New trak up..LOOKIN FOR LISTENS AND FEEDBACK(leave links!!)

Discussion in 'Post Ya Audios & Videos Here! - feedback forum' started by ceson, Apr 21, 2006.

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  1. Vise

    Vise Ya Tu Sabes

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    nice lil beat....


    hmmmm.....your sound quality is ight. iono, sounds a lil..i can't put my finger on it. yo, for a sex i thought you was white at first til i checked out your pic on the page, haha. your voice seems a lil flat in terms of delivery. liek yiour reading off the paper a lil too much, without puttin in any sorta emotion into what your sayin. i don't mean screaming, i mean just a lil more...swagger. the flow felt a lil ackward the way you were spittin it. like, it sounded a lil too hoppy or bouncy. just steady up on the flow and delivery, and you should be good for sure.....keep it movin


    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?p=13524269#post13524269

    ^return that, ~1~
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  2. KamikazeLyricist

    KamikazeLyricist The Kamikaze Lyricist

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  3. ceson

    ceson ....Ceson Wordz

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    haaa wow...
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  4. Raw_Blow

    Raw_Blow Addiction in the Flesh

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    hmmm

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    this beat is real nice mang, for real, on that street tip fa sho, your ish kicks in, quality's nice, u mixed it well homie for real, your flow's coo and on point, the lyrical content's alright still, delivery's alright, could be upped a bit, presense same thing, no hook I guess, hmm, second verse comes in, I can see what you're doing with the flow and ish, sounds good, sometimes it sounds like you're reading from the page, not too often though, I only noticed it once or twice on the tune, hmm, k, overall it was an alright drop, u're not too bad homie, keep mastering your craft, stay up, Peace

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  5. ceson

    ceson ....Ceson Wordz

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    thx for the feed
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  6. skarekrow187

    skarekrow187 ~~...:::SKAREKROW:::...~~

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    yeah cire got that crack man, joints nice, yo lyrics are cool, i reall like ya voice an flow, prolly should add adlibs it would help alot man, cuz you have a cool voice man, the mix isnt good man, you need to bring the beat up or vocals down to mix and sit better with the beat, but I can tell you on some shit, ya voice delivery an shit is there, lyrics are cool, kinda sounds like ya emotion could be upped though, but yeah man descent joint no doubt, i would like to hear you on a joint thats been mixed good, cuz the vocals were jus way too loud and you had no adlibs, but yeah man not bad i was fealin what you was goin for no doubt!


    thx.......pz
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  7. SpoonFull

    SpoonFull Lovely

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    yeah yo, this is mixed a tad loud. Flow is niceness. I like your style though....with a little polishing it would be dope as shit. Voice is coolio. Cire's beats stay dope. Work on your rhymeschemes and just polishing up that flow and you'll be good to go homie

    EZ
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  8. Higher Rhymes

    Higher Rhymes Active Member

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    Thanks for showin my track love C..
    aight lemme break it down

    vocals were a lil high i think
    flow is on point... you have your own steeze, really original and you brought the energy for sure
    quality's good
    cire's beats are dope.. ++ for using one of his..
    delivery is good..
    overall good track man no problems cept for the mixing yo, keep makin that good ishhh holla
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  9. ceson

    ceson ....Ceson Wordz

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    thx for the feed yall
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  10. ssssslawk

    ssssslawk A wah di bloodclat dis

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    Cool beat, I've heard it a couple times. you come in nice, a little awkward, i think you should record your verses twice and then do doubles to add power to your vocals, give yourself a little more presence. your flow is cool, emotion is there . pretty much the only flaws are lack of presence and no hook! although thats understandable because it's just a 32 bar thing. you came nice, punchlines were good, ROFL@ if i beat him by a hair its from the head of repunzel.. ahaha man

    nice little verse, put together well
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  11. JohnnyBoot

    JohnnyBoot New Member

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    nice....original style,u sound kinda like del the funky homosapien to me.....beat was dope....peep my shit...
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  12. BZTactics

    BZTactics Up and Coming

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    Beats, tight, flow sounds on point for the most part, work on making your delivery more natural, ALWAYS make a hook too, no matter what any underground fanatic tells you, a hook is the most important part of a song, thus the reason it's called a hook, because it "hooks" the listener. Overdubs are important to, just make sure their on point. You seem like you understand hip hop well, give it a year at max and you'll probably see the bigger picture and learn how to work with diff styles, it happens with time, peace bro
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  13. Unexpected

    Unexpected New Member

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    Im gong to be honost I wasnt feeling this track at all. Your vocals were too loud there wasnt really any flow to this .. You rode the beat ok meaning you ended your bars on ever second clap. There was a line or two that was off. But this just didnt have anything to stand out .. Sounded like you were talking and it didnt have any musical composistion Im not even real sure what you were trying to get across.. I only listened to teh first 16 there wasnt a hook so i just cut it off

    no hate just real talk
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  14. emcee50killa

    emcee50killa New Member

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    Head of repunzel???....whats that?....anyways...flow isnt bad, decent track...only beef is you spittin on a cardoid mic and the production wack.



    Holla,

    EturnaL
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  15. killa_bone

    killa_bone New Member

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    Returning the feedback...

    Loving the rhyme scheme! You got a cool voice too. Love the beat...

    Flow is smooth, delivery seems quite laid back and confident, i'm liking this man, nice track...
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  16. ceson

    ceson ....Ceson Wordz

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    thx for the feed yall
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  17. Dj FuSe ONe

    Dj FuSe ONe New Member

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    thanx for the reply

    the beat is tight....this track def. needs a better mix...your voice needs some bass on it.....not bad though....i feel this track more than the other 2 tracks i heard from you...keep doing your thing
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  18. Fallen

    Fallen www.FallenHipHop.com

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    feelin the beat... shits dope...

    flow's alright... your delivery could be better... you don't got much emotion to it... lyrics are nice though... feelin that shit... why no chorus? empty space is blah... if you put more emotion into this... it'd be a dope track... keep droppin..

    hit me back... http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=980525
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  19. Fokissed

    Fokissed Fokissed

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    returning the favor, beat is hot, your vocals seem like they come in a little loud, if you lower them it would mix better, plus it would hide some of the distortion and sound better quality wise, but other than the technical stuff, your flow and delivery are on point, and you've got some nice lines in there, keep it up

    check out my new one if you get a chance, "Purple Popcicle" at http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=980683
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