~My Words: Part 10~

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    My Words: Part 10
    A Mournful Acceptance

    My last poem...

    my words brought comfort
    my soul desperately
    needed...no longer am i a
    fiend for it...because my pain has
    painfully been defeated...by
    mournfully accepting
    my past...
    it's been holdin me back for
    too long...
    it's time to become familiar and continue
    on with a path that started 19
    years ago...
    i'm in search for my
    abandon destiny...
    and within it's depths i hope to
    find me...
    among the endless
    boundaries...
    and a the miles
    start to add...
    inevitability, i shall grow from
    boy to man...
    until then...
    i'm still lost with alot
    of questions...
    answered only by
    different opinions...how dare do i
    search for truth through
    deceitful men... though it's hard to tell who
    is which...
    and through search and understandin
    friendships end...
    but they say it's never to late to
    make amends...with a fellow
    lonely poet...
    to sit together at a table of harmony
    and trade poetic stories of the places
    we both went...(In search of???)
    together once
    again...the imagery, you can only
    taste it...

    there's not a feel
    of pain...because of this,
    sadly me and poetry shall
    spit ways...
    for she is no longer
    a helpful cure...
    no longer my
    allure...
    i wrote to ease the pain
    there's none anymore...
    truly, she's yours...

    A Keystyle Dedicated To Jana Wilson

    ~December 2, 1967
    November 14, 2001~

    I forgive you...
    test
  2. Botox

    Botox 3rd Degree Burnz

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    lol@i forgive u? WTF dawg?
    ANywayz, nice poem, i was readin it an i was really feelin it, the words an rythym jus got inside my body an i felt jittery naw mean lol. Nice dawg, keep up.
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  3. Teen Prodigy

    Teen Prodigy Short2003's e-child

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    as botox said.. nicely written.. i liked the flow.. and i felt the words...
    I hope you're not giving up on poetry though
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  4. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    Even though its keyed this is a really nice dedication piece, could seriously feel the sincerity in it..

    Stay up,

    much love

    peace
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  5. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    This is a Grand Dedication and a good way to leave it all behind...I lost my poetry to a Goddess...and I say it like it's my virginity, but it might as well be, something so rare and precious that you only get one of...Good shit Man...
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  6. Dark_Angel

    Dark_Angel Dark_Angel

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    grr i replied to this but it didnt show, it was a very heartfelt dedication and you can especially see the sincerity of it...really enjoyed this read, it had a very intense feeling for me...good work
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  7. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    Man that was pretty good. It seems like you made piece wit poetry and your ready to move on to what evers next. I know i could never give up writting it ant gonna hapen, But what ever nice piece man, you really took us through an intense series of thought.


    Stay Up, Much Love, Peace
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  8. TrufDXaggerator

    TrufDXaggerator New Member

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    MindSoul boi u be on some ish....u make things feel so complicated and deep almost lik Xero but he be on sum other other ish...but yeah yo u was mos def felt by dis poet..U really not writin anymore...and dis is a dedication is dis person really dead? i hate to seem so stupid but im really not sure wuts goin on wit that.Cus dis wus deep.
    Truthfuly Speakin and Truf Fully Spittin OUT
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  9. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    this was some nice shit...def. feelin it...keep it up
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  10. StubbilyMug

    StubbilyMug DayorDollar Records

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    the flow in the keystyle makes it easy to feel
    and it does flow nice
    its a good story and works nicely
    well done but i'd like to see more depth in your shit, because you have alot to be done
    nice man
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  11. illpoetical

    illpoetical raising the bar everyday

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    this was very emotion filled and flowed welll

    uno
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  12. Nebulaz

    Nebulaz fear God, not man

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    Mind - the element or complex of elements in an individual that feels, perceives, thinks, wills, and especially reasons

    Soul - the immaterial essence, animating principle, or actuating cause of an individual life

    With such a great poem from a great author.
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  13. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    how dare do i
    search for truth through
    deceitful men...

    This was a very wonderful dedication...in more ways than just one...alot of the lines in this piece touched me esspecially...in more ways than one as well...very very nice!

    mad love
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  14. mavrik...

    mavrik... Lyrically Transparent ...

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    mind-soul bringing it eh lol ...
    this was nice my mans, shouldn't give it up .. but it's all good, new things in life come along. anyhow, form was nice for a keystyle...content was that of what it is...a farewell piece, nice work with it though.
    stay up man .. and conquer the journies which come.
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  15. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    ^^^^^^^^^up
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  16. IvyG

    IvyG New Member

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    i'm in search for my
    abandon destiny...
    and within it's depths i hope to
    find me...
    -------------------

    these words hit home.. awesome flow..
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  17. Old Soul

    Old Soul Nipple Nibbler

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    Damn, this is bad news. Even though I scarcely visit this place, when I do, I look forward to reading your work.

    And, I also hope you don't lose the gift. That's what happens usually when someone "quits". It's happened to me a couple times. My newer work never matches up.

    Peace.
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  18. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    wow..this was very sentimental and emotionally twisting...it made me think that whoever passed if that is what happened that u never got to really know and now part of ur tree branch that belongs to ur tree u are in search of...i dunno...its hard to say..but jus offhand..it was a tasteful drop and keep ur head up..the angels are kissing u..REMEMBER THAT.. and when the angels whisper...in ur ear..u will want to write again...*hugs u*..~one love always~
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  19. eatemup

    eatemup New Member

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    this was defeinitly a tight piece loved this nice dedication
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  20. quruxley

    quruxley SHHHHHET MAN!

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    for a lack of better words..wonderful piece..really.

    "because my pain has
    painfully been defeated...by
    mournfully accepting
    my past...
    it's been holdin me back for
    too long..."
    test
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