N.W. ~ Round 3 ~ 5. Vigil -vs- 1 DiC GeTs GuLLy

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  1. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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    RSTL RULES AND REGULATIONS

    RULES AND REGULATIONS - THERE'S SOME NEW SHIT SO CLICK AND READ


    The Standard League Rules will still be Enforced



    • Check-in (Posting in your match to show that you are aware the match exists) is encouraged but not required.
    • Verses must incorporate at least one of the provided topics and must be at least 16 lines and must not exceed 64 lines.
    • Anyone who does not post at least 4 rap lines, incorporating at least one of the provided topics, is considered a no-show.
    • During check-in, you can ask your opponent to agree to a line limit (Minimum 16) and if your opponent agrees, Moderators will hold both participants to that limit.
    • Posting between 4-15 lines is considered a “show” but will not result in a match. If you post 4-15 lines, and your opponent posts between 16-64, you will lose the match but you will remain in the league. If you post 4-15 lines, and your opponent does not show, you will “Win by no-show”.

    Voting:
    • If you do not show you can’t vote in any matches. .
    • No bias votes! If you have a personal investment in wanting someone to lose, whether because that member voted against you once, or you just don’t like that person, whatever the reason, do not vote in the match. If have a personal investment in wanting someone to win, whether because they’re crew member, or because you want to face that person in the next week’s brackets, whatever the reason, do not vote in the match.
    • ”Bias” must be confirmed by a Moderator.
    • 3-ways are inevitable. In order to provide a tie-breaker in a 3-way, you are now required to indicate in what order the contestants finished (1st, 2nd, 3rd).
      anyone who does not show or vote is suspended one week and must sign-in again to be inserted the following week.



    Topics: http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=1033017



    From now on if you don't vote in the tournament and win your match, you will be deducted a vote from your next match for every vote didn't give the previous week. If you show late and your partner allows the extension as long as it’s less than a day late, it can count, but you will be deducted 2 votes for showing late regardless.

    These rules will be put in effect starting now and won’t be modified again. I’m not bending or breaking anymore rules for anybody.



    Must READ: You must pick one of each topic to give your opponent some protection from choices and also so there isn't several verses written on the same topic that everyone has picked to be used.

    So pick one of the Title and Phrases, one of the Quotes and one of the Pics for your opponent.

    Thursday is the deadline for choosing topics or your opponent will get to pick their own topic. Topical choices must be posted in match threads by deadline.


    All other rules that are applied in the league will also be enforced for regulating the tournament. If you're not familiar with the rules of the RSTL, please read them.


    The only difference will be that in this tournament, your opponent will get to pick your topics for you. Topics must be picked and posted within the match thread within 1 day. If it's not posted, the opponent of the person that didn't pick a topic in time will get to choose his/her own topic. You must choose one of each kind of topic for some variety.


    So... topics will be up Wednesday 12am PST every week and topical choices are due Thursday 12am PST and verses are due Monday 12am PST, 3am EST, 8am Greenwich with votes due Wednesday 12 am PST, 3am EST, 8am Greenwich

    Also, there will be no recycling allowed. Nothing you've ever posted anywhere online will be allowed. The mods will be checking verses for authenticity with online search engines.

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  2. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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    wassup n goodluck

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    Natural Sin

    If there is no struggle, there is no progress.
    Frederick Douglass


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  3. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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    that pic is way too big.... I'd edit it out, but it cut my screen in size so I can't see the edit button...

    If you use the pic, you should prolly just post the link
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  4. Vigil

    Vigil Im infinite consciousness

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    what's up and good luck to you too.

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    Criminal Mind


    When I discover who I am, I'll be free.
    Ralph Ellison

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  5. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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    Using All 3 Topics Vigil Picked for Me

    Criminal Mind

    Decisions to make -
    My life has a sinister fate
    Flashin through scenes, relapsing in dreams
    That are singed in my brain
    Every thought replenishes hate
    Until I'm cringing in pain
    - My senses decay -
    Intension were great, but in a criminal's craze
    Enter the maze
    Of my thoughts as I did every day
    Before you label me a villian and say
    I'm living insane


    My mother caught me masterbating to naked pictures online
    And took it upon herself to teach me it was a crime....
    Against mankind - that I'm killing lives before they're created
    To satisfy demonic urges so I was forced to be naked
    I'd have to walk around the house without any clothes
    And if I couldn't stop my erections, it was drowned with a hose
    Out in the cold, but through this torture it still hounded my soul
    Without permission, it would go hunting and fountains were probed
    This made my puberty years so crucially feared
    Scared to touch it to urinate, diapers were tools of my tears
    Me and Penis became enemies, but friends too through these intricasies
    Dementing the peace with me obsessed to live sinfully free
    With his one eyed stare seducing my hand
    In the shower.... he begs to be washed... then says "do it again."
    I drop the soap and slap his head til there's a path that's red
    Flowing down the drain, now I'm insane..... since that's been said
    Beating him without the pleasures given to most
    I didn't feel the pain until I saw bloody drips from the blows
    From that moment his ager crew, wanting me punished
    For weeks he'd wake me up punching my stomach


    When I discover who I am, I will be free

    At age 16 crazy dreams invaded my sleep
    With fights between me and my dic painting the scenes
    Unattached from my body and he's winning the battles
    Knocking me out, tieing me down and would dig in my asshole
    I stayed awake for days at time, but it replayed in my mind
    So scared, I couldn't look down without making me cry
    My mom took me out of school because I told her they beat me
    After I came home one day with bruised holes through some ripped jeans
    Any hopes of being normal were lost in the darkness
    Mr. Penis gained more control from being strong and was heartless



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    In my adult life I carried an assault knife for protection
    He couldn't pause fights and kept me up all night with erections
    I never lost mines, but he was the flaw my mind intercepted
    And at the wrong times he'd stand tall like a weapon
    I'd grab the knife on my thigh and remind him of danger
    But after a while that only made him reply with some anger
    Peace was out of my range until I allowed him to date
    And it seemed better..... without a frown on his face
    But an arguement was raised from turning down ladies for sex
    Made him upset and the war continued with hate he expressed
    Taking advantage of me when I'm drunk so pussy was captured
    I'd wake with panties around his head while he pushed through their pastures
    Some of them were screaming rape and I stopped in action
    As they kicked and hit me, I took the abuse and fall in madness

    Even while I was concious, him and the balls were obnocious
    So every date I had to be alert for brawls from his nonsense
    Women were stimulants, killing the innocense inside of my head
    All my relationships were fine until they climbed in my bed
    I'd tell them no,
    but then some would touch the pleasure pole
    Then undress him so
    I was powerless to get control
    I didn't know until after that he was being too rough;
    Stabbing their kidneys while drowning Mr. Penis in blood
    Left without a choice so after he'd come and get soft.....
    That night I stopped DiC's killin spree by cuttin him off
    And although some troubles were solved, all the blood that was lost
    Lead to infections and amputations; below my stomach was gone
    I failed in finding a way to compromise with myself
    So I'm half the man I was and missing the darker side I repelled
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  6. Vigil

    Vigil Im infinite consciousness

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    Natural Sin


    Optimism is God's wisdom.


    Lost on the hill is Man who's cursed upon
    but still he searches on, singing church songs with the Serpent's tongue.
    Not long ago his blood spilled on the cross & eroded God's will
    but he continues to confess to the Lord that he is not ill.
    He stands on shaken ground; his hands are still as he plans to kill
    but there's a flood on the way and soon his land will be filled.



    Eagles soar above poverty stricken homes
    over children who are probably picking bones
    following the philosophy written on hidden stones.
    Kids homegrown are turned into victims and dismissed to be alone.
    The psychology of their dome is shattered and cut apart
    cause they're taught to speak their mind but shut their heart.

    Products of the system and shuned from their astrology
    equals a whole civilization undone in the pursuit of technology.
    Primitive Man is lost at sea. Please God, show him the way
    I promise you he'll grow and obey.
    Don't let him start over, it'll be such a sobering end
    please let it be october again instead of letting the horror descend.
    I'm afraid Man will hear his calling only once the horrid chorus comes in,
    and by then he'll be forced to succumb into a morbid suffering.
    so please God help him reform from within before the storm begins.

    New Age prophets are in lockstep with God's threat
    in what looks like a blood offering to amend lost debt.
    But is it too late? Is the apocalpyse due? The Mayan astronomers knew.
    Quick, somebody hand God a check, maybe it's our cost that's overdue.
    Or mabye our own prophecy has come true.
    How will we ever heal and renew?
    Cause in this golden age money is the real blood,
    that's why banks save more lives than hospitals do.
    And what will happen once the sun's cycle is through?
    Will the things we hold vital be abolished and threw?
    What will our conciousness prove?


    Please God Forgive Us.

    We do not know what we do.


    Heat waves dance on the dark side of the sun but soon the tables will turn
    and all the grey skies that blind the earth's eyes will be able to burn.
    The Earth's erupting, giving birth to new waves as it stirs seas
    leaving dispersed trees with open limbs and branches that beg for mercy.

    Who knew self-destruction would be carried out so light-hearted?
    Its ironic civilization will die out at the height of where it started.
    For Millennias Man has come this far only to make the same mistakes
    and leave enough traces so future civilizations can take a name and place.
    Not even the Sun can awake a race destined to fall short of greatness
    maybe its in our best interest to stop at new heights and concentrate on maintenance.

    It only takes a few straight shooters to spread violence
    cause the living can't get a word in with all the dead silence.
    Sacrifice is saarcastic. When death occurs in masses is a massacre.
    Western civilization is looking ahead with the past deferred
    The missing link is keeping us chained.
    When will we realize we have locked memories lodged deep in our brains?

    There is no end in sight, only a new beginning.
    Salvation comes to those who knew they were sinning.
    From revelations in a cave to facing them today,
    the holy depraved are embracing their own decay.
    Preachers are running their mouth in hopes of catching their breath
    saying they'll last to the death once the rapture has spread.
    What disasters are next? asks Man with blood on his hands
    Will the day come when all the water floods in his lands?
    Please God, understand. Were not self-conscious in our unnatural skin
    we've been thrown into nature's cruel cycle and got lost in the spin
    so please forgive us for committing the most natural sin.



    If there is no struggle, there is no progress.
    Frederick Douglass​
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  7. TaLi RodrigueZ

    TaLi RodrigueZ Washed Up Rapper...

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    Well, this is a tough one. Argh.

    Vote = DIC

    Vigil, this was a strong showing, but I guess there were a couple of things that didn’t bode all that well for you. The first thing is that I felt like it took me 50 minutes to read your verse from beginning to end. Some of it has to do with the wording and the fact that it seems like a ton of your lines were more fragments than actual sentences. I guess what I’m saying is that it wasn’t always easy to tell where one thought ended and another began. There also seemed to be a decent deal of wording that just seemed plain old awkward in a way, like certain words weren’t really in the right order. Something like,

    Kids homegrown are turned into victims and dismissed to be alone.

    I know you mean homegrown kids, so it’s sort of like, why not just say it like that? Maybe it doesn’t continue the rhyme quite as nicely but it seems to me that it’s a smoother way to word it.The other thing that is that it just felt like this piece went on forever. You had this serious point to make about civilization and how we’ve ruined this creation that was given to us, and now it’s turning on us, but it seemed like you just kept finding new ways to say the same basic thing and you wanted to include them all lol. It was just a very long and hard read in both respects. It also happens to be a topic that quite a few folks have already hit on pretty heavily so even though I enjoyed your version of it, it wasn’t really anything that made me think about anything I didn’t already. Technically, your rhymes were straight and your flow seemed aight for the most part. I don’t really have any qualms there.

    DIC, I don’t know dude, I’ve read yours a couple of times and I have such horribly mixed feelings about it. Somewhere along the way, you made the decision that you were going to forsake any sort of seriousness for a creative plot. That is the decision you made and I’m cool with that. This was one of the most creative pieces that I’ve probably ever read. I pretty much spent the entire time reading it saying, are you fucking serious, you can’t be serious, holy shit he is serious lol. So there you have it, on one hand, you’ve got this ridiculous, but creative story. On the other hand, what is it about? It’s about dicks and assholes and masturbating and back n’ forth penis abuse lol. You’ve already known for some time that I pretty much always vote against stuff like that because it’s just something that does nothing for me. It feels like I’m reading some cheap porn or something. So while I stand in awe of whatever in the hell would possess you to write this, I am equally disturbed for the same reason. I think I know what it is. One of the main things that writing does, if its any good, is create images. Well you create images, the only problem is, they are of your dick and balls and ass getting entered and all that other shit. Gross man. I don’t want to imagine that lol. The plot actually developed pretty well. The more I think about it, maybe there was some greater meaning, like this was a metaphor in a sense, for a rapist or some sexually disturbed dude who couldn’t control his urges. I almost think it has to be that, or else what in the hell else is there. I didn’t really sense that you were trying to be particularly funny. There were a few different places where it seemed pretty obvious that you were just rhyming for the hell of it which led certain lines to seem a little forced, but overall, the rhymes were solid. Anyways, weird man.

    This was really hard to untangle. I still really have no idea if I made the right decision. Vigil, you dropped a very solid piece but there wasn’t really much that really blew me away. DIC’s entire idea blew me away, and I’m not really sure if it was in a good way or not. To give you an idea of my mindset, my girlfriend read them and was like, “that guys was ok but it sort of lost my interest after a while. This other dude, what in the fuck is wrong with him? I’m totally speechless after reading that.” But then right after, she’s like, “but at least I was more entertained by it lol”. That more or less sums this up for me. Sorry for the novel.
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  8. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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  9. Urizen

    Urizen I hate humans

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    Vote - Dic

    Dic - this here was just sick ... I couldnt even have come up with this sick one
    I mean the double personality OK that was aight the loving pain
    aight that was aight but his dick being an actual character and emboding his
    evilness and then him chopping it off ALL THE WHILE maintaining a sick
    flow and nice wordplay was just real nice ... the concept alone took this one
    Ive kinda grown accustomed to your writing so that was just what I expected
    but the topic was just nice

    Vigil - this here was a real nice piece I liked how you told the story
    and how it made me feel like it was sum piece written for the ancients
    the flow you had was mad easy to read I liked this piece
    eventho Im not a fan of these kinda pieces

    all in all this here was a nice battle I liked both pieces but dic just took it
    concept wise
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  10. ConstantFlows

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    Vote - dicless (p.s. wtf)

    Vigil -- o k man
    I don't know if u ever read my votes but I have this tendancy to give ppl advice on how they can get more response out of ppl...and uhh if I recall correctly (which is in fact a rhetorical statement) I've been telling u to stop doing the same type of verses and step outside ur element. WRITE A STORY there, plain and simple, stop dropping 64 lines about social commentary week in and out. This was such a dragged read, its uhh draggin me down, again. Further more work on tightening ur rhymes, ignore wordplay for a while, u got that down
    So yeah try something new

    Speaking of trying something new

    Dic -- don't
    Lol

    Ummm this was disturbing, utterly disturbing, but in a the hills have eyes sort of way, where everything I see/read is fucked up
    But I want to know how the environment reacts
    Umm, pretty vivid, quick ass read, rhymes were generally nice, disturbing...leave it to dic to cut one off
    God, I guess shock value alone won this for u

    Fucking disgusting
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  11. J o o k

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    Man I was shocked at vigil, this was one of his better pieces definitely. I liked where you took it man, this shit was strong as hell, the mechanics, the rhyme scheme was cool, and the story came together quite well.

    Dic same shit man, good story, good mechanics, very well crafted rhyme scheme, I think that vigil would have edged it, if it weren't for your creativity and rhyme, that is what put you over the wall. Very good showing from both.


    At the end of the day, Dic was more creative, and had a better rhyme scheme, but like I said vigil shocked me.

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