~My Name is King~

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    My heart
    my foundation
    my last hope
    in it's depth
    broken into fragments
    of pain...
    some how, some way...
    i still manage to breathe the air
    of a new day...
    the air makes way to a
    heartless soul
    to bring new
    life...
    but it always fails
    time after time...
    is it possible to hear
    the voice of an angel...
    if you have no belief
    in it's creator...?
    walking on the same path
    of my makers...
    tears and ashes of weed
    fallin on my pen
    to my yellow paper....
    then a soft melody
    comes to play...
    19 years i've been haunted
    by the curse that has
    the last say...
    i stop living for reason
    when i learned you could die any
    day...
    they say you can hold
    the hands of god
    and he'll show you
    the way...
    today, i stretched my hands to the skies
    and got nothing but air and blinding
    sun rays...
    fuck a god, cause i only need
    a pen and purple haze
    to ease the mournful pain...
    my name is King (Malik)
    and i have no
    self control...
    cant even give my daughter a kiss
    without her asking what's that white stuff around
    my nostrils...
    i'm slowly realizin
    mary jane..
    is once again, beginnin to be
    my gateway...
    between these lines
    this king will become
    a slave...
    to the same substance
    that ruined his mohter life
    in the 80's...
    weakness and addiction
    runs through these blood
    viens...
    never wanted any
    offsprings...
    in memphis the apples doesnt fall
    to far away from their
    trees...
    nights i find myself
    naked, body curled
    in the death
    ball...
    My name is King
    i had no rise, but this is my
    downfall...

    written in astray
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  2. Codex.

    Codex. Dustin Brown

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    This was beautiful and tragic, good continuity of mood throughout and well finished. You really put your feelings into me.
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  3. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    i dont really know what to say...............
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  4. tk2oo3

    tk2oo3 New Member

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    beautiful.. nothin else to say
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  5. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    Damn cat...that's some tragic shit...I hope you get right with the Almighty one for your soul's sake. Aside from that, this was some powerful shit...and please tell me you ain't sniffin no dope. lol
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  6. Lil'Dragon

    Lil'Dragon [nOw iZ tHa TyMe tO AkT]

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    Dang, this is some deep shit! Didnt know u was a father, but i get where ur comin from abuot the addictions. Overall this piece was all whole, like the king analogy, and had it flowin from beginnin to end smotthly. Keep em comin king.

    <CheK>
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  7. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    thanks for the love

    uppin
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  8. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    that was beautifully written...very sad. you did a good job with this. sorry a situation had to arise where you felt you needed to write something like this.
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  9. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    thats one thing about your poetry, it reflects your name... you write from your soul with the smartness of your mind... this poem was sad, yet captivating as always! great poem bud.
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  10. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    thanks gemi

    uppin one last time
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  11. Wicked5744

    Wicked5744 Last I awoke, it was morn

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    Mind, you talk bout my pieces, you blow mine outta the water. This was kinda sad, yet very structured and the concept was somethin wicked. Peace

    As the ink flows...
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  12. unspoken1

    unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen

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    excellently crafted piece of literature you got here.....it was beautiful....i felt it beyond felt it ness
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  13. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    I'M BACK!

    lol.....man this shit left me at a lose for words...i still dont really know what to say....but i wrote this after i read your piece.....lotta people wont understand what i'm trying to say in this...but i think u will....

    its about me..


    They say im gifted
    Spiritually uplifted
    I’d never before admit this
    But my heart always saw
    What my minds eye pretended
    Not to see
    I spit in the water
    Ashamed of the reflection
    Of the man I had grown to be
    Fuck a god!
    Cause the only one on my side
    Is me so I slit both writs
    Outstretched my arms and
    Created my own red sea
    Dying to breath…
    But not yet gasping for air
    I’m trying hard to believe
    But I just cant picture him there
    We entered the kingdom
    They continued on, but
    I was not allowed to proceed
    Beacuse I was living the very
    Life that I begged of them
    Not to lead…..

    ...still not done...but thats what i wrote as soon as i read this joint...

    u inspired me!...lol
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  14. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    fuckin sleepers^
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  15. iceheart

    iceheart The Frozen Poet

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    he said it all lol
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  16. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    Blank is the expression on my face to feel the pain of another. But to become a part of it as you have made in this piece is truly great work...I Who Am King hail from far as my Sun Schorched Heart feels your pain...
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  17. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    Pain is a lesson that we all must learn, it's just that some of learn a lot faster and harder than most. Triumph through adversity marks the virtue of we kings, if only others could see as we do, maybe that would change things...Great Work...Hail Mind~Soul!!!
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  18. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    really good i liked these lines ^^^^^
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  19. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    man thanks for the love once again, didnt think i was gonna get much of a response like this....and lpoet nice lil piece u got there, feelin the rea sea part

    one luv
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    lpoet POET

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