N.W. - Round 2: 8. A.S.K. -vs- 1. DiC GeTs GuLLy

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  1. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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    RSTL RULES AND REGULATIONS

    RULES AND REGULATIONS - THERE'S SOME NEW SHIT SO CLICK AND READ


    The Standard League Rules will still be Enforced



    • Check-in (Posting in your match to show that you are aware the match exists) is encouraged but not required.
    • Verses must incorporate at least one of the provided topics and must be at least 16 lines and must not exceed 64 lines.
    • Anyone who does not post at least 4 rap lines, incorporating at least one of the provided topics, is considered a no-show.
    • During check-in, you can ask your opponent to agree to a line limit (Minimum 16) and if your opponent agrees, Moderators will hold both participants to that limit.
    • Posting between 4-15 lines is considered a “show” but will not result in a match. If you post 4-15 lines, and your opponent posts between 16-64, you will lose the match but you will remain in the league. If you post 4-15 lines, and your opponent does not show, you will “Win by no-show”.

    Voting:
    • If you do not show you can’t vote in any matches. .
    • No bias votes! If you have a personal investment in wanting someone to lose, whether because that member voted against you once, or you just don’t like that person, whatever the reason, do not vote in the match. If have a personal investment in wanting someone to win, whether because they’re crew member, or because you want to face that person in the next week’s brackets, whatever the reason, do not vote in the match.
    • ”Bias” must be confirmed by a Moderator.
    • 3-ways are inevitable. In order to provide a tie-breaker in a 3-way, you are now required to indicate in what order the contestants finished (1st, 2nd, 3rd).
      anyone who does not show or vote is suspended one week and must sign-in again to be inserted the following week.



    Topics: http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=1032063




    From now on if you don't vote in the tournament and win your match, you will be deducted a vote from your next match for every vote didn't give the previous week. If you show late and your partner allows the extension as long as it’s less than a day late, it can count, but you will be deducted 2 votes for showing late regardless.

    These rules will be put in effect starting now and won’t be modified again. I’m not bending or breaking anymore rules for anybody.


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    Must READ: You must pick one of each topic to give your opponent some protection from choices and also so there isn't several verses written on the same topic that everyone has picked to be used.

    So pick one of the Title and Phrases, one of the Quotes and one of the Pics for your opponent.

    Thursday is the deadline for choosing topics or your opponent will get to pick their own topic. Topical choices must be posted in match threads by deadline.


    All other rules that are applied in the league will also be enforced for regulating the tournament. If you're not familiar with the rules of the RSTL, please read them.


    The only difference will be that in this tournament, your opponent will get to pick your topics for you. Topics must be picked and posted within the match thread within 1 day. If it's not posted, the opponent of the person that didn't pick a topic in time will get to choose his/her own topic. You must choose one of each kind of topic for some variety.


    So... topics will be up Wednesday 12am PST every week and topical choices are due Thursday 12am PST and verses are due Monday 12am PST, 3am EST, 8am Greenwich with votes due Wednesday 12 am PST, 3am EST, 8am Greenwich

    Also, there will be no recycling allowed. Nothing you've ever posted anywhere online will be allowed. The mods will be checking verses for authenticity with online search engines.




    ASK has -1 vote for not voting last week.
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  2. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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    TOPICS FOR YOU

    Immoral actions

    In the right light, at the right time, everything is extraordinary.
    Aaron Rose

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  3. A.S.K

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    Topics for you sir

    Loving the darkness

    We must not say every mistake is a foolish one.
    Cicero

    and that picture of the hallway full of pictures, osrry cant link it at the mo...



    good luck bro
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  4. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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  5. DiC GeTs GuLLy

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    The Cameraman



    Aluminous views; angles creating a beautiful hue
    As light flashes, the night clashes and then exudes with the moon
    Wind circles around a pile of leaves over a porch
    I turn that vision to a style of peace and holy remorse


    My camera's a gun that pauses time when candidly done
    A portrait of life is born in my eyes and then is expunged
    Armature runs are made during daylight spans of the sun
    Catching unsuspecting victims having family fun
    But after that settles I unmask the devils hidden from public
    So when it goes public, I'm commended on the pictures I publish
    Exposing the secrets with hopes to benefit from knowing their weakness
    Pretending they're descending for my sight and posing beneath it


    Viewing through the Darkness

    Divinity’s captured in the tiny mega pixels right after
    Loving the darkness more, my heart's absorbed to equip disasters
    Caught George Bush Sr. and Jr. in a nasty design
    Tied in leather straps and taking turns slapping their spines
    With paddles and twine, during the downloads, I laughed til I cried
    Emailed a copy and an account to put the cash in that night
    And I don't tattle on guys if they play by the rules
    Don't double cross me, they'll be sorry and wish they paid for my proof
    From R. Kelly holding his candy to scenes with Roman Polanski
    The famous director with a 13 yr old showing her panties
    Loving these criminal acts that I get to extract
    But I always secure a plan B for when it gets bad
    This time I'm lead to believe that death is the theme
    Paid half upfront, I had to spy for accepting the green
    Which I was in desperate need for some debts of my greed
    So I followed from a distance: a professional sneak
    I've never been this nervous before and over yearning to score
    Viewed felony acts, but had to wait to see murder and more
    Still scared to get too close to this family's practice
    So I use remote control cars with camera attachments
    On TV, they seem too stupid to be planning these actions
    But I fear I know too much about these phantom assassins
    Their grandmother was a crazed serial killer to most
    And the father's a mob figure living in prison, we know
    But the mother's a respected member on their show
    Never thought mafia ties had her enlisting more ghosts
    Soon as I saw it, my jaw dripped as it sagged to the floor
    Blood was massively poured from this master of gore
    My asthma's restored, needing deep breathes, but don't have any more
    Gasping was short as I have an attack and crap in my shorts
    I awaken with kicks to my head, tied to a furnace
    Her three boys are wishing me dead and my life's feeling worthless
    I cry and it burns in the open cuts across my cheeks
    My face tingles in pain with my vision too glossy to see

    "Eeewww mah, he's shitted his pants. I'm not kicking this bitch
    These are $1200 boots, lets just kill him and split"


    She faces me; putting her face to me... staring so close
    I can see the hairs in her nose starting to flare as she spoke

    "You kids are some punks."
    She turns back around.... I'm kicked in the nuts
    "You pitiful shmuck.
    Tell me who sent you while you still have your tongue"


    Then the daughter walks in the room, which I never suspected
    Because she was a reporter too and that's how it's connected

    "Mom, I hired him to spy on them… you got in the middle.
    I can't believe you're doing daddy's work while he's locked in that shit hole."


    Mother Victoria slaps the younger daughter Victoria down

    "You've brought this stranger in our lives so you can torture him now."

    She hands her a bat and I'm used to patch up their family spat
    They might live in the light, but in darkness expanded their craft
    Collaborating to beat my ass and it turned to a game
    I'm the piñata spilling my fillings and emerged in the waste
    The Gotti Family's reunited so they treasure this moment
    And all it took was a media crook having his head ripped wide open


    Topic: Loving The Darkness


    Gambino Crime Family Cast

    John Gotti Sr.- Deceased ~ Grandfather/Old Gambino Crime Boss
    John Angello Gotti Jr. - Son and Father/Current Gambino Crime Boss in Prison
    Not in Story, but they’re the crime bosses and it’s their family

    Victoria Gotti - Wife/Mother
    Victoria Gotti - Daughter/Grand daughter/Reporter, Author
    John Gotti Angello Son/Grandson
    Carmine Gotti Angello - Son/Grandson
    Frankie Gotti Angello - Son/Grandson

    Since they most of them have the same name, I thought I'd break it down for you on who was who.

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  6. A.S.K

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    A young girl, confused with her place in the world
    Through a soot stained face tears created dirty twirls
    A shake of the head displays such dismay
    Cut on the lip highlighting her life’s decay
    Yet deep bruises tell more than she could ever say
    Poor child just grew up in a burst of pain

    And flames…

    Dark doorway framed in a blaze of beauty
    Orange waves left me fazed and afraid of duty
    Vicious flames paraded their vibrant colours
    Casting shadows of doubt on the frowns of my brothers
    Making a slow approach to the smoking home
    Grey whispers rose between stained wood and stone
    As my trained emotions froze out cold panic
    I thought of the young girl whose hope looked so shattered
    A dull glow in her eyes, I almost fell in surprise
    When she walked from the house without breaking a stride
    Seemingly unaware of the fire-fighters stares
    Till her tears flowed
    Now she wore air apparatus and clean clothes

    But the bruises…
    I hadn’t seen that abuse before…
    She must have fallen in the confusion…
    Down the stairs, hit the floor….


    Staggering through the sagging arch of the door
    I whispered pitiful prayers as I witnessed the fires roar
    A wilting flower sat scorched on a small ledge
    Teased by extinguished flames, now hung with heavy heads
    My eyes caught upon a selection of pictures
    Scattered carelessly
    Disregarded on the floor by the kitchen
    Burnt edges framed such a strange depiction
    Bulb flashes emblazed the young girls infliction

    She stood with a scared look…
    Against a plain white wall...
    Instant print out photos…
    No emotion captured at all…


    A second’s sense of confusion, I moved in an instance
    Placing a distance between myself and the pictures
    Beyond this room fire consumed half the house
    Floor beams above me creaked, threatening to give out
    As I peered through a dim light
    My hosepipe sliced into the deep gloom
    Only to be wholly consumed
    And as I searched and found myself truly heatless
    A man staggered from the smoke, coaked in darkness
    Flames tore at his side, he was far past saving
    Yet his eyes shined, brightly alive with desperation
    I tried to call for him to move my way
    But my words went unheard much to my teammates dismay
    He fell in a fight of pain, and most likely hatred
    Towards those who were so close to being his saviours
    I sprayed down his body, a sense of loss
    In the end, death is all a mans got
    It’s a tough job…

    I learnt a few days later when I returned to work
    A sick story had emerged from the house we’d seen burnt
    The young girl was called Lily, listed as missing
    Two weeks misplaced, such a beautiful face
    Which had been kept like a slave in a darkened basement
    Managed to escape just as the flames began raising
    The man I’d seen burn led a sickening lifestyle
    Captured poor lily, a twisted pedafile
    And how the fire started…?
    God knows...


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  7. A.S.K

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    Great Verse Dic, i hope it at least provided some competition

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  8. TaLi RodrigueZ

    TaLi RodrigueZ Washed Up Rapper...

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    Third match I've read...Definitely the best so far...

    DIC gets my vote here...

    ASK, as I was reading yours, I was hoping that you weren't going the direction you ended up going, not because it wasn't a good direction, but because I wanted to lol. I wouldn't have done it exactly like that, but once I got a hint that there was some sort of abuse, I thought damn, I wish I had thought of that first. So anyways, I'm pleased with the content of your piece. Your flow was pretty straight for the most part and stuff was more or less well-worded throughout. As far as DIC is concerned, I wouldn't have ever thought to write about that, but I fucking should have given the fact that I'm a bit of a amateur photographer myself. Damn you heathen. Pretty cool story. I found myself interested throughout. The flow was very smooth and the rhymes, more so that usual, were pretty much devoid of 'forceage' lol. I don't really watch the show much to know who any of them are, but I thought the story would have been fine even without that information.

    The big difference in this battle was the technical shit. ASK had a lot of detail but was pretty low on rhyming. DIC had pretty good descriptions in his but he also had superior rhyming in this case. So if the concepts were pretty equal, the execution favored DIC and that's why I went that direction. Best battle I've read so far though. Glad you all showed.
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  9. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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    holy shit @ this match.... ill bbl to vote.. but holy shit 2 u both.... i got alotta shit to say.....
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  10. Vigil

    Vigil Im infinite consciousness

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    D.I.C - YOU know how to craft a story, from beginning to end. This was a very enjoyable read, the imagery, flow, description, rhyming and storytelling were all really good, and im some instances, stellar. You're one of the few writers that has a grasp on all those areas of writing. I liked those first 14 lines the most, the writing was extremely well done. And then I liked how you took a turn and dwelled into the Gotti story, I thought it was really smart writing. I wish I can criticize your piece but I can't find a thing that I disliked. Also, you've got a good balance of writing elegantly and not so elegant and switching between the two when writing in a dialogue. I'd give you an example of what I'm talking about, your first lines were pretty graceful "Aluminous views; angles creating a beautiful hue/As light flashes, the night clashes and then exudes with the moon". And then you also write lines like "Eeewww mah, he's shitted his pants. I'm not kicking this bitch/ These are $1200 boots, lets just kill him and split." Thats one of the things I like about your writing, you know how to write in a dialogue and how to write when describing something. This was the best verse I've read this round.

    A.S.K - You're imagery and description was just as good as DIC's and in some instances, it was better. You laid out the scenario and the picture pretty well and you elaborated more so than DIC did. The ending was clever, and the verse was better the second time I read it because you wrote it with alot of clarity. The flow needed work in some areas, but it was good enough. I just thought the piece was great because of the imagery and the smart writing.

    This is the best battle of the week, both of you brough top-notch verses and deserve lots of credit. Although ASK wrote an intelligent and vivid piece, DIC's piece was more enjoyable to read and I liked his story better.

    vote - D.I.C
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  11. ConstantFlows

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    Vote dic

    Not to take away from ask, your shit was cool, maybe posting first would've helped u, but after dics verse urs just didn't feel impressive to me. Don't get me wrong ur shit was vivid as fuck, and had a cool ending but it read sloooow, I'm not tryna read a book u know? Good verse tho, nice to see some old heads write


    Dic -- ur shit was fucking narrated flawlessly, with flow and language crisp as fuck man, I am impressed at the fact that u impressed me again lmao. I'm loving this verse man it had humor and vivid details and everything, its almost surprising what u can pack into 60 lines, it didn't even feel like 60 lines it read so quick. The only thing I don't get is the fact u said he had a remote controlled car with a camera on it so how did he get caught? I mean if u got the car why would u stay in sight, u kno? I know he had an asthma attack and it was loud but why be close if u got the gizmo

    Whatever tho nice battle
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  12. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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    DIC-- verse of your life... never seen such flawless patternizing with words... never. Not even PERIL-EYES nor VERN could do this better... maybe with TRAP ... but dude... i was midway thru reading this and my jaws dropped... its like i wanna jack these lyrics and bust it to some beats...

    muthafuckin amazing..

    ASK - some of your lines brought imbalance to others... there's a certain element of perfection that i really look into when writing.. and im precise with it and i look to see how u make me identify it --- in this verse... much of it was more directed emotionally but describing the detail was the problem... it didnt work me to a level that DIC did...

    thatwas the defining moment for me to vote DIC totally...
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  13. _millz_

    _millz_ New Member

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    dic.....this was dope as fuck...great piece....prolly the best ive read from you really...the story line was ill...the word usage was basically flawless.mad impressed with this piece man.

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    ask...this was aite...you had it at times and at times you lost it....the story with the fire was somewhat original but i find the ending to be some kind of cop out you know...like it seemed to rushed and too forced.

    overall...dic was the more polished writer and his piece was dope as hell

    vote- dic
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