hope you learn how to smile
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  14. Nam Dekan

    Nam Dekan i got a tip in my pocket

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    eepss just realized i was under the wrong name lol
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  15. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    here we go

    as i was saying


    ((hugs)) thanks for sharing this piece with me, sometimes i think i'm only one who knows that feeling...*sigh* just know that you're never alone girl, keep your head up
    test
  16. LiQuiDliFe

    LiQuiDliFe RSTL Phenom

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  17. eatemup

    eatemup New Member

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    this was a very emotional and touching peice
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  18. damn girl, you need to get around some possitive people, get away, have some fun, go swimming and shopping, call old friends, get out in the world and bring back some possitive inspiration
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  19. Deaths Advocate

    Deaths Advocate New Member

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    You have no idea how much this poem relates to my life. This poem is exactly the way I feel and write about stuff, and it's amazing to see that there's someone else out there thinking similar to me. I wanna give you big ups on this piece, it was wonderfully written, and I just wanna let you know that even when you're stuck in your own world, taht there's nothing wrong with that, it's just giving you a chance to get to know yourself better as an induvidual. So keep up the good work, reading this has really been a worthwhile

    one luv
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  20. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    thanks alot you guys... it sucks being alone, but alot of times thats when my best poetry comes out. maybe one day i'll get good friends... eh.
    test
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