My remix/cover of an EMINEM song. Feedback please?

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  1. PoppinTags

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    I picked this beat cause I simply felt that it complimented the verse best. Would love some feedback from fellow hip hop fans, since I'm new to this. Thanks guys!

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  2. Sin Skywalker

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    Not bad. Definitely got some potential. Think you could use a little more confidence to your voice but obviously that comes with time (you said you're new at this, right?) - how long you been spittin' for & where you from?
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    Been writing for quite some time. Rapping, not long at all. Yeah, the delivery needs work, that's what gets on my nerves most to be honest. Thanks for the feedback tho!
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    Freebass NAH NUDDAH

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    delivery gets on your nerves?....That's what rapping is, as much or more than writing.....
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    Oh, and I'm from Seattle.
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    No doubt, I understand, and completely agree to be honest. When I say, "gets on my nerves".. I mean, I struggle with delivery, more so than I do lyrics. So many rappers, put on a forced fake accent, that sounds good on records, but isn't true to who they really are. I guess I'm just trying to avoid that.
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    How do y'all feel about this one?

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    bro, rapping is frustrating, especially if you are a decent to good writer with little practice at actually spitting to a beat, and/or hearing your voice.....not sure who you mean by the forced and faked accent, but rapping is entertainment and rappers are extension of the characters which they are creating......the sound of your lyrics over a beat is beyond more important than the way your lyrics read, and that is why rap is a very hard thing to do well......your image should be an extension of you and you playing a character based upon yourself
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    Very good points, and definitely something for me to think about. I guess one rapper that came to mind, with regards to a forced accent, was Yelawolf (for whom I still like to be honest). Thanks for the honest criticism/advice. Probably some of the most useful stuff I ever heard, regarding rap.
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    Freebass NAH NUDDAH

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    no problem man, that is what i'm here for....keep posting up your progress with this stuff, and I am happy to critique and offer my thoughts for improvement.....It is part of what I do
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  11. Sin Skywalker

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    That was pretty dope, tbh.
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  12. PoppinTags

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    Thanks man, would you say it was better? And if so, what about it? I've noticed that I get lost in my work, and begin to have trouble identifying what sounds/looks good... Ya know? I'm sure a lot of people have that problem.
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    over thinking is one of an artists worst enemies or sometimes best friends.....what do you mean by what looks good?....sounds good is a tricky one, cause u said u have been writing for a long time and I bet a lot of your rhymes sound good without music...at least to you.....

    My advice here would be write with a purpose, like all of the random 4 bar-8 bar snippets that you have can be put towards an idea for a full song if/when you come up with a good idea for one.....it is about songs if you are taking this seriously, not just lyrics.....

    Also try making beats, that helped me when I was rapping, and I eventually liked that more and got much much farther with that.....also learn some of the business side of things.....if you have any questions ask me, I dealt with the music biz stuff for a long time
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  14. Sin Skywalker

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    Sorry I missed this but yeah I like the second song better. Not sure exactly why technically I just felt it was better overall. Might just be a preference thing or whatever.

    I'll listen again tomorrow after work and break them down more in depth if I get a minute though.
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    hey didn't you get the memo I'm the white rapper kid in this forum. Go kick rocks.


    Nah it was solid, your voice does sound similar to Em, and the meotion fitted the song. You do sound like you haven't rapper for ages, like you shall get better if you simply rap more.
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    if forced "fake" accents sound good then they are the way to go. Athletes force and fake themselvers to go hard in competition, the end result matters.

    Rapping and music is are spectacle, it's entertainment art, it's not hey this is how I am day to day, it's like an special extravagance version of a part of your life, or even something fictional, like movies.


    Why is it forced, it's performing not forced. They are not recording a conversation but a song.
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