(Nasty Please check)[Week 44] [Contendership] 3. WarMachine(5-2) vs 4. S. Issue(1-0)

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  1. T.a.C

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  2. S. Issue

    S. Issue Who?

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  4. WarMachine

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    She never faultered nor did she ever dissapoint- just did as she promised
    soaking her salt filled wounds in the shores, praying into the hand that covered her fist,
    since the day I left- my trousers tied up at the knees leaving her to fend on her own
    bridging the canvas' in her mind, trying to bring herself into the unknown
    as I'm away struggling in the midst of combat, she tickles her toes as her faith lies on the horizon
    ticking the days away on her calender, adding up the days that I've been gone
    her heart beats abnoramally as she never tires and loses no hope of my return
    putting her soul on tainted breath for the dream of which she yearns.
    Some days she dresses up, makes herself presentable and allows the wind to blow her golden locks
    climbing further out to get as close as she can to me, braving the surf and the razor sharp rocks
    her lip is firm but would quiver from time to time, her eyes in constant squint
    regardless of the weather she'd never give up, even until her legs ached and she had to sit for a stint
    her eyes remained fixated on the thick bold line that seperates her world from mine
    quite obviously dwelling to much on the events that breach that vivid line.
    As the years went by and the torture of day to day events grew on her she faded
    limping out on a bad to watch the waves roll in, never allowing herself to be persuaded
    she grew athritis in her knees and eventually the constant salt rubbing burnt her feet
    her blood pressure soared through the roof everytime part of the returning fleet
    came home to drop its rustic anchor in the shores and the men leaped overboard
    she'd go sprinting into the water, wading in parts to spot her love- an attempt with no reward.
    Her hair began to fall out, alapecia set in nicely and her teeth begun bleed
    her fingers nails were too long to far gone to clean and her hopes had started to recede
    eventually it claimed her life, they found her clutching a cross and our wedding ring
    slumped up against the face of a rock and had frozen on an evening in spring.

    Almost 5 years to the day I returned to find now wife or note
    searching valiantly to find answers when I sent packages and wrote
    her were abouts evaded me until I found out why
    falling to my knees, it hurt but I blocked it and broke down to cry
    she spent her final years waiting for me
    and never got to see me come over seas
    to become a hero
    to feel like a complete zero.

    So it seems I've finished this tail, as I sit here in the sand reading her diary
    living out her final days again through my eyes and found out how much she loved me.




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  5. S. Issue

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    Darker than shadow, his estranged hold turned hallow
    in rage, though Jane knows this display burns shallow—
    his lonely voice, heard twice through the bedroom door
    as Jane writhes on the floor…
    Get up you whore!
    Now even cockroaches feel is fist, his stock-broken wrist
    crashing against Janey’s body, shoddily landing hits—
    what living is this? The whole trouble with trailers
    is you can’t derail the skid even if you’re not a failure,
    Now his hands are about her throat, yellow and twisted,
    gnarled like a sinking boat, can’t float when you’ve drifted
    to a place where the see’s disgrace is replaced
    by tumult and a new season’s face. Leave his embrace.
    That’s her resolve talking. Against the wall,
    his fists large hit hard until her blue eyes fall
    to the table, lit by the kitchen, where little Ethan listens.
    Jane remembers the day he was christened—
    first in line to comply with faith, shes not Christian,
    she doesn’t even seek religion. But now she begs God…
    don’t let Ethan see Ozz hit me, please make him go on
    and play with friends, stay out until we make amends.
    Until my face isn’t bruised, used by the hate of men.

    Nearly done, Ozz turns her body and breaks the sobbing
    with his dick in her mouth, his hand on her head, bobbing.
    Her face blue and black, relax jaw, let is slide back
    until it cracks your throat, don’t sputter and hack
    cause he’ll attack. Violently he thrusts into her throat,
    holding her face, she nearly chokes, but instead moans,
    nothing like home. That’s what is like when cums,
    finally done, he wipes himself off, leaves her torn in blood.

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    I have seen a peaceful expression turn to anger as fast as a whip cracks, and so the look on the face might mean less than what it seems to be.
    Erica Eisdorfer, The Wet Nurse's Tale, 2009
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  6. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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    War - This verse made me sad, I was listening to Tracy Chapman - Fast Car and that really amplified this piece for me. I really enjoyed the flow of this verse, it allowed the imagery to just flow into my mind smoothly, without things feeling rushed. The rhymes were good but i meanly enjoyed this story. It was just touching and heartfelt. An overall impressive verse. nicely done.


    fave line -
    "she grew athritis in her knees and eventually the constant salt rubbing burnt her feet
    her blood pressure soared through the roof everytime part of the returning fleet
    came home to drop its rustic anchor in the shores and the men leaped overboard
    she'd go sprinting into the water, wading in parts to spot her love- an attempt with no reward."

    S. Issue - Wow....all i can say is omg at this lol. The Tracey Chapman songs works for this piece as well. I just enjoyed the imagery in this verse. You had just enough imagery to paint a nice picture but not to go overboard with it, so as to depress and ruin the rest of my day lol. I thought the rhymes were very good and enjoyed the flow of this verse. Nicely done here

    Fave Line -
    "what living is this? The whole trouble with trailers
    is you can’t derail the skid even if you’re not a failure,
    Now his hands are about her throat, yellow and twisted,
    gnarled like a sinking boat, can’t float when you’ve drifte"

    Overall a very good matchup to read. Both writers had a lot positive and didn't really have anything wrong with their verses. To me, this matchup boils down to which style of writing you liked better. War's verse was highly emotional and sad, while S,'s verse was nice yet terrifying. Overall my vote goes to War. His story was just a little bit more entertaining then S's. BOTW material here guys

    Vote - War

    here is the song i was listening to
    [youtube]bfqEisOIMJc[/youtube]
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  7. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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    War win 1-0...after deductions

    Match ends in a 0-0 tie
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